| I read this again and again in an effort to determine what I could say to help you. I came to the conclusion that there honestly isn't much that I can suggest. Because I am doing an review that requires a certain amount of words to be worthy for gift points I will though.
I believe each word you chose was done so deliberately and with wisdom. I would not change one of them. Every word has tremendous meaning to me. Your writing is capable of meaning different things to different readers. There is much value in what you wrote because of that potential.
If you wanted you might begin this with what is now the end. You could start the poem with the words "Lands to embark on, a journey, orchestrated by time and then write the other words from the word "You".
I hope this review assisted in helping you to see another possibility however I have another reason for reviewing. I hope you will find some encouragement. Your goal of only using a certain number of words seems very challenging. You succeeded in creating very intriguing message. Because of that,in my estimation, you are a good writer.