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Review of Jacarandas  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A very powerful and moving story about death, and the afterlife. Tying in war, and dystopian futures as well. I would have liked to have a little more on his life in Macau before this nightmare vision overcame him, Well done story.


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Review of Satori  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (4.5)

I love this look at the impact of Buddhism on a westerner raised in the Christian faith. I first encountered Buddhism back in 1979 in the Peace Corps in Korea. I even spent the night a few times at various Buddhist temples over the years and have become a Buddhist sort of but don’t attend regular services.


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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
i like this powerful story about a Sudanese immigrant's life in the U.S. I issued quite a few Diversity visas in my life when I was a visa officer. when the DV system was set up the original idea was to limit it to Irish immigrants - as it was being pushed by Teddy Kennedy. He was told that they could not just have a program for the Irish so it became a program focusing on countries that did not send a lot of immigrants to the U.S. Over time it has become dominated by Africans, Bangladeshis, and Mongolians for some reason. Many of whom settled in the DC area.


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Review of Unanchored.  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
good first entry. I liked the story, the mood, the passion the love for your dog


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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a wonderful story about an engaging couple of kids from the islands. I liked it. I spent time in Barbados when I was a diplomat. and have been to Jamaica a couple of times The Bajans like their hot sauce made with scotch bonnet peppers but their food is a bit too bland for me. They fry everything including fish. But Jamaican food is great.


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Review of Complex Numbers  
for entry "Montserrat
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
a wonderful true story about the wonders and horrors of nature running amuck. Seems a lot more of that going on lately. Perhaps we are really entering the end times? It does seem to be more common every year. I was in the Caribbean based in Barbados 2007-2010 but never made it to Martinique or Guadeloupe


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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Great narrative poem about an unnusual event. Gothic horror feeling prevades the poem. starting with picking up the strange gadget and pressing it stopping time in its tracks. I also like the pop cultural references.

these are my favorite lines:

I thought of gadget I had bought;
a Talisman someone forgot
that bore some long forgotten spell;
perhaps concocted deep in Hell

to shove reality aside,
then watch as life and death collide.
Confining me and me alone
to one tormenting Twilight Zone.




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for entry "hope
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
a hopeful poem about a girl named Hope and that name implies. We all need Hope in our lives and we all know girls like Hope that go through so much and show their resiliency the meaning of the word Hope.


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Review of Lucky Night  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I like whimsical, light-heart, warm tribute to the joys of drinking on St Patricks day in a bar. I like the Mork and Mindy references. Nannu nanu indeed and the reference to the pot of gold is a great line


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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
a poignant poem about nature and humanity's impact on nature. In this case the lowly oysters who are impacted by the humans harvesting them for food captures the mood from the POV of the oyster.


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Review of Spooky Mission  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
A powerful and moving gothic vampire tale. I like that the vampire is a woman as opposed to a man changes the dynamic a bit and shakes up the vampire team where the vampire is almost always a man. you set up a compelling storyline. the prose at times verges on "purple" prose style which is fine it works well with the vampire theme. Two minor points - you often end a sentence with a dangling adverb = would read better if you put the adverb in front of the verb instead of at the end. the use of the word fag is problematic. I understand that is a British term for cigarettes but to an American ear it sounds like an anti-gay slur. As I said minor points. Overall a good story.


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Review of Quickened  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
powerful and moving poem about the coming of Spring after a long winter. I like the imagery and the feel of looking at the coming of May recalling shoveling snow in the winter and dreading the coming long hot summer


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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well done. I am living in Korea but visit the US every year for an extended period. I think you are right on the money if Trump is re-elected. I would see him doing the following once he is back in power

setting up camps to house illegal aliens, the homeless, and political protestors. these camps could also house Muslims and other religious minorities.

all prisoners would have to work as essentially slave labor

withdrawing troops from overseas and stationing them along the border closing the border

Outlawing birthright citizenship

adding Dreamers to the list of potential deportees

withdrawing from all international climate conferences

outlawing the Trans community by declaring that there are only two genders assigned at birth, and any one who attempts to change their gender is suffering from mental illness

outlaw same sex marriage and allow states to recriminalize gay sex

deny security clearances to the LGBTQ community

if the SC rules against him he will just ignore it

gut the federal government of anyone who is not a loyalist


every day I think we are getting closer to becoming a failed illiberal state like Hungary, Turkey or Russia.


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for entry "Brain Storm
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (4.5)

a powerfully writen poem about the experience of being hit by a lightening bolt and living to tell the tale. Very powerful imagery and emotional impact


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for entry "Bridge
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)

A poem about a bridge to somewhere, a portal to another world rich in imagery, and good use of slnt rhymes ushc as pass/gruff. room/life and nowhere/somewhere and good symbolizm and imagery such as covered, trolls, gruff, pace of life etc.


