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"He had formed a vision in his heart, born of love felt deeply,
that salvation from his pain lay in the perfect symphony."
as for the rest I loved it... it flows, musically speaking; and is perfectly attuned with the theme, starting with a simple mystery it drew me in its world quickly and captured my interest right through.
It's really fascinating story telling wise, starts with a hook, moves into a meaty body and a conclusion; and I mean an explanation via the ending.. a complete story in a poem :) you could almost here a faint tune within the structure, I wonder if I can write a musical background that goes along with it .. maybe a soft keyboard melody to accompany the reading ...
some question marks remain though, besides the main account,
is the composer a ghost now, or some sort of undead count ?
and although we can guess, I'm not sure we'll ever know,
what happened to the lover, he seemed to treasured so ...
:) keep it up its awesome :)