Hi Connie,
These simple three lines hide truth of lasting kind. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a creative member of the WDC for another year. Have a wonderful day!
Nature has this effect and I am saying this out of my own experience. Whenever I feel depressed or sad, I just step out into the small patch of our garden. I wander around among the trees, walk on the grass or try to do some weeding. My gloominess disappears soon and I become normal and ready to face the world again.
The effect wind is shown quite visually in this Haiku.
"Calming, soothing wind."
The wind is not only "soft" and "gentle" but also makes a lot of difference for the sad person.
It is "soothing and calming" as well.
The brief crisp lines bring the wind to touch my face, my limbs and my spirit.
Hello Ann,
I can see the shock of the sudden passing of your husband. Death cannot be comprehended. When it happens is nobody's guess. Yet life goes on. Tragedy and heartbreak have nothing to do with the finality called death. It is the most cruel of the events of life. The departure of a loved one leaves a cypher in the wife's life.
Hello Rose,
this poem of yours talks to me on several levels. First, it shows my own assessment of self, which is vulnerable being subjected to fear, thrill, sadness and melancholy. Yet, it shows boldness and will power.
It also reminds me of my social obligations to the people, to those in need. It wakes me up to my duty. My work is not over with my retirement. It starts anew with a smile first to fill the world with positive vibrations, lend positive energy to those who suffer, who need moral strength.
"He gave it a bright smile,
To light up your world,
Your poem brings up the issues of differences of color, creed and such. It tell me to make no such demarcations between one person and the other. We are all born free and bold. Let us keep it that way.
Great poem. keep going and spread the message of equality and liberty and brotherhood.
your tribute to the old mother, Sea is praiseworthy. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a creative member of the WDC for yet another year. Have a nice day!
This is a poem written by someone who was probably on a voyage at sea. The authentic description of the heaving, pitching and rolling seas vouches for you. How true! It wouldn't let you sleep continuously with its sudden jolts. you cannot stand steadily either on a heaving boat.
The sea is a vital part of many lives, particularly the marine life. Its cooling effect is discussed by many.
The seas occupy the major part of the earth. None can destroy it. It will be there as long as the sun and stars exist.
This free style poem flows well with visual imagery.
Hi,
I like these thoughts you have listed here. They are pretty much inspirational and provide good guidance.
The ones that l consider above the others are the second and third on the list.
I appreciate the thought that everyone has talent and that it comes out with the right attitude. No one should be underestimated.
Friends are true support. True friends are forever. Such friends last all our lives. I am lucky to have such friends who are ready to help me no matter when or where.
I like the way you have shown through an object lesson that “storms pass in life. No low spot is permanent.”
The last paragraph clearly explains what makes it easy to wrestle with the toughest battles of life. I could gather from your experiences that you and your mother were rich with patience and forbearance.
Missing TV and putting up with helping in the kitchen were not easy challenges for you. It is not just “what” they were but it is “how” you came to grips with them is the point that stands out for me.
Hello Marvellous,
this is a pretty interesting nonfiction. My review of the story is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on entering another creative year at the WDC. Have a lovely day.
Looking at the childhood scenario of yours, I get the impression that you had a wonderful childhood with a number of sweet memories to carry.
The fact that you have Indian heritage is an extra attraction that draws reader’s attention. The colourful dances, the night time gatherings, music and the bugs make a fantastic mix of memories for a five-year old girl of Oklahoma.
It is written lucidly making it easy to understand and enjoy.
The style and the leisurely pace are additional plus points.
When it comes to knowing yourself, we look in, instead of out. That way, we can watch ourselves closely. We get to know our likes and hates, our sincerity and falsehood, our thoughts about self and others. This kind of self observation shows the defects, which we can correct there and then.
I take it that you did discover yourself after all, judging by the lines,
“Where I saw myself bare, naked, exposed.”
With half the mission completed, the rest becomes much easier.
Again, answers have to come from within.
The title is spot on for the No Dialog Contest.
Hi, I am Jaya, unable to resist reviewing this splendidly narrated romance. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being creatively active at the WDC for yet another year. Have a lovely day!
