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Review by nealdavid
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I have to agree very much so with this. As a newbie here only going on 2 weeks old I have received many positive comments and constructive criticism including some grammatical errors I may have made. However I have received (no names mentioned) from a person several very negative, harsh comments about a few of my works.

If a person doesn't like something that is fine, no need to read it just move on. But to tear someone down over phrasing, commas, wording and more then to say that they didn't even know what I was talking about to begin with. I'm sorry I can't accept that as a review but more of a bashing; especially when I go to their page and they have very little written at all.

Sorry for the Rant and Rave but I felt I too should voice.
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Review of I'm Sorry  
Review by nealdavid
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I felt rather sad reading this in that your mother had passed on and you were apologizing for many things that were beyond your control. We can never do enough for a loved one and once they are gone we feel as though we could have always done more but either didn't or couldn't. I could feel anger in some of your words towards others who you felt should have done more but didn't. Unfortunately maybe for them it was even harder to deal with, feeling helpless that there wasn't something more that could be done.

A few moving and personal piece thank you for sharing and allowing me to read.
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Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very moving and emotional letter. Having lost my mom only two years ago I in some ways wanted to relate those very words in the church as I looked around at those who came and thinking about those who didn't. I could feel your own love and sacrifices made to help keep promises to her. Sometimes the hardest things to say come too late and never to be said at all.

Thank you for sharing this very moving and personal piece.
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Review of Manic Me, Manic I  
Review by nealdavid
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Rather intense, I can relate and feel the mood. The feeling of helplessness of wondering should I go on or not, am I alone here, what should I do. In very few lines describing so much of the inner turmoil and struggle going on of thought and feelings, wondering what really is the way out, what really is the answer.
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Review of Have you?  
Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (5.0)
Interesting piece and well put as I think many go through this especially as teens and young adults. I believe it expresses a lot of what many would want to say they feel but don't. Even reminds me of some of a time in my own teen years. Especially in the line how you feel as if you don't exist and of no importance. I believe that holds true in a lot of lives.
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Review of Oh Queenie!  
Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (4.5)
Do me a favor and don't introduce me to the Queen of Hearts. I like how you created little poems from the story line.
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Review of Rabbit Rabbit....  
Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (4.0)
Will have to read the rest of these to see where this leads too :) I wonder what kind of trouble Alice is going to get into.
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Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (4.5)
Rather interesting reading would like to see where this goes from here. I like the detail that you placed in the story around Max, this is something that has been questioned many times in the medical field rather a person in a comma could hear what was going no around them and what was going on in their mind. Will be keeping an eye out for more on this. Thank you for sharing and do keep writing.
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Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (5.0)
As I set here reading I found myself wanting to click page after page, not wanting to put it down. I like what you have very much. I took the time to read some of it to my nephew wondering what a "Harry Potter" fan would think and he too liked it a great deal. I think you have an excellent idea I like how the plot flows as everything begins to develop, each step leading to the next.
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Review of Pathetic. Loser  
Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (3.5)
I picked this as I hadn't seen many read it or say anything about it. For me though very short expressed what a person would see or feel about another or even ones own self. I felt while reading it as if looking into a mirror talking to myself, expressing what I saw in my reflection.

An interesting way of looking at one's life.
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Review of Ingredients  
Review by nealdavid
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice sounds like the ingredients of a perfect relationship. I like the word usage that you have and expression in the descriptiveness letting the reader feel what is going on. Nice work.
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Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very interesting folder that you have and the views that you have written in here I have to agree with many of them. Yes I did take the time to look around and read. Rather then commenting on the ones read I felt since the folder didn't have a rating yet I would be the first to let others know; very worthy of checking out and reading.
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Review by nealdavid
Rated: E | (3.5)
Though I'm still a newbie I thought I would post to you. I can relate to the pain and emptiness that you feel in your words. To have loved someone that much and have them ripped from you knowing they are still out there while you sit there alone. I liked the descriptive way you applied a single word to feelings that you have and in letting them know who you have became. Nicely done
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