I liked the title and theme of the poem. The first three stanzas are written but I felt that after that the poem seems more like a story than a poem. You did an excellent job in describing the qualities of the Thunderbird and it makes me want to see it in real life. Hope to read more from your side.
I loved the words you chose. The words rhyme and the idea is beautiful. Your poetry attracts the reader into world of imaginations. I loved the second stanza as the dancer is giving her best in the thing she likes. Overall you did a splendid job. Hope to read some more!
I like the concept and the moral. Try try again. It is simple with good moral/ I like Sarah, as she is optimistic and idealist. I think the story could have been presented in more beautiful way. Moreover, there are mistakes with capitalization of letters. You didn't start your sentence with capital letters. Please do not be discouraged by this review. Hope to read more from your side.
I like the title. The theme is simple. I would rephrased the second stanza as
"The path was new when I first started without you
Wandered alone but with adventures in my souls I missed you
I thank God, you joined me along the way
With you by side you completed me in a day"
Do not feel discouraged by this review. Keep writing will wait for more.
I liked the theme and humor in this short story but I felt that it could have been more humorous and few sentences could have been added to it. But overall it could be summarized as Simple and humorous.
Well Do write more of these and do not be discouraged by this review.
Printed from https://www.writing.com/main/profile/reviews/mehrujamal