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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
a poem rich in imagery, symbolism and history about a famous covered bridge in Quebec that has stood gaurd for over one hundred years


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Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
love this acrostic ode to the joy of spring especially liked the last stanza

**R**ejuvenation in every blossoming
**I**ridescent beauty, a world gently whispering
**N**ew beginnings shimmer, their brilliance takes wing
**G**lorious renewal, a symphony life will sing

nicely sums up the message about the beauty and renewal of spring


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Review of Heart  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
a powerful free verse poem about love, lust, desires, and broken hearts.


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Review of Long-held Dream  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
this is a great ballad free verse sonnet utilizing traditional meter, and great use of poetic techniques including rhyme, alliteration, personification, metaphor, and simile to tell a love story, and finding your dreams. The use of Tagalog words enhances the poem and you hit all the prompt words.



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Review of One of Them  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
a powerful and moving poem about the seductive power of religious cults. Here in Korea there are lots of cults, several of which have been featured on netflix documentaries. what cult were you involved with and how did you escape it's grip?


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Review by JCosmos
Rated: E | (5.0)
great rant about the contemporary right-wing nut cases in the U.S. and their use of false narrative, red hearings, whataboutlism, and projection. hits it squarly on the nail.


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for entry "GATEWAY
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
nice use of anaphora and repetition of the first line to create the mood and format of this free verse exploration of gateways that we find everywhere in this world if we look for them. I like the last few words the best happily, sadly, angrily, wistfully, permanently, temporarily reflection the duality of existence


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Review of Feline Wrath  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This great poem is about giving a cat a bath. Cats are strange creatures. Perhaps aliens from another dimension? BTW Bing AI Microsoft edge does a great job of poetry analysis. I have been analyzing poems mine and others using this tool for about a month. I thought you might find its analysis useful. I always ask the following question please analyze this poem indicating meter if any, poetic techniques used, diction, theme, tone, word count, lines and possible form here's what they found


This is a humorous poem that describes the speaker’s regrettable attempt to give his cat a bath. Here is my analysis of the poem:
• Meter: The poem has a meter of anapestic trimeter, which means each line has three feet of two unstressed and one stressed syllables, such as “He nev / er should / have tried”. This creates a fast and lively rhythm that suits the comic tone of the poem.
• Poetic techniques: The poem uses several poetic techniques, such as:
o Rhyme: The poem has a rhyme scheme of AABB CCDD EEFF GGHH IIJJ KKLL MMNN, which means the first and second lines of each stanza rhyme with each other, and so on. This creates a sense of order and harmony in the poem, contrasting with the chaos and conflict of the situation.
o Alliteration: The poem uses alliteration, which is the repetition of consonant sounds at the beginning of words, such as “water touched its wrath”, “bathroom tiles was a treacherous sea”, “panicked splashes”, “damp fur, indignant ball”, “hissing, furry rasp”, “missile sleek and wet”, “suds and strife”, and “sovereign in the night”. This creates a sense of emphasis and sound effects in the poem, enhancing the imagery and mood.
o Assonance: The poem uses assonance, which is the repetition of vowel sounds within words, such as “eyes ablaze”, “lightning paws”, “spirit of revenge”, “humbled, damp, and bruised”, and “creatures hate the wet”. This creates a sense of resonance and melody in the poem, adding to the musical quality and expression.
o Onomatopoeia: The poem uses onomatopoeia, which is the use of words that imitate the sounds they describe, such as “screech”, “splashes”, “hissing”, and “catapults”. This creates a sense of realism and vividness in the poem, making the reader feel like they are witnessing the scene.
o Hyperbole: The poem uses hyperbole, which is the use of exaggeration for effect, such as “eyes ablaze like burning coals”, “a missile sleek and wet”, and “the cat had claimed a victory, in every single bite”. This creates a sense of humor and drama in the poem, highlighting the speaker’s perspective and emotions.
• Diction: The poem uses a mix of formal and informal diction, which is the choice of words and phrases. The poem uses formal words such as “wrath”, “treacherous”, “indignant”, and “sovereign”, which create a sense of contrast and irony between the high and low registers. The poem also uses informal words such as “dog-eared”, “lad”, “snuggle”, and “Teddy Bear”, which create a sense of familiarity and warmth.
• Themes: The poem explores several themes, such as:
o The folly of human arrogance: The poem shows how the speaker’s attempt to give his cat a bath was a foolish and arrogant act, as he underestimated the cat’s intelligence and will. The poem suggests that humans should respect the nature and preferences of animals, and not impose their own standards or expectations on them.
o The conflict between human and animal: The poem shows how the speaker and the cat engaged in a fierce and violent struggle, as they both tried to assert their dominance and survival. The poem portrays the cat as a formidable and cunning opponent, who used its physical and mental skills to escape and retaliate. The poem also implies that the cat has a sense of pride and dignity, and does not appreciate being treated as a toy or a pet.
o The humor of misfortune: The poem shows how the speaker’s misadventure with the cat was a source of humor and amusement, as he narrated the events in a witty and self-deprecating manner. The poem uses exaggeration, irony, and contrast to make the reader laugh at the speaker’s predicament, and sympathize with his pain and regret.
• Tones: The poem has several tones, such as:
o Humor: The poem expresses the speaker’s humor and amusement at his own folly and misfortune, as he used playful and sarcastic language to describe the situation.
o Regret: The poem expresses the speaker’s regret and remorse for trying to give his cat a bath, as he realized that it was a mistake and a waste of time and energy.
o Admiration: The poem expresses the speaker’s admiration and respect for his cat, as he acknowledged its strength and cunning, and its ability to defend itself and take revenge.
• Word count: The poem has a total of 224 words.
• Lines: The poem has a total of 28 lines, divided into 14 stanzas of 2 lines each.
• Possible form: The poem has a possible form of limerick, which is a type of humorous poem that usually has five lines, with a rhyme scheme of AABBA and a meter of anapestic trimeter. The poem follows these characteristics, except that it has 14 stanzas instead of one, and each stanza has two lines instead of five. The poem also has a similar structure and tone to a limerick, as it tells a funny and absurd story, with a twist at the end.



