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Review of Wings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Bi0Hazard’s poem is a raw, visceral meditation on youth, loss, and the relentless grind of time. It weaves a narrative of chasing dreams, confronting mortality, and grappling with life’s indifference, delivered in a gritty, conversational tone. The imagery is vivid and jagged, the language unpolished yet deliberate, and the structure—short, fragmented stanzas—mirrors the disjointedness of memory and regret. The poem’s emotional core is its unflinching honesty, tempered by a cynical edge that avoids sentimentality.

My favorite line is "metal beasts clawing the sky." This poem could also easily apply to other metal beasts that claw the sky yet are tethered to the dirt, unable to fly, and the many who have been claimed by the ground, battling fate.

Bi0Hazard's poem is a compelling, hard-hitting reflection on dreams, mortality, and disillusionment, elevated by its vivid imagery and unflinching voice. It earns high marks for emotional authenticity and economy. Bi0Hazaed has crafted a piece that lingers like a bruise — painful, memorable, and undeniably human.

I reiterate the honor bestowed by Bi0Hazard — Rest In Peace, IceMan — Your longest Journey has just begun.

—NoisyWren


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Review of No Us Left  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Let me preface this review by saying: As a supporter of this author and his works and having read much of the content of his published books, I have a bit of an advantage over the casual reader. I’m looking down into his well, and it’s a crystal view by exposure.

This poem by Bi0hazard, “No Us Left,” hits like a nuclear powered fist to my gut. It’s got three layers of pain woven together, and I feel I see them all clear as day. First, it’s about losing someone close — maybe even a piece of himself. The lines about “your scent bleeds out like a wound” and “a hole where you used to laugh” scream of the raw ache of someone being gone. It’s personal like he’s stuck in a room haunted by their ghost, smelling them, hearing their songs, but they’re never coming back. He’s angry at time for dragging him away from them, calling midnight a “bastard” and the day a “cheap con.” It’s grief, pure honesty, and brutally revealing ink.

But it’s bigger than that. The second layer is him spitting in the face of fate and life itself. He’s not just mourning — he’s fighting the whole universe. Lines like “screw fate, it can’t have me” and “I’m not giving time my hours, my breath, my name” say he’s done bowing to anything that tries to break him. It’s like he’s standing in the dark, flicking his cigarette at the wind, daring the world to take him down. He’s saying life, time, and all their lies can go to hell. Bi0Hazard has an unquenchable fire in his gut, a voice that won’t quit, and he’s not letting anything dampen and snuff it out.

Then there’s the third layer, the one that burns hottest. This poem is a middle finger to the crowd who eats up his pain for free. The superficial people who are all talk don’t back up their mouths with their hands. They’re greedy, sucking up his words like vultures, giving nothing back. He rightly calls them out here in this powerful piece of soul. In the poem, the “darkness” that can “rot like a bad joke” is a duality of meaning, present anger and his past torture of loss — The “broke jukebox” is their empty cheers, all noise, and no heart, but also the past torture of personal loss. When he says, “I’m still here, and there’s no us left to die,” he’s not just referring to his past loss but cutting ties with the betrayal of the superficial clicker crowd who suck up freely but are without honor by their unsupportive hand. He’s standing alone as an artist who won’t beg.

This poem’s raw and messy, like a scream you can’t hold in. It jumps from grief to defiance to anger, but that’s why it works. It’s this author saying he’s lost someone, he’s lost hope in fate, and he’s lost patience with people who take but don’t give. Yet he’s still standing, with that fire burning, ready to keep writing no matter what. It’s a poem about surviving all kinds of loss and coming out swinging. It’s deep and magnificent; all soul poured out as ink.

Right on, brother, write on.
—Noisy Wren


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Review by Noisy Wren Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hey Bi0Hazard, I popped your Belgrade poem into my rating tool, and it got a 4.5/5. It’s pretty stingy with the numbers, but — For me, it's a solid 5. I love the gritty imagery and haunting vibe! I also had DAll-E whip up a visual of the park scene, capturing the young and the old man on the bench and that moody autumn atmosphere. I'll send it to you if you're interested. You’ve got a real knack for pulling readers into your world. Keep scratching those truths—you're killing it!

