"Going to", not "gonna".
Twenty minutes, not 20
And Munch leaves at sunrise, not sunset.
Great concept, but it smacks of lack of research, and if you're going to write a Sci-fi story, you need to know the science - and you need to know it even better if you intend to break its rules.
First of all, orphan or rogue planets do exist. They're planets which formed in a similar way to ours, but then a neighbouring planet gets too close and boots them out of their solar system.
However.
A planet without a sun would have no light at all, the atmosphere would collapse, and any heat would come from underground, probably underwater. Any life would likely be aquatic and simple.
But let's suspend belief for a second. Let's say complex life did evolve - and evolved on the surface, and Space Kid is the result.
Space Kid wouldn't need night vision on their helmet.
If we look at animals that live in complete darkness on Earth, they're either blind, or don't have eyes at all, because they simply don't need them. Or they are bioluminescent. You can't compare them to nocturnal animals such as owls and cats, because their eyes are adapted to make use of the tiniest hint of light, which Space Kid wouldn't have.
Which brings me neatly on to another point:
No sun, no moonlight.
Even if such rogue planets have moons (how? What are they orbiting?) there wouldn't be any moonlight. What we see as moonlight is actually reflected sunlight, bouncing off the moon's surface. This is physics 101.
So we have an improbable alien that's evolved to live on the surface of an orphan planet, that can see, despite having no evolutionary need for eyes at all, let alone sight.
And, after evolving on such a world, this alien is somehow still compatible with a world that is as far removed from their own as it's possible to get - Earth.
That takes more than simply suspending belief - it takes abandoning it.
The simplest way to fix this is to have Space Kid evolve on a planet that orbits a distant star, somewhere far more compatible with our own planet. Maybe it's a planet on the outer edge of its solar system, like Pluto. You'd still be stretching belief, but it's far more plausible than an alien from a rogue planet.
https://www.space.com/818-orphan-planets-hard-knoc...
Now that's the science lessons out of the way.
Why is it Space Kid who goes and checks that Munch's parents are asleep? That wouldn't be natural.
If they can find their way to the site in the dark without maps, why does Munch need it when going home?
There's no real sense of suspense, of danger, of getting caught.
Are they watching the moon, or the sunrise? If so, why do they have to stay out all night, instead of sneaking out an hour or so before sunrise?
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