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Review of The Big Catch  
Review by JCosmos
Rated: E | (4.5)
nice poem about fishing. really captures the spirit of fishing in a lake. I would have made it a dark twist at the end with the giant fish grabbing the human and dragging him into the lake for his dinner... hmm I will write that up! inspirational poem


BTW i discovered that Microsoft Bing and Google Bard (now Gemini) do very good jobs of analyzing poems so just for a lark I asked bing to analyize your poem and this is what they found

Sure, I can help you with that. Here is a brief analysis of your poem:

Meter: The poem has a free verse meter, meaning it does not follow a regular pattern of rhyme or rhythm. However, some lines have internal rhyme, such as “pole before” and “water” in the first stanza, or “pull” and “jerked” in the second stanza. The poem also uses enjambment, which is when a sentence or phrase runs over from one line to the next without punctuation, creating a sense of continuity and movement.
Poetic techniques: The poem employs several poetic techniques, such as imagery, personification, and contrast. Imagery is the use of vivid and descriptive language to create a picture in the reader’s mind. For example, the poem uses imagery to describe the lake, the pole, the fish, and the splash. Personification is the attribution of human qualities to non-human things. For example, the poem personifies the fish as “growing tired” and the reel as “moving”. Contrast is the juxtaposition of opposite or different elements to create interest or tension. For example, the poem contrasts the calmness of the lake with the excitement of the catch, or the slow reeling with the sudden splash.
Theme: The theme of the poem is the joy of fishing and the connection with nature. The poem expresses the speaker’s enthusiasm and satisfaction for catching a largemouth bass, as well as their appreciation for the beauty and tranquility of the lake. The poem also suggests a sense of adventure and challenge, as the speaker struggles to reel in the fish and feels the thrill of the splash.
Tone: The tone of the poem is positive, lively, and celebratory. The poem conveys the speaker’s happiness and pride for their achievement, as well as their admiration and awe for the fish and the lake. The poem uses words and phrases that indicate excitement, such as “grabbed”, “jerked”, “holding the pole as high as I could”, “didn’t want to lose my catch”, and “SPLASH”. The poem also uses exclamation marks and capitalization to emphasize the emotion and energy of the speaker.
Word count: The poem has 86 words in total.
Lines: The poem has 20 lines in total, divided into five stanzas of four lines each.
Possible form: The poem does not follow a conventional form, such as a sonnet, a haiku, or a limerick. However, it could be considered a narrative poem, which is a poem that tells a story. A narrative poem usually has a plot, a setting, a character, and a conflict. In this case, the plot is the speaker’s fishing experience, the setting is the lake, the character is the speaker, and the conflict is the struggle to catch the fish.
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Review of WDC Pro-Tips  
Review by JCosmos
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Rated: E | (4.5)
great series of articles explaining in details all the great features that writing com offers its membership, but, many like me, are not taking advantage of all it has to offer. This gave me some food for thought.


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