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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This was an interesting little story. I'm left with a few questions, but they don't really detract from the story. The adventure is clearly there and Bill must be one heck of soldier given everything he does to elude the bikers.
There were a couple minor spelling issues - for instance it would be Her Majesty's Special Forces rather than Majesties. Other than that, a solid story.
Thanks for sharing it.

QM *Shamrock*
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a whole mood! I thoroughly enjoyed this.

QM *Shamrock*
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (4.5)
The first thing that came to mind: funky.
The next... kinda cool.

Your short story is interesting and engaging, and the end was a lovely twist.

My one biggest issue was the word "lull". It pulled me away from the story as I tried to reconcile its meaning of "calm or send to sleep, typically with soothing sounds or movements" with your usage. I believe "lure" would be less jarring, but that is simply my opinion. Otherwise I loved the story.

QM *Shamrock*
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Review of Nathan's Quest  
Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very clever... I caught onto the names about midway through and couldn't help but wonder where you were going with it. I felt compelled to read the rest of your story to find out. It was well written and kept me interested. I did not find any spelling or grammar errors, but I'll admit that I was so involved with the story that I forgot to pay attention and had to reread. Thank you for sharing this, it was very enjoyable.

Quiltingmama


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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (4.0)
What an interesting story. I enjoyed the way you illustrated your knight and lady. Aside from a few spelling errors it was well written.

However I was confused as to whether the lady frequented the forest often or if the time she went in with the two guards was her first. At the beginning you elude to the idea that she was a regular visitor but at the end you make it sound like her first time in was her last. If she was a regular visitor, why on that last occasion did the knight intercede?

Overall it was a very enjoyable read, thank you for sharing.

Quiltingmama


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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Seriously, I wish we lived closer... you sound like someone I could be friends with. *Smile* I'm older (shh don't want to say that too loud!) and have monsters... oops I mean kids... and I suck at marriage (twice bitten don't you know.) I'll have to head over to your page and read your work. *Smile* You are very brave putting this up here... I'm in awe.

Quiltingmama
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked this... it made me think of conversations I had with my grandmother... it was quilting with her, but the effect is the same. If I have any complaint, it could use more description i.e. what does Jeffrey look like? etc... It is difficult to get a clear picture without those descriptives... something I constantly have to remind myself. It was lovely to read overall.
Stefanie
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (5.0)
Oooh, I want a place like that! It sounds so peaceful and serene! I'm impressed with how quickly you immersed me in the environment and with so few words. If I close my eyes, I could imagine myself there and felt calmer for it. Thank you for sharing!
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Review of Bob and Kat  
Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
How very interesting. You completely had me captivated trying to figure out the reality of Chin's point of view. I'd love to see things the way he did in the story, to know that Faerie exist. It was a lovely little trip into a different perspective, thank you for sharing.
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Review by Quiltingmama
Rated: E | (5.0)
Clever... I enjoyed how you really made me feel your empty nest... although you totally made me dread it now! *Smile* I also enjoyed how you ended it with the almost flippant "I'm getting married". I'd probably drop the phone too!
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