Aww that was really sweet I loved it it wasn't a long poem but you were able to fit in a lot of meaning and emotion. I know nothing much about poems so I don't try to write them. Anyways I heard from Angle In My Eye that you have an English degree and is good with grammar? I would love (if you have the time) it if you could have a look at my short stories and help show me where I have grammar mistake? I love writing but I fail in this area. Hope your able to help?
I had to read this twice to really get it lol but it was good. I liked your theme of the poem it was sweet and had a summers air feel to it. Congratulations on coming second with this one you must be thrilled? Keep up the good work.
The mc girl that you wrote seems to be a strong person and I like that. When you say 'flash fiction' what do you mean by that? This really was short did you ever write this in a longer version? It would have been nice to know more on how she felt going through her nine months and still being in school.
I like what you wrote but I have to say that I think I'm still trying to get my mind around it. I mean I think I got the message in the poem but I'm also not to sure? Are you trying to say that when we die others only remember us through the things we've done and that's why the shadow has now become her?
Wow that was something. The story was a good read but I think if you had detailed his time in 'The un House' more then I think I might have been more lost in the thrill and scary sense. I was really waiting at the end for his friends to come back (whether alive or not) and do something, don't know what though? But reading this for some reason makes me wanna write some scary stuff too and let me tell you the stories I know are all only true stories.
Lol I always think and plain of my stories/books before I start writing them but as I go on it may always change or there is always something added on. I have a whole list of books that I wanna write and that list always seems to get longer each time I see something, hear something or someone wants me to write something for them. But really when I started first writing I really did have only one story that I wanted to write. Funny isn't it.
This one is nice but seems very sad for the girl. If this isn't the end then you should finish it to when she finds the end of the hall or at least if she meets the god with no eyes. I'll like to read it again when your done with the editing. When I have more time I'll read more of your work but I do like this one it has a cuteness, pain, and longing to it. I hope you finish this one?
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