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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Cynaemon,

I’m honored to read and review 'Dreaming of Spring' which I found on the Random Reads section.

Title: I love your title, but as you probably guessed being the middle of September here in the US, I'm dreaming of Fall.

Description: I love Itchywater's contest and all of the poetry forms she's found for me to learn about.

Contents: Isn't it wonderful when those first leaf buds start to come forth. The days start to get longer, and the chill of winter fades away. You've created a lovely haiku and I really hope it did well in the contest.

No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Josh Stone Waters,

I’m honored to read and review 'A Funny Quote' which I found in the Random Reads Column.

Title: Did you know, your title and description match? Sometimes it just works better that way, doesn't it?

Contents: I'd love to know who the quote is from. The therapists may be correct, if we put as much passion into our making out, as we put into arguing, I imagine things may indeed be very different. Of course, all the TV ratings would be hurt. Who pays attention to TV when enjoying a playful romp?

Thumbs up: It is a unique quote, with a little tongue and cheeky review.

Conventions: No errors noted, but I do have a question. Do you think you'll use this quote to inspire a piece of writing, a poem or a short story perhaps?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Talaena,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'The Abyss'

Title: suggests a dark and ominous time

Description: It breaks my heart to read this is the only poem you have left. I know there must be reasons, but it still is so sad to lose your poetry collection. I know over the years, I've lost things that I've written. It's really hard to recapture the moments to recreated those pieces lost.

Contents: While the contents of your poem are dark and sad, the word choice, style and flow are beautifully written. If you are aware of any outlets that could use your poem for the greater good- I'm thinking in the lines of bullying awareness, prevention of bullying, poetry readings where the audience participates, this would be an excellent piece to offer.

I do hope you'll find your poet's voice once again. It was an inspiring piece.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi ShadowXV,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read, review and share in your Guestbook.

Title: Works well.

Description: I was happy to stop by and sign your guest book. It's one of your most recent posts.

Contents: Short, sweet, to the point. I don't know that I followed your directions too well. You'll have to read my post to find out. I do hope you have more guests.

Conventions: Capitalize the title of your story, the beginning of sentences, and the pronoun I. Other than that, it looks fine.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Andrew G.,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Choice'

Title: Have to admit, your title and description called to me this evening. I had to see what your thoughts were.
Description:
Contents: I love how you've used the characteristics of ocean life to lead the reader through different paths their lives could take. After reading about the dolphin, I found myself wanting more. I'm not sure if I was expecting a concluding stanza, or if more sea life would be introduced.

At the beginning of summer, I wrote a lot of poems on sea life for my soon to be born (I know his momma wants sooner seeing as he's already 5 days late) grandson. They've decorated his nursery with an ocean theme. I guess that's what makes your poem special in my eyes right now.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi CAT,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'You really don't like me now??'

Title: It works really well with your article.

Description: Your attempt is very humorous, and 'very tongue in cheek' ... therefore, I think it works for your description

Contents: I started reading, thinking 'who cares' if you cut your hair. If they're that hung up on it.... lose 'em. They're not worth the effort.

I kept reading and visions of the past, floated into my head. The days when my hair would get wet when I sat down in the bath tub. and how my dear hubby loves long hair.
Blah, blah... you know the drill. Come home with a hair cut (once way too short- I even cried when I saw what she'd done right before my son's graduation from college) and the only comment hubby dear had was ... "gonna be a while before you have to go back'...Then all the helpful friends... 'Maybe if you spike it?' .... Sigh, what we do for hair.

Your article brought back those memories, and now I can laugh at them, while I'm puffing my bangs out of my eyes as I type. I've reached the stage of life, if you don't like it... bite me. I'll move on. I think you've joined the growing masses at that stage of life. Congrats!

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mark Lewis,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review '???? B.C.- 2011'

Title: I must admit, your title piqued my curiosity.

Description: I've had some sloth-like students in my day. I think their song would have been more like- who me? I have to work? What? NOOO way! Yeah, I can still picture their cute little faces, too. I hope they grow out of it.

Contents: Wow, Mark you've packed a lot of history into a brief poem. You've created a time capsule of appreciation of the past, acknowledging the works of the past, while honoring their legacy they've bequeathed to us.
I know, with youngsters the love of history is tied up in their questions, especially when you have them think about how did these people do the amazing things they did- without our 'wonderful' technology that they can't live without. Your poem should be a part of every Montessorian's history album. In fact, with your permission. I'd like to add it to my album.

Thumbs up: Thank you for sharing an appreciation of the past, because without our past... we wouldn't be where we are today. (Good or bad)

Conventions: only thing I saw that really caught my attention and made me stop reading was on this line
How do the great conqueror Alexander
Expanded a vast empire to the far east--- How does instead of how do....

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sarita,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review The Entelechy of Zunn.

Title: I remember this prompt. I entered too.

Description:Nice tease!

Contents: A great story! I love the way you've woven everything together. It draws so many elements of mythology/ cosmology/ and religion together. I was mesmerized and sad when the story came to an end.

Thumbs up: The ending was awesome. For some strange reason an image of God with earth in a snow globe flashed into my mind. I'll let you figure that one out.

Conventions: I was so engaged with the story, I didn't notice anything. That's a good thing, right?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi George,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Patricia's Secret Garden'

Title: You have a typo in your title, an extra 'a' in secret... easy fix

Description: Sounds inviting.

Contents: The first time through, I kept getting hung up on capital letters all over the place. I went back and read it again. You've written a beautiful poem describing the place that so many of us need. A place of beauty, and solace. Even as this reader read it again, I let the words release the tension that normal mornings tend to bring. I can easily see this poem as apart of a thinking of you card, or a get well message for someone going through rough times.

Thumbs up: Your message is the best part of this work. Your poem flows so well.

Conventions: The capital letters in the middle of lines in words that don't need to be capitalized distracted me. I kept wondering why, was there a hidden message an internal acrostic that I was missing?

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Henry Weatherall,

Happy WDC Anniversary Month!

I’m honored to read and review Words of the Uncertain

Title: The title and the description, leave me with questions, perhaps I haven't read enough of your works to understand the comment at the end of your description.

Contents:An interesting poem delving into a relationship that possibly was lost, possibly long distance. It does leave the reader with an air of uncertainty. The dreams of a lover, that hopefully one day will find their love.

Thumbs up:Immersed in a blissful remembrance of times past…