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Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:
Overall I think it is very good. I am hugely impressed with the content and structure. It certainly impacts on the reader because of the truth that it carries and the structure within which every one of the deadly sins plays a character role in the flow of the story, or message.
Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter (as applicable):
Storoem is a new poetical form to me. It certainly combines a number of forms, prose poetry being one of them. The format is very good overall, especially in the separation of the stanzas, which fit the general flow excellently.
The rhyme is good in the sense that it is in a c b d format, but the length of the lines throws one off the rhyme somewhat.
The metering is somewhat irregular and there is no consistent syllabic count.
Artistic Voice and Imagery:
This is good throughout.
Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:
The grammar is odd in places, for example "....I’m a major reason divorce
ends the majority of marriages...", should the word "that" or "why" not be between reason and divorce? The same omissions appear in other places in the poem.
The only suggestion that I can make is that you consider shortening the lines, where possible, and tidy up the grammar.
Thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!
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