The concept was actually cool...I think I was thrown aback by the sense of chaos in this piece. Maybe a softer structure, something that flows a bit easier. There seems to be many things going on that can be conveyed I guess, more gracefully. But honestly this was a wonderful write! I enjoyed reading it :) keep up the good work!
great imagery~although I found myself searching for the emotional wording to be more profound. This was a great write and keeps one reading. "Fiery explosion of smoke" and "solid ebony marble" are very descriptive phrases that made this particular short write very interesting. I have read some of your other work awhile back and absolutely enjoyed it! keep it up~~
wow-what a moving letter! I really enjoyed reading this particular piece-I think it is very poetic and almost cryptic. "The silence of graves..." was a great visual line-I also liked "By August we'll be choking on dust..."- Awesome write-hope to see more of your work in the future-Judah
That is one of the sweetest letters I have ever read! It's so expressive and every word is phrased so beautifully. You conveyed honesty and raw emotion-absolutely breathtaking. Wow-enjoyed this letter very much-it left such a warm cozy feeling-great work! Judah
kind of cute- rather violent-but it was well written and very much creative. This piece had a great visual element to it- what a fun song if someone is in that particular mood-good job- keep up the good work- I'm sure people are waiting on the update!Judah
For some reason my review for this song didn't go through the first time-anyway, great anst song- the piece had a bit of a Staind aura to it- the emotions conveyed through these lyrics were touching, and I'm sure many out there will be able to relate. good piece-Judah
I thought this was a very moving piece-"I'm terrified at the depths of my own faithlessness" such raw honesty. This piece made me really think about my stance on the issues you tackled. Wonderful work!
This was a very inspirational essay!! My favorite part was " Lazarus awakening..." I felt this essay was upbeat,positive and very well thought out. It was very honest and it's emotional element was very well expressed! This was a wondeful essay and hope to see more work.
wow- this is a very expressive writing! I found this writing very heartfelt and very well put together. It was to the point and mixed anger and pain very poetically. Bleed me dry was good-I've used that line quite a number of times and thought I was so original! Great work!
This is a pretty sad song-but wonderfully expressed and the rhythym was great. It's hard to deal with loss-especially when it's a death because of the finality-but it's so healthy to express grief through poetry or song-or any artform for that matter-keep up the good work-wonderful piece.
Wow- deeply thought out and very socially concious piece of work-it expressed your concern and hope wonderfully. The brains that get splattered part was a bit dramatic-but I think that's what you were probably going for to get your point across. Great job!
Were you really under the influence when you wrote this or were you saying it in a metaphorical sense? Either way it was a very expressive piece of work and I enjoyed reading it. Don't you hate those times when it's hard to think of something to write?! Great work-keep it up
Interesting poem. This poem seemed to come straight from the heart and soul, it is expressed well and had a sweet ending. The "just like me and you" line probably should have been "you and I"- but no big deal- I think this poem is pretty cool-write on!
Wow..short sweet and intense. It wasn't sad or weepy- it was like "To infinity and beyond..." cool piece. I liked the symbolism used (final call, my story and it's sum) Being able to write about one's own death with such closure and in your face attitude is cool.
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