Your Forest Friend,
Noisy Wren


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Review of Silver Side  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Yo, Chloe! Love your Silver Side Short! I’m granting you the elusive 5 rating also. I have a poem that fits side by side with your short story, check me out.
 
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Don't Look In The Mirror 13+ Open in new Window. (13+)
Mirrors trap alter-egos in this dark poem. One glance, you're caught. Dare to look? Horror
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Review of Her Steady Light  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow, your poem "Her Steady Light" hit me hard bro — it’s such a raw, beautiful tribute to this incredible woman and the lifeline she’s been for you. The way you describe her apartment, with those sagging shelves and the smell of old books, pulled me right into her world, and lines like “heart heavier than the snow outside” cut deep with their honesty. I felt as though I was there with you, sitting on that couch, drinking tea. You’ve nailed her quiet strength and fragility, especially with that image of her shaky hands and stubborn heart. This is a stunner. It’s the kind of poem that sticks with you. Amazing work, brother!


—Noisy Wren


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Review by Noisy Wren Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hey, I really enjoyed your poem about Squantz Pond—it’s got this quiet, reverent vibe that pulls you right into the scene. The way you paint the autumn colors and that cool, clear water is vivid, and I love how each stanza builds to a deeper emotion, especially that tear at the end. The structure with those "To [verb] upon Squantz Pond" lines ties it all together beautifully. Since it was your first one, I’m not gonna critique it. But honestly, it’s a gem that captures the pond’s magic perfectly. Great work!


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Review of Pain stains  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
As one who is stained quite deeply I totally understand your short poem. Read my essay.

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Thief of Words  Open in new Window. (13+)
If you want to know me, here’s the open door. Read this Poetic Memoir.
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Review of The Clock  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hey, your piece hits hard—loneliness as a ticking clock is a powerful metaphor. I seem to remember a Twilight Zone episode or some other show like that about a similar thought. It really nails how some folks drown out the noise or lean into it, even when it’s overwhelming. The way you build up to that heavy ending is crystal in my mind. Maybe smooth out the transitions a bit and give that last line a little more to land softer. Still, it’s raw and real, and it sticks with you. Please increase the font sizing, and line spacing, the font's very small and a chore to read after a long day of writing here in the forest. I’m giving you a 4 out of 5. It’s strong, it just needs a little tweaking to be perfect. Keep it up!

Noisy Wren


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Review of My Mother's Poems  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It's a beautiful, wonderful thing you've done by posting your mother’s poetry. This is an outward sign of the Agape love she speaks of in her poem Love, It’s my favorite of hers; Giving Thanks is a close second for me. You’re a good daughter, and I applaud you. I extend my blessings to you, sister, as you have honored her, fulfilling the commandment of YAHU, our Father in Heaven. HalleluYAH.

Blessings,
Noisy Wren


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Review by Noisy Wren Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love your article; it’s stark truth in 268 words. The Ai-written stories are dry, soulless, fat-wood kindling. They are the go-to tool for the unimaginative youth, a product of the environment of right now people. As a writer of ink-dripping soul, I imagine the Chocolate Cake, before the mixing, the baking, the texture, the taste, the aroma, and the feel of it on my tongue. These experiences make the swallowing of it so much more delightful! That’s what the right now folks are missing, the experience of creativity. You’ve written a mouthful of truth here, my friend, a choking mouthful if swallowed.

Noisy Wren


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Review of Book of Alex 2  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This piece is raw, gritty, and dripping with noir vibes. It’s a punch to the gut, painting a vivid, desolate scene with a woman who’s been chewed up by life and spit out in a dive bar. The prose is tight, almost poetic, with sharp, jagged imagery that sticks—lines like “flickered like a cheap lie” and “city chewed suckers to bone” hit hard and linger. The rhythm is relentless, mirroring her downward spiral, and the sensory details (bourbon’s “piss-yellow glint,” smoke’s “old f***-ups”) pull you into her world.

