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Review of Control  
Review by Isabella Morgan
Rated: E | (5.0)
I felt the character's strength building as I read your words. What a powerful and hopeful story. Breaking free from a controlling relationship is so difficult and takes such inner strength. I hope that the character is the only one who found the strength to shed those shackles. This poem would be very insperaational for anyone who has or is bound by the ties of a controlling or abusive partner.
I would encourage you to share this with any and every venue you can find to spread the message of hope.

Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Believe  
Review by Isabella Morgan
Rated: E | (5.0)
I completely relate to your words. The ultimate goal of many writers is to evoke an emotional response or make an emotional connection with the reader. You did exactly that. As I read, I heard my inner voice saying, "Yes, that's exactly it!". So kudos on a job well done. You have captured the essence of someone deeply in love, wrestling with doubt and hoping to discover happily ever after.
Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Their Adventure  
Review by Isabella Morgan
Rated: E | (3.5)
dobie mom,
I think you are definitely off to a good start. I see some real potential for a great story here. I would recommend paying close attention to changes in tense. The story seems to be in past tense, but does slip into the present in at least one section.
Your story flows well and is easy to read and follow. If I could make a suggestion for improvement, I would encourage you to elaborate on the setting and the relationship between Luke and his Aunt Sophie. As I was reading, I found myself needing to scroll back to the beginning to remember how Sophie was connected to Luke, It is apparent that the two have a special relationship, but a little extra information might help the reader understand why.
Overall, I think you have the makings of something very viable. Let me know when you have more added to the story, I'd like to join the adventure.
Thanks for sharing,
Isabella Morgan
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