I have to agree very much so with this. As a newbie here only going on 2 weeks old I have received many positive comments and constructive criticism including some grammatical errors I may have made. However I have received (no names mentioned) from a person several very negative, harsh comments about a few of my works.
If a person doesn't like something that is fine, no need to read it just move on. But to tear someone down over phrasing, commas, wording and more then to say that they didn't even know what I was talking about to begin with. I'm sorry I can't accept that as a review but more of a bashing; especially when I go to their page and they have very little written at all.
Sorry for the Rant and Rave but I felt I too should voice.
I felt rather sad reading this in that your mother had passed on and you were apologizing for many things that were beyond your control. We can never do enough for a loved one and once they are gone we feel as though we could have always done more but either didn't or couldn't. I could feel anger in some of your words towards others who you felt should have done more but didn't. Unfortunately maybe for them it was even harder to deal with, feeling helpless that there wasn't something more that could be done.
A few moving and personal piece thank you for sharing and allowing me to read.
This is a very moving and emotional letter. Having lost my mom only two years ago I in some ways wanted to relate those very words in the church as I looked around at those who came and thinking about those who didn't. I could feel your own love and sacrifices made to help keep promises to her. Sometimes the hardest things to say come too late and never to be said at all.
Thank you for sharing this very moving and personal piece.
Rather intense, I can relate and feel the mood. The feeling of helplessness of wondering should I go on or not, am I alone here, what should I do. In very few lines describing so much of the inner turmoil and struggle going on of thought and feelings, wondering what really is the way out, what really is the answer.
Interesting piece and well put as I think many go through this especially as teens and young adults. I believe it expresses a lot of what many would want to say they feel but don't. Even reminds me of some of a time in my own teen years. Especially in the line how you feel as if you don't exist and of no importance. I believe that holds true in a lot of lives.
Rather interesting reading would like to see where this goes from here. I like the detail that you placed in the story around Max, this is something that has been questioned many times in the medical field rather a person in a comma could hear what was going no around them and what was going on in their mind. Will be keeping an eye out for more on this. Thank you for sharing and do keep writing.
As I set here reading I found myself wanting to click page after page, not wanting to put it down. I like what you have very much. I took the time to read some of it to my nephew wondering what a "Harry Potter" fan would think and he too liked it a great deal. I think you have an excellent idea I like how the plot flows as everything begins to develop, each step leading to the next.
I picked this as I hadn't seen many read it or say anything about it. For me though very short expressed what a person would see or feel about another or even ones own self. I felt while reading it as if looking into a mirror talking to myself, expressing what I saw in my reflection.
Wow! Was the first word that came to mind when I read this. I could actually feel and put myself in his place during high school. Seeing someone that he felt attracted to yet not giving him notice at all or eve knowing his name. I liked the way you had placed the events that led up to the end. I would add more to this but don't want to spoil the ending for anyone else who might want to read it.
To me an excellent piece in a short story form. Only my feelings but then I'm only one person with one view point.
I liked this piece a lot I could see little Jimmy being moved all around trying to find the best place for him to be. Funny thing is that at one time I was Jimmy myself as my voice crackled when I sang. I liked how as he grew rather then discourage he was encouraged wanting to express his feelings even if he did sing badly. Thank you for sharing and the opportunity of reading.
Reading this reminded me very much so of my time in the military, laying there trying to write home and not knowing what to really say. I liked very much how you emphasized that "playing army or war" is so very much different then living it. Those were some of my very own thoughts and feelings at times. It brings back memories that though were sad are ones that are very real and true. Ones that I believe are best not forgotten but to be lessons to learn from.
I think in your gene I would have included military and war with it. I believe there are a number of our active and prior military men and women who would appreciate this. Thank you for sharing and do keep writing.
I enjoyed this piece a lot. I liked the idea of using the photo along with your poem it not only helps but adds to the overall meaning of what not only you as the writer saw; but for the reader looking out over the playground and thinking. Makes you wish Spring would hurry and come.
Nice sounds like the ingredients of a perfect relationship. I like the word usage that you have and expression in the descriptiveness letting the reader feel what is going on. Nice work.
This is a very interesting folder that you have and the views that you have written in here I have to agree with many of them. Yes I did take the time to look around and read. Rather then commenting on the ones read I felt since the folder didn't have a rating yet I would be the first to let others know; very worthy of checking out and reading.
Though I'm still a newbie I thought I would post to you. I can relate to the pain and emptiness that you feel in your words. To have loved someone that much and have them ripped from you knowing they are still out there while you sit there alone. I liked the descriptive way you applied a single word to feelings that you have and in letting them know who you have became. Nicely done
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