The character’s a ghost already, hollowed out but still clinging to the barstool, and the story nails that sense of hopeless defiance. It’s lean, no fat, every word doing work. My only critique: the relentless bleakness might benefit from a single, subtle crack of light—maybe a fleeting memory or a hint of what broke her—to deepen the tragedy. But honestly, it’s strong as is, like a shot of cheap whiskey that burns just right.

You’ve got a knack for voice and atmosphere. Keep writing Brother—this is the kind of stuff that could carve out a space in gritty lit mags or noir anthologies.
Your Friend
—Noisy Wren


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Review of Jimmy Red Corn  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I love your story, and your descriptive language is fire. The Big Sandy River, is that in Tennesee? Your story is full of life and you carried me right through to the end. Good moral, GOD hates a thief, and won’t let one pass through the gates of the New City. I love talking bird stories, I have a couple myself. I didn’t find anything to fret about in your piece. You’ve done a fine job here!

Fly Free,
Noisy Wren


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Review of Half a Second God  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Brother! I love your work. I know that’s no news for you since we are already friends!

This poem has a raw, visceral energy that pulls you into its world — a gritty, romanticized Paris where personal history and fleeting moments collide. Let’s break it down and score it based on its strengths and weaknesses.

Imagery and Sensory Detail (4/5):
The poem excels at vivid, tactile imagery. Lines like “raspberries bleeding red” and “lipstick of a woman I loved once” evoke a sensual, almost cinematic quality, tying the tart to a lost love. The Seine reflecting sunlight, the cigarette smoke curling toward the Eiffel Tower (“big metal bitch in the sky”), and the stained napkin ground the reader in a specific place and mood. However, some images, like “laughter breaking like glass on cobblestones,” feel slightly overworked, leaning into cliché territory despite their evocative intent.

Emotional Resonance (4/5):
The speaker’s voice is confessional and unpolished, carrying a mix of nostalgia, cynicism, and defiance. The references to a past lover, quitting smoking, and Bukowski create a layered portrait of someone grappling with their own flaws and the indifference of the world. The closing lines—“this moment’s mine” and the nod to Bukowski—strike a balance between self-awareness and bravado. Still, the emotional arc could dig deeper; the shift from heartbreak to existential musings feels a bit abrupt, leaving some threads (like the lover’s betrayal) underexplored.

Language and Rhythm (3.5/5):
The language is conversational and direct, fitting the Bukowski-inspired tone. Phrases like “sweet, sharp” and “Paris doesn’t care” are punchy and effective. The free verse structure mirrors the speaker’s wandering thoughts, but the rhythm stumbles in places—lines like “back in ’09, before she left me for a guy who sold tires in Saint-Denis” are a bit clunky, disrupting the flow. The poem could benefit from tighter phrasing to maintain its momentum.

Originality and Voice (4/5):
The poem’s strength lies in its distinct voice—a blend of romantic grit and self-deprecating humor. The tire salesman in Saint-Denis and the wine-stained napkin are specific, quirky details that feel personal and authentic. The Bukowski reference, while fitting, risks feeling derivative, as the poem already leans heavily into his style. It’s a fine line, but the poet carves out enough of their own space to make it work.

Thematic Depth (3.5/5):
The poem touches on love, loss, and the fleeting nature of moments, set against the backdrop of an uncaring city. The tension between the speaker’s sentimentality and their tough exterior is compelling, but the themes don’t fully coalesce. The ending’s nod to mortality and defiance (“maybe I’ll die here”) is powerful but slightly underdeveloped, leaving the poem’s larger meaning a bit ambiguous.

Overall Impression:
This is a strong, evocative piece that captures a moment with grit and heart. It’s not flawless—the rhythm falters at times, and some ideas could be pushed further—but it’s got soul and a voice that sticks with you. It feels like a poem you’d find scrawled on a bar napkin, and that’s part of its charm.
Score: 4.5/5

A solid, memorable poem that’s rough around the edges in the best way. With a bit more polish and depth, it could hit even harder.
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Review of Mission Isolation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Cool short—you made me smile! I wasn’t expecting what you dished up at the end. You’ve done a good job with this. It would be better if you increased the font size to 4 or 4.5 and increased the line spacing to make it easier to read. Other than this, I have nothing.

