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Review by m.m. morris
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I can definitely relate to this in these times. It is written very straight forward and I like that. I can almost recall having these same thoughts going through my head on my last grocery run.
I especially liked the last part. It is probably not the correct interpretation, but as I read through it the first time,

"Store noises clatter.
The overhead announcer
is unhearable."

That just struck me as what disgusts me when I see the selfishness people so easily exhibit... stuck in their own noise, unaware of common courtesy, looking out for one another... to those that are religious, I would say almost like blocking out the word of God.

Thank you. I enjoyed this piece very much.


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Review of FISHING  
Review by m.m. morris
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Paints a beautiful image of a nice day fishing. You make both options of boat or beach sound relaxing in just 4 lines.

One thing, the first 3 lines are 8 syllables and the last is 9, so just needs a quick revision there for the sake of the form.

Other than that, it's a nice, short, and sweet poem.
Thank you for sharing.


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Review of The Gypsy's Curse  
Review by m.m. morris
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well, that took an unexpected turn halfway through haha. This definitely made me laugh. I really liked how this poem had me in a state of suspense in the beginning and then the curse was finally cast and I was instantly smiling and laughing. Very clever.

I thought it had a good rhythm to it throughout the poem. I enjoyed your poem.
Thank you for sharing


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Review of Summer Retreat  
Review by m.m. morris
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I really felt the "heat" in your opening 3. The alliteration worked here and just put the image of a hot sunny day in my mind right away.

I feel that the 5 can use some revision. Just seemed a little unpolished, maybe even forced, especially after such a good opening to the poem.

Then, my favorite part was the closing. The 7 was really solid and closed out your poem nicely.
Thank you for sharing.


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Review by m.m. morris
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked the opening, although I'm not too sure I understood. Was it meant to paint a picture of a memory?
Or at least that is how I interpreted it.

I liked the rest of the poem. A simple, yet beautiful scene. I got a good sense of an Arizona morning.
Thank you for sharing.


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Review of Autumn Tanka  
Review by m.m. morris
Rated: E | (4.0)
Awaiting the coming and going of the fall. You painted a very descriptive picture with few and carefully chosen words. The last line was clearly my favorite, such a lovely way to describe the autumn leaves coming to and end for the season, but always with positive that they will return from their voyage next year.


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Review of I'm Not Done Yet  
Review by m.m. morris
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
"Not once, but twice did I almost die,
Time to gain control of my life, I have to try.
Because my family forbids me to go anywhere,
So I promise from now on to handle me with care."

It's amazing how I can relate to that 100%. I liked this poem because it was straightforward from the heart. I can understand exactly where your mind is.

Yes, you are not done yet. You have a lot left to give. Stay strong and keep showing resilience.


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