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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I came across your story on the 'Please Review' board. I especially enjoyed the thought process of the young man as he pondered the reasons for why the older man would spend all day at the library. In reading this and bearing in mind your request for general thoughts and reactions, Captain Barbosa's voice from Pirates of the Caribbean popped into my mind "Those are naught but a lot of big words". Your use of more formal words, for instance "artificial appendages for canines" rather than "fake legs for dogs", was interesting. However, this did lend toward the notion that while the younger man was hot tempered and bored with his life, he was well-read and educated.
All in all, your story was a fun little read that made me chuckle. Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Nathan's Quest  
Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very clever... I caught onto the names about midway through and couldn't help but wonder where you were going with it. I felt compelled to read the rest of your story to find out. It was well written and kept me interested. I did not find any spelling or grammar errors, but I'll admit that I was so involved with the story that I forgot to pay attention and had to reread. Thank you for sharing this, it was very enjoyable.

Quiltingmama


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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (4.0)
What an interesting story. I enjoyed the way you illustrated your knight and lady. Aside from a few spelling errors it was well written.

However I was confused as to whether the lady frequented the forest often or if the time she went in with the two guards was her first. At the beginning you elude to the idea that she was a regular visitor but at the end you make it sound like her first time in was her last. If she was a regular visitor, why on that last occasion did the knight intercede?

Overall it was a very enjoyable read, thank you for sharing.

Quiltingmama


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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Seriously, I wish we lived closer... you sound like someone I could be friends with. *Smile* I'm older (shh don't want to say that too loud!) and have monsters... oops I mean kids... and I suck at marriage (twice bitten don't you know.) I'll have to head over to your page and read your work. *Smile* You are very brave putting this up here... I'm in awe.

Quiltingmama
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh the enthusiasm of the young. It is cool how you conveyed Jayden's excitement to write in the journal and how the journal felt right in his hands. And as the mom of a 9 year old and a 12 year old... you definitely got that love of shopping correct. Well done.
Stefanie
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked this... it made me think of conversations I had with my grandmother... it was quilting with her, but the effect is the same. If I have any complaint, it could use more description i.e. what does Jeffrey look like? etc... It is difficult to get a clear picture without those descriptives... something I constantly have to remind myself. It was lovely to read overall.
Stefanie
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oooh, I want a place like that! It sounds so peaceful and serene! I'm impressed with how quickly you immersed me in the environment and with so few words. If I close my eyes, I could imagine myself there and felt calmer for it. Thank you for sharing!
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Review of Bob and Kat  
Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
How very interesting. You completely had me captivated trying to figure out the reality of Chin's point of view. I'd love to see things the way he did in the story, to know that Faerie exist. It was a lovely little trip into a different perspective, thank you for sharing.
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (5.0)
Clever... I enjoyed how you really made me feel your empty nest... although you totally made me dread it now! *Smile* I also enjoyed how you ended it with the almost flippant "I'm getting married". I'd probably drop the phone too!
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