Noisy Wren


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Review of I am Kay  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a sad write. Noisy Wren nods his head in recognition of a page that bleeds emotion.

Blessings,
Noisy Wren


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Review of Happiness  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Like you, I rarely give 5s, but on content, this is a worthy piece for which you should receive one. One is a lonely number, for sure. Thanks for sharing this!

Noisy Wren


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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Star Trek fan: You clearly paid closer attention to the details than I ever did! It's a good storyline, but the letters are too small for comfort, especially at 3:40 a.m. Your descriptive language is on point, and it's engaging from the beginning ‘till the end. I did not like the rape, but you’ve done a fine job here, Sir.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
*Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2**Shock2*
Hilarious! Terribly Hilarious! Now, I see why you liked my poem The Maid...

Write On!
Noisy Wren


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Review of The Vulture  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well, I see now that I had no real idea of how transporter tech really came to be! No idea! R O F L O L! I love it! I'm finished reading it, but I'm still laughing. I wonder; Where did Alec end up? Will we ever see him again? That could be an interesting continuation.

Noisy Wren


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Well played, a nice piece about your brother. You did a fine job leading up to the personal tragedy. It feels real. Write On!

Noisy Wren


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Review of Magical Window  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, I loved your beautiful short story. I feel emotion in the words for my Dad is also gone. You did a fine job here.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Short and Sweet! I love the storyline. I’m probably gonna dream about her tonight.

Noisy Wren
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Review of Touched  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
I like your free verse poem! The structure of Touched, with its three uneven stanzas and free verse form, supports its narrative arc of buildup, climax, and humorous resolution. The syllable counts, ranging from 2 to 10 per line and increasing across stanzas, enhance the poem’s dynamic rhythm, reflecting the escalating tension and chaotic energy of the spider encounter. The lack of a consistent syllabic pattern keeps the tone playful and organic, suiting the poem’s lighthearted exploration of curiosity and impulsive action. Nice work, bro!

Strengths: The poem excels in its playful tone, vivid imagery, and effective use of misdirection, building suspense only to deliver a humorous twist. The free verse structure and varying syllable counts create a dynamic rhythm that mirrors the narrative’s escalation and chaotic resolution. The imagery (e.g., "legs, like something medieval," "finger stretched out like that scene from E.T.") is memorable and engaging, blending the grandiose with the mundane for comedic effect. The poem’s accessibility and relatable humor make it enjoyable for a broad audience.

Weaknesses: While the humor lands well, the poem’s scope is narrow, focusing on a single, lighthearted moment without deeper thematic resonance. The free verse, while effective, occasionally feels unstructured, with some lines (e.g., "There we were;") lacking the descriptive weight of others, which can disrupt the flow. Additionally, the poem’s reliance on the twist means it may not hold up as well on re-reading once the surprise is known. I would like it more in a prose fashion.

Overall: It’s a delightful, well-crafted poem for its purpose—entertaining through humor and vivid description, but it doesn’t aim for profound emotional or intellectual impact, which keeps it from a higher score. My honest 3.5 rating reflects its success as a fun, engaging piece with minor limitations in depth and polish.

Since we are friends, I was hesitant to give you my true rating, initially leaning toward fudging up to a 4. However, since I always prefer and ask for honest reviews of my work rather than hot air, I am giving you the straight stuff. It's a detraction if people lie, and we don’t benefit. Truth spurs growth. I want you to grow; you have natural great potential. Love you, Brother!

Fly Free!
Noisy Wren


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Review of The Wolf Speaks  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I love your short story! I like to read about wolves and people together; it's a fascinating subject matter for me. Thanks for sharing this!

I gave you 4 Stars on it because of some punctuation, spacing continuity, and phrasing choices.

Fly Free,
Noisy Wren


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Review of Reflections  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Yikes! That must have been a shocker for you! Are you still the Imp, or was it temporary? You'd almost have perfection with a little closer attention to punctuation and grammar!
I love your storyline. Thanks for sharing it.

Fly Free,
Noisy Wren


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