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I'm the lead editor for a small independent press, but I am on maternity leave for the next several years and thus not accepting submissions. I'll tell you my professional opinion on first chapters or short pieces and whether I would have accepted it or rejected it if I was looking for work. I've dealt most with controversial speculative fiction, and I'm most interested in polyamory a.k.a consensual non-monogamy.
Favorite Genres
Science Fiction, Historical Fiction, Fantasy, Romance, Dystopia, Erotica
Least Favorite Genres
stream of consciousness
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories, Novels, Fraternal Polyandry
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Review of Play Place  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is absolutely beautiful. Personally, I stopped tidying, except for toys that require supervision such as playdough and art supplies, and Husband picked up the slack.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

My youth never contained anything this wild, so it is an eye-opening read for me.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for requesting my review!

My press doesn't deal with poetry, but this does look like a skillfully crafted list. Each title is enticing, and the descriptions provide added information about what to expect.

I'm not quite sure what EP means here. Is each numbered item in the list supposed to be an EP, because it gives me the impression that each numbered item would contain multiple poems, and all the items combined would culminate in a full-length book?
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is indeed a beautiful story. You used some very vivid descriptions here.

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Review of الحياة  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I used my internet browser to translate this to English, so I will not comment on the grammar.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review of Intentionality  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review of Alex + Emily  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I like the realism here. However, I would like it better if a bit of honesty turned the situation around. What does she have to lose, anyway? Is she financially dependent on him? Do they want to have children?

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Review of COPPER  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is handy information. It could be even more compelling if you told a story about someone who used these tips.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

It would indeed be nice to witness a collab. Being a mom is indeed no easy task, though. You can't make time for anything without the help of others.

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Review of Alone  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Try having a toddler and being desperate for a few minutes alone. Everything should be taken in moderation.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

One of the most beautiful things I've ever heard from a partner was him asking if I'd had all my shots.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. Thanks for taking me on this journey with you.

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Review of The Wait  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

After finding "the one" when I was 18 and him cutting off communication with me because he was asexual and my hormones were a raging inferno, I've come to the conclusion that believing in only one can be quite harmful psychologically.

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Review of At the End  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Now I've got "We Didn't Start the Fire" by Billy Joel stuck in my head. I am by no means saying I'm innocent, but I have drawn a few lines in the sand despite pressure from others.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a great start. You covered a lot of emotions in a short span of time.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This is a good start, but when you say "This program," which one are you referring to? If you mean all the scholarship programs in various countries, it would work better to say, "These programs."

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

As I often tell my husband, we have the best democracy money can buy. That's also my favorite David Rovics song.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 18+ | (2.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I had difficulty understanding the meaning of this piece.

The grammar could use work. If you want a more in-depth look at sentence structures, I recommend reading "The Elements of Grammar" by Margaret Shertzer.

Happy writing, and I hope you enjoy it here!
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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (3.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This provides a lot of food for thought. Thanks for giving my mind something to chew on.

The grammar could use work. If you want a more in-depth look at sentence structures, I recommend reading "The Elements of Grammar" by Margaret Shertzer.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

You've painted a vivid picture with your words. I admire the colorful phrases you used to depict the setting.

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Review of Anonymous: Blurb  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This isn't my preferred genre, but most of the wording is appealing. I like how you included a question for sentence variety.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This was a lovely little story. Thanks for sharing this slice of joy.

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Review of Yes  
Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (4.5)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

I prefer my burgers without cheese, but I appreciate the brevity here.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

This has a very mysterious vibe. It's difficult to tell what's going on, but you've conveyed the mood well.

Formatting tip: please start a new paragraph every time the speaker changes in dialogue. This is standard practice in fiction and helps make the piece easier to read.

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Review by K5Rakitan
Rated: E | (5.0)
Welcome! I stumbled upon your work through the “read a newbie” feature.

Reading this recipe makes me feel young again. Thanks for sharing this joyful idea.

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