You can write. Emily's in desperate situation and she decides to do the desperate, final thing. The reader is able to sense her anxiety. Keep up the great writing!
Sadness,anxiety, giving up. All those feelings I am able to read from this text. Those feelings have become familiar to myself too. You wrote them very well. Life is not always sugar and spice and everything nice. Sometimes it's very dark.
Keep up the great work!
This is easy to read and understand. Language is clear. The reader doesn't need to guess what she should do in case she wants to send them something she'd want them to publish.
Very interesting! First I thought this would be fiction. It still may be that. Then I thought it's a story from your school years. A story based on true events.
The length is OK. But one could think this could be a first chapter of something. I do not know what. The end of this piece made me think in such a way.
Whatever this is (true / fiction), it is easy to read. You can write! Keep up e good work!
You can write! Interesting piece, but clear enough to understand the story. You let the reader guess to the end about if they survive or not. You have a talent. Keep up the great work!
Those two girls were not very nice. I'd keep them as some sort of bullies. It wasn't fair they did what they did.
But you sure can write! This pulls the reader like a magnet.
Hi!
This sounds interesting. The rules are clear and easy to follow. I also appreciate you show a concrete example of that b - item, because I don't use it very much.
Thank you!
Best,
Lucinda
You know how to end in dramatic way! I had to read the whole story. I never saw that end coming. Never! You can surprise your readers, oh yes you can.
Keep up the great work!
I remember that terrible event that happened all those years ago. I could easily imagine someone, who has been through that horrible event, writing something like this. I am sorry for everyone who had to face it. I can't even imagine how it must've felt.
You can write very well. Keep it up!
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