I like the style of this piece, the expression and message of it are wonderfully written. It's hard to say so much in very few words, and I know how carefully the words were chosen and they worked very well. It was nice to read, keep up the good work.
that is beautiful, not only did it flow well and set a good reading pace, it is filled with lovely imagery that drew the reader into the experience of it. it is a well written poem and i can feel the heart that went into it.
I like that, the modern world impeding upon ancient faerie tales, incorporating lovely description with fearful fancy, which was originally a big piece to the faerie tales story telling. They were not sweet or childish, they were adult horror and scare tactics for fresh mouthed or slacker youths. Percieving such old and ancient things would be fascinating, particularly through modern eyes.
That was a lovely and fitting description of being the parent of a son. I have 2, and they grow to fast, to soon. I have many hopes for my little men and one of them is that they slow down and enjoy being young, while they still can. One thing though, its actually 10 months the wait, having carried them, i can say that the tenth month counts.
I enjoyed this poem, it was well written with clever imagery and clearly made points. It was s good length and flowed well. It brought to mind the Ents in Lord of the Rings and the familiar Celtic traditions honoring the trees as guardians and ancestors. I did notice a typo on the last line, you meant to say plant and it says planet. That is the only edit I'd make. Its a lovely poem.
I enjoyed the strong beginning which sets the scene, and smooth, clean flow from one thought to the next. The language was also strong and contextual, almost interactive. I enjoy dark tales, and liked this one very much. Some of the language could be reworked though, to increase flow and clarity, to much description can distract rather than enhance. It was well done.
I liked the ideas and feelings being expressed but found some of the punctuation and line distracting from the flow of the language as well as ideas. The imagery was lovely, appropriete and clearly drawn. It is darkly empathetic. I like the way that it starts out, as a question that clearly defines the writers intention and emotional place. It needs some work but has great potential.
I liked the raw, honest energy being pushed forth from the writers soul. The questions and reasonings are clearly represented and their reason for writing it was well stated. I think its more likely that the writer feels a kind of disconnect or other people dont understand them. I get that, I dont think like everyone else or know how to react in situations that everyone else seems to understand naturally. It can lead to misunderstandings. And I'm not a person easily read due to my reserved nature. It can feel isolating. I connected to the work. Keep writing and you will find that person with whom you yourself feel comfortable sharing who you are with.
I love this poem, and it reminds me of someone I hold very dear who distances himself because he fears what his darkness may do to the people he cares about. I get the character of the poem, and have been drawn to the shadows myself. It was a good length and well worded, clear and filler with lively imagery. Well done
This poem is filled with lovely imagery and words but the language of it distracted me from the scene being set. Would look to reworking the language for clarity and flow. It is a good length and lively, filled with rich descriptive imagery. I enjoyed reading it very much.
This is other piece that begins strong, using language that is direct and honest without feeling abrupt. I like this authors style. I would like to see more detail in this poem to, to learn more about who the author is and why they are writing it. The main idea is well stated and clear, I would rework it some for increased flow but over all, it was well written and complete. Having the last lines relate to the first created a nice wrap around effect.
I enjoyed the straight forward style of the piece, how it jumped to the point in clean, clear and empathic language. I may look to reworking some of the lines to improve the flow of it thought, and add more detail such as which injustices and in which specif ways have they been faithful experienced by the writer. Over all, I enjoyed the poem. Well done
That was a very well told tale, and its hard to do in compact, stylized verse. I enjoyed the conversational flow of the piece, and the creative use of rhyme as it built up the imagery. The required words were a very random set and that presented a fun challenge. Overall I think this piece was well written and fun to read.
It was a good poem that told the tale of struggle, adversity the strength born of it, a memorial to the people who have struggled, fought, lost and rose up in the memories of people and the momentum of a civil rights movement. it was very well done. I would suggest perhaps looking at the language and wording a bit to increase the clarity and flow of the piece. Some lines roll of the tongue while others labor. All in all, id say thatit is a great poem that reminds people of who they were are not what they are and that the past does not dictate the future
Writing poetry is difficult because there is so much freedom and so many forms. It is about taking something abstract and giving it shape, finding the right words that fit and flow in the write places and telling a whole story in a compact fashion. This poem illustrates the writers love of poetry and fascination with the skill that writing it entails. they did a lovely job. I would take a look at line flow and language, at moments I found myself stumbling a bit. Overall, it was very well done.
That was an intense poem, I liked it. The form was engaging and interesting, the stream of thought flowed well, and at the same time conveyed a franticness which never intended to flow. I think that maybe it could be condensed a bit by looking at the repeated lines. I read through it several times and found it easier the second. That form is very hard to write and you did it well.
It is a nice, genuine and heartfelt piece, layered with intention and meaning. touching upon a theme that we have all known personally. You may want to considered reworking some of the language to increase flow and clarity. for example
"Do you look into my eyes to see the pain that I have in them"
I enjoyed the poem, the rich imagery and sense of action, springing from both mind and body. It spoke of triumph and struggle; facing veiled futures; losing ones way; perseverence; and desperate but determined Hope. It was well done. I found myself rereading it for full effect, perhaps some reworking on the flow of it? And at the same time, rereading it also reinforced those full effects in a mindful way.
That was a very pleasant poem to read, with easy flow and nice detailed descriptions. The language played with the senses especially in the lines "the life of summer listen to"; as I read it, the word life seemed to entwined with the word spirit. I really enjoyed reading it.
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