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A hall of(cut 'first use of 'of') full of people wants(want) to take a last look of mine(use 'me' instead of 'mine') as if I won't be there tomorrow, yeah hall of(cut 'of') full of people,(insert space)I was famous at my Village,(insert space)or still I(cut 'I') am for 14 more days (insert ',') as far as(cut 'as'--insert 'in the future as') I can guarantee. Looking at those faces, I can assure one thing which is that they completely believed that(cut 'that') I must be having fun after death and as by now, (insert 'have')seen the heaven. One thing which let me down,(insert space)is(insert 'that') no one is crying her heart out. I know, I was 71, will be 71, still my charm is irresistible. Lets focus on me for one time, can you all (remove space)! Where(Capitalize 'Where') to start to describe the world which I am in right now, Its(use 'It' instead of 'its') looks kind of (insert 'the')same or If I say exactly same. One good part of being dead is that you are back to being the boss of your life, I mean death or life, as it is a new life after death, like whatever who cares! so no responsibility of any kind, just one thing don't scare people. I haven't tried myself yet cuz it just been a while here, it is advisory for people who will do it, you may get caught, I have seen we are getting caught by idiotic tantriks ,common(use 'come on' instead of 'common') guys we can do better. So(cut 'so') be responsible here. While I screamed this words out ,I got surrounded by many like me ,not exactly like me, but look descent enough for their age, I mean seriously eyes still working in skeletons are decently fancy looking, isn't it. One of them came ahead ,told me something like Who are You? cuz I am smart man and can read lips. I thought god will come to receive me after death but ... these people ain't bad either, I can see my future in them. |
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