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25 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
I don't like to pick things apart. One of the reasons for this is that my perspective may not match the intelligence level of the author, so I like to keep it simple.
I'm good at...
Picking up on grammar and structure.
Favorite Genres
Fiction, Horror, Mystery, Sci-Fi
Least Favorite Genres
Political, Religion,
Favorite Item Types
Short Stories
Least Favorite Item Types
Essays, Articles
Public Reviews
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Review of Ooey Gooey  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*Donut7* Story Overview: George the graveyard worker was an overworked, regular guy who was minding his own business when he's overcome by a miscellaneous goo hiding in the leaves!

*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB* Love your use of the scrapes and scratches. Definitely a creepy element!
*BurstB* The description of him scratching himself with the rake. *shudder* brilliant
*BurstB* The raking at the end was great!

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV* "What it did seem to be doing..." this sentence seemed a bit wordy.
*DropV*

*BareTree* Overall Impression: I can only imagine what it's like to be the groundskeeper at a graveyard. It would take a character such as George to be humble enough not to believe in stereotypes and the like. Perhaps maybe he should have, being taken over by the ominous goo! I loved this story, you did a great job describing the setting and the little details that make a person's hair stand up! Write on!
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Review of The Shift  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Donut7* Story Overview: A human begins by writing in her journal, hopeful for escape, dead or alive. There were other humans but they were all murdered, leaving the main character alone. By the end of the story, the main character has "shifted" into a werewolf.

*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB* loved the way you describe the room your main character was trapped in
*BurstB* you perfectly described how your character ended up in this situation
*BurstB* I also loved how you described how the character felt in the midst of the shift from human to werewolf.

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV* you mention your character giving a speech but I see no specific references to why the character had given it.
*DropV* if the character truly didn't want to be a part of them, maybe the character could have shown more of a struggle
*DropV* where did the crowd come from? The setting transition seems a bit confusing.


*BareTree* Overall Impression:
This character you've created sounds like maybe they secretly wanted to be turned. mostly because of the speech and how the character didn't put up much of a struggle when it came time to be bitten. I was a bit thrown off when trying to envision the setting, but overall I still felt the fear and anxiety of the character awaiting the next thing and deciding at the end that the past was just that, and everything is different now. Great Job!!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB* I wasn't sure what to expect when I read the title! Such a cute ending to tie it all together!

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV*none

*BareTree* Overall Impression:: I enjoyed this simple and short tale of the mind of a child and how they express themselves! I can only imagine the look on the little one's face that made Paul continuously ask!
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Review of Rock Climbing  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.5)
*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*BurstB*The ending was great, I wasn't expecting that!

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*DropV*none

*BareTree* Overall Impression:
Thanks for sharing your experience with this! I can't imagine how it felt to be stuck, hope you didn't panic too hard! I was left wondering whether you went climbing again the next day! Great little story here!
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Review of The Luck I Carry  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.5)
*ThumbsUp* What I enjoyed:
*ButtonB*I like the way you illustrated digging the worms out of the ground! I wonder how many people actually do that anymore!

*ExclaimV* Hiccups:
*ButtonV*The rhyming scheme seemed a bit forced
*ButtonV*Wasn't sure how the blackbird contributes to the fishing trip

*BareTree* Overall Impression:
What a great poem about the life of someone who likes to fish and hunt!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.5)
What a beautiful poem about unicorns! Thank you for sharing your vision of unicorns and how their freedom must not be tainted by one's greed to own something that can never be owned! I loved how you illustrated the setting as a bystander just watching the unicorns frolic about. Great Job!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.0)
What a fun piece of poetry. For a minute, I thought I was reading something written by Dr. Seuss! This must have been very fun to write, because it was definitely fun to read! After going over the prompt, I'm a little miffed that I didn't get a chance to participate in this one! Great Job!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Dang. You really put things into perspective, here. I, personally, am not into politics, I just try to ignore them because of the emotions they inflict on the general populous. Since the title was called, "History Repeating Itself," You really capitalized on the fact that history repeats itself because of the fact that we not only ignore the past, but try to change or delete it, altogether. (Ex. When you said "..politicians, who want to bottle history using their own recipe). This is a fantastic analogy! Well Done!! *ThumbsUpL* *ThumbsUpR*
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Review of Surprise  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.5)
This was very cute! The ending was great! The suspense was killing me, I couldn't wait to find out what was in her backpack! I was also interested to find that her 3-year-old was already a proficient liar. That's not something I see everyday! Way to go!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.5)
Luck is a fickle thing, isn't it! I liked the creativity here, it almost had a looney tunes feel with the piano falling and all. I like how you illustrate the duality of luck, it can be bad or good, or sometimes it's both or neither! I can see how this piece was a winner! Great job!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
So awesome to see another tarot reader in this community. I could picture every card as you were describing them, the meanings were on another level than those who have no knowledge of this type of divination. You have such a deep soul, especially with Death and Judgement in the spread AND the Kind of Swords. At some point I was expecting the Tower to make an appearance. Thank you for sharing this part of your soul. I truly enjoyed it.
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Review of TIME STANDS STILL  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
or maybe this is hell. Great poem! It really speaks to the current events, the way California is getting more rain than I remember, and people are so afraid that it won't be long before it becomes cutthroat just trying to buy eggs and toilet paper. Thanks for sharing!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (5.0)
Reading this makes me want to go exploring! (New heights, you could say)! I can only imagine how many steps there were, along with that feeling you get when you look back at the ground you've already covered! I liked the simplicity of your poem, it wasn't at all hard to grasp the excitement and the triumph! πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ˜Š
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Review of The Corpse Reader  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! I LOVED reading this! The way you describe the visions, she was having along with the emotion Cecile felt about being around the white men, it was all so authentic! Her obligation to work for them and against them had a very real feel to it. Your writing style is engaging, I'm glad I stumbled up this!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.0)
Cute! I loved the beginning because my husband is the same way. I tell him he snores but he denies it. I'm getting that Alice was driven to madness by Ken's snoring, due to lack of sleep. I feel like maybe Ken would have put up a struggle while he was being suffocated, though. The last sentence in the first paragraph, I feel like you overused the word "so." I still enjoyed it, though! Great job!!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Well... this was...interesting. Great! It was titillating, to say the least. If you were going for sci-fi erotic, you definitely nailed it! Overall it was a fun read, although I'm not sure if you're writing this for a video game dialogue or what, (the "Saves Location" is what threw me.) Though I don't have much experience with reading whatever genre this is. Nonetheless it was still fun. I saw a few grammatical errors, you may want to use a program like Grammarly or a similar application to smooth out the edges. Other than that, great job!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.0)
I love the statements you have made here. Ethics should never be without regard, most especially when it comes to journalism. I appreciate that you have taken the time to write this article to inform people of the importance of ethical behavior, because not very many people, today, even know what that even means. That being said, I thought your article was fantastic, though I saw a few grammatical errors, you may want to use Grammarly or a similar application to clean it up a bit. Otherwise, great job, and thank you!πŸ‘
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Review of Pluming  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.5)
Such truth put so simply! Will the plumbing ever work correctly? And how much is it going to cost each time? Surely the plumber is tired of seeing the same number on the call screen. Were you having plumbing issues when you wrote this? I can feel the energy of frustration, anyway. Fun read!! Great job!
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Review of Her  
Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.5)
First note: this was extremely engaging. My attention was held all the way through to the end. By the time I reached the last few paragraphs, I couldn't wait to see where you were going with this. When I reached the end, I realized this is how most people probably feel on a lonely night, going to a club or a bar just to be around people, trying to attract at least one person who wants to be in your company. Doesn't matter who it is, as long as it's someone. After so many days, and months, and years of doing this, and all the scenarios become de javu, the silhouette of companionship being the only important element. Very well written. Great job!
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Review by Luckie πŸ€
Rated: E | (4.0)
You are definitely right about accepting yourself in order not to care what others say. I love how you illustrate the importance of loving yourself, because this world we live in is definitely cruel, and there is rarely any real common decency. Truly a powerful message, which I loved! I only have a couple of critiques: I wouldn't start a sentence with the word "because," and I see one misspelled word, and there are a lot of sentences that begin with the word "you." Otherwise, thank you for expressing this message.
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