Actually, the story is not far from reality. If there is an “emotional bond”, words won’t be necessary. You told a real romantic tale.
Your story makes me wing into their world of love with ease and effortlessness.
And how’s that possible?
Language and sensitivity, imagination, precise expression and many things besides.
Hello Regis,
I understand how much you miss your partner. My review here is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations! Have a wonderful day!
Judging by the tone and drift of this poem the affinity and attachment between the two of you might be imagined.
“Feel the breeze
Your hair on my face.”
Imagery shows the sharing of activities by the kindred spirits.
It is written in a simple , crisp stye with a fine choice of words.
It sounds natural and spontaneous.
I enjoyed this farm story thoroughly. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
You have very well shown the farm activities and the way all of you are working together to manage the land.
Conversation between the siblings is quite engaging and I can see how the kids learn to weed and keep the farm clean. I am also impressed that the young Dana and Marie are able to attend to milking the cows.
As the eldest in the family, you have been pretty responsible and nice to your siblings.
Your advice to your father must be quite valuable and useful.
I think there is a lesson in there in this ghost story. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a wonderful day.
So Jerry was almost dead but regained life and felt grateful for such a merciful event. Now the other person,the dead guy is Steve, who feels remorseful that his ghostly life is not what real life is.
"Jerry then realised that life is worth living, even with all the restrictions, to live each day as if it were his last."
Obviously, restrictions refer to the Covid infection.
The above last sentence sums up the message inherent in the story.
Enjoyed the dialog and the brief accidental visit to the other world.
I can see that it is a tough challenge to deliver a double acrostic and you did it well. A short love poem that sounds assuring to the beloved.
"You are my only"
Much to read in between the lines. The usage of "pragma" is new to me and I am glad I came across it.
This sounds like a "model of love" no doubt.
Imagery shows them as ideal lovers and worth emulating by others.
My review of this interesting poem is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations for being creative for another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
This poem wins my praise on several counts. First, the theme. I am impressed that you want to set right the past mistakes.
Second, the tone. There is a note of urgency to accomplish the mission you had for yourself.
“And I can’t wait”
Finally, I like your confidence to go ahead and correct the things you think are not right.
And then, there is this concern to reveal the love that is inherent in human nature.
this is a flash relevant to our pitiable present. My little review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being creatively busy for one more year at the WDC. Have a great day!
This story the picture of future climate. There’s no more clean snow for the kids to play with.
“…kids won’t be able to build a snowman or throw a snowball…”
That’s a bleak picture indeed.
It makes us realise that the greedy are accountable for this chaotic present. They should soon wake up and make amends so our earth is saved from further damage.
If not, punishment is not far away.
It mirrors the cause and effect of the damage done against our earth in quite an appealing way.
Hello Gray,
There’s definitely a push and a smile behind this poem. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on opening another year at the WDC. Have a nice day!
Smile is no doubt doubly blessed like mercy. The giver and the one that receives are blessed with joy.
Your comparison of a smile with the beauty of autumn makes sense.
It is so much easier to smile than to frown.
Your poem has imagery drawn from nature. It is quite visual.
Hello esteevius,
this is a touching poem expressing afterthoughts about love. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year at the WDC. Have a nice day!
This poem mirrors some natural feelings on being late in recognising love.
It is true that sometimes one becomes tongue-tied when someone says, “I love you”.
Disbelief and doubt are well expressed.
“Did you mean it?”
Now that you are sure, you can easily repair the damage you think you suffered. Better late than never, as they say.
This poem is convincing and clear.
Imagery appeals as does the content.
Hello Tabby,
I just read your nonfiction and felt like reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations for being active at WDC for another year. Have a wonderful day!
Changes are normal in any marriage. Those patches of unhappiness too are being experienced by all of us. At times, I think we do feel let down for not being paid attention at all. Hopefully, these are but temporary phases. Life is not an idyll. It has its highs and lows.
I can understand that if you are mentally happy, physical hardship doesn't matter.
Children are a great consolation under such circumstances.
Hope things will get better with time.
Language and style are spontaneous and easy to follow.
Just beautiful!
What a lovely world you surround yourself with, Jack!
I just fell in love with those kids who have so much to teach their grandpa.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on turning another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
This little incident is well narrated. You stuck to facts and it is as if I am watching a movie. In other words, I find it visual and effectively so.
Your nonfiction tells me, there is so much to learn from kids and their actions are so interesting and absorbing too.
Clearly, Kaleb is not interested in letting Nana play with the toys. More wonderful is that Nana understood his mind finally and both were happy after that.
It shows that adults need to spend more time with kids, so they can see their beautiful minds.
The pictures great too, each with a nice note.
Language and style are after my own heart, lucid and smooth.
your first line arrested my undivided attention.
The first stanza connects me with one of the points of reflection stated by Krishna to Arjuna in the 2nd discourse of the Gita.
“…..impending future
Fixated on the past.”
Poem turns subjective from the 3rd stanza onwards.
Sensitive to others’ words and thoughts, the poet finds freedom or release of a rare kind and contentment in using words. This is true of
writers,especially, poets.
Finding freedom sitting on rooftop turning “blue” under the sky, thinking about tenacious secrets and writing about them appears to be a favourite occupation of this excellent poet.
Perfect diction and apt choice of words make this free style poem, enjoyable.
Hi,
I find it interesting to note the reasons why crime rate goes up or down.
As your statistics prove gun is a necessary aid to empower a defenceless victim, particularly, a woman.
In countries like mine own India, women are encouraged to train in martial arts. Whether east or west, women are at the receiving end of violence, rape and murder .
Indian Vedic practices, which gave women an equal status with men, were corrupted by various injunctions introduced by egoistic rulers and their henchmen priests. As a result, women were degraded and treated as second rate citizens or worse in the subsequent eras.
Your article is encouraging enough and hopefully, is a source of inspiration for women victims.
It is an impressive poem on the favorite occupation of both the dad and daughter. Music being a divine art, it effectively evoked beautiful dreams in the girl's heart.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on turning another year at the WDC.
Have a lovely day!
Few have this kind of togetherness; a shared love for music.
"Classical piano was their passion
and food for their souls."
The little girl's appreciation of her dad's art is truly touching.
"Classical piano was their passion
and food for their souls."
Experiences like these can work miracles on the growth of a child. I am sure she blossomed into an fine artist herself and played with her dad at the Carnegie Hall as he dreamed.
The diction and mood of the poem are absorbing. They take me to her world on the wings of imagination.
"He played like a one-man symphony."
That's a great achievement indeed!
Imagery visual and aural and appeals to mind and heart.
This is a thoughtful piece.
You raised some issues of significance.
We don’t know how the mind works or what goes on in the world within the self. We have no way of knowing. So, we can’t have conclusions. We can’t be judgmental.
You are right in thinking that we live in an imperfect world. Ten to one, many may disagree. By virtue of their perception, the world we live in is just perfect. Opinion depends on one’s definition of perfection.
Bertrand Russel’s essays are helpful in this regard.
About goodness-
It depends on the way we view and we think about people, on our attitude to society. Even a cruel and harsh person deserves sympathy and mercy.
As I learnt from Shakespeare, justice must be tempered with mercy.
Goodness of the heart is more important than showing it like making a donation.
Your example is apt.
“At the end of the day,……realisation of moral duty that actually makes us good.”
Hello Snow,
It is full of unusually hilarious ideas and experiment. Unfortunately, it is a case of man proposes and God disposes.
The reasons behind having a green painted cement lawn itself is prone to give rise to doubts. How can cemented floor have the look of grass? I wonder. Perhaps it is possible, like the idea of painting mountains and trees on the back wall and get the illusion of reality.
But you went ahead nevertheless, a strong-willed person. The pine tree proved to be a fly in the ointment. Armed with a chainsaw you did your best. But life, true to is nature, popped up unexpected impediments. The unstoppable chainsaw for one. The disaster in the neighbor's house for another. The last but the most important is the court proceedings. Oh, what a tangled web, a single idea brought to your yard!
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