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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Good, bad , odd and nonsensical. I'd welcome them all but that's ingenuousness of a newbie I presume.

Unless it isn't completely reserved for the newbies and this was a concealed showcase of the many reviews you so gratefully cherish and adore? Nope? I didn't think so, it couldn't be. I've read your work! ;)

From a pathetically awing newbie
Rated: E | (4.0)
Although several attempts to highlight an amicable relationship between you and your parents, for me the piece read aggressively.

I think largely due to the almost militant directness of the piece I found myself seeking further explanation of why you were detaching yourself from your parents if they were so special to you.

Overall it was concise and explanatory which was great.
Review of One Tooth Less  
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think a congratulations is due, CONGRATUALTIONS TYLER! What a well documented occasion.

Alas I think my own recollections of tooth loss were an altogether more subdued affair having already had the tooth fairy bubble popped for me. Siblings can be cruel lol.

I hope Tyler recieves a different experience and is graced with her presence.
Review of Sleep  
Rated: E | (2.5)
The poem didn't really create a mood for me and read like an excercise in rhyming.

I'm don't have a lot of experience myself so take from this review what ever resonates with you. I think your intension was a simplistic piece but maybe a tad too simplistice for me.

However keep up the work, we are all here to improve. Good luck
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