|Hi there! I found you on the "Read a Newbie"-tab. Keep in mind that I'm no expert of anything, I'm just a fellow writer.
Your writing is easy to follow, which I appreciate a lot, since English is only my second language.
Here's my thoughts!
Death is a strong subject to take up, but surely, it is not to be ignored either. Death comes, when it comes. It may bring peace of ones soul, or maybe we'll move on to another life, who knows?
Life however, I can easier comprehend: It is such a fragile yet precious gift and I'm glad you chose to write about both of the subjects.
It gives your poem some sort of forgiveness to it.
Everything doesn't have to be so dark, sometimes we just have to see through it and lit a candle for those we've loved and lost. So we can move on, being (for the moment) alive.
My only suggestion for this and I mean no offense:
It would be lovely if you'd switch life before death, since that's the natural way it happens, unless of course we've been reborn but we can't really know that for sure.
It would give your poem a more "natural" look, (in my opinion at least).
I wish you a healthy life and may you stay strong!