Some verses are...You should ask from someone, who really knows poetry....but maybe....It's not 'ing, king' - thing, but the length issue. I still got your point. And it was not hard to say the lines. From the reader's POV, that is.
You made me emotional, even I can imagine you have written this to your husband. Some of the...lines....are..a bit long. Maybe it's just me. I mean maybe I haven't used to that long lines. But the poem is very nice. I like it.