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Review by Anthony
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting! I was surprised when the old man jumped ott the cliff, and then I was surprised again that he actually started to fly. Although I have to admit, the story would have more impact, if the old man jumped into his death. It would have been shocking.

I found a lot of expressions in brackets. I think you should remove them from the story, because it makes it difficult to read. Otherwise I could have read it fluently from the beginning to the end.

I hope I could help with your story. Write on! :)
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Review of Sole Survivor  
Review by Anthony
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Amazing short story! It made me think for a while, there are a lot of deep thoughts in it. You didn't have too much space to show us how the world ended, but you did an excellent job doing so. I couldn't find any mistake in the text either.

Good job! :)
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Review by Anthony
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Awesome short story!

I think it was very well written. Being alone is not the best thing, especially not in adult life, when it is much easier to work things out together, as a team.
The ending is quite absurd, but I like it that way. I thought the protagonist is someone around 25, maybe 28 looking for a husband, but it turns out it's an old lady who is alone, and I suppose, she doesn't want to die alone. It's sad, but that's life, you know, it's just not fair.

Thank you for the story!
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