Second line, second word "though," should be "thought."
I like the idea of living within something too huge to comprehend, a nesting doll of giants within even bigger giants. And we might only be aware of it in dreams or hallucinations.
It appears to be a writing challenge but some good raw material is here that can be edited and honed until every line is its own little world within the larger world of the poem, within the larger world of WdC, the internet, etc into infinity...
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