|Hi, Shawn. I'm rather taken aback by your poem, because my son's best friend's brother was 23 when he died of an overdose this past May, He was like one of our children, often over at our house with his brother. In addition, my niece is a recovering addict. She served time in prison before starting to turn around. Your poem hits me hard, but I'm really glad to have the opportunity to review it!
Ok, grammar in first line of second paragraph: there your use of "it's" is incorrect. It should be "its."
Third paragraph, first line, simple typo -- lower case "i" instead of "I."
Fourth paragraph: the last line is a little confusing, and I had to read it and reread it in order to find the right rhythm and figure out exactly what you meant by it.
Fifth paragraph: An idea for the second line so that you don't need to repeat "looking forward" is "I arrived at the diner, I couldn't wait to spend time with him," or just "I couldn't wait to see him."
Sixth paragraph: To be honest, the last two lines just don't seem to fit together. Just my opinion, remember. I think it is important to fit in somewhere that efforts to spend time with your friend had been deferred (I"m thinking you meant missed opportunities here?)
Overall, this is a good poem. I'm impressed with your ability to provide rhyme in such a lengthy poem and to do it so effectively! I suggest you migjht want to think about whether or not to use commas, periods, and so on; there are places where you use them and others you do not. Just one person's opinion, but I think that using commas will smooth out the reading of your poem. Thank you for sharing such a personal experience. --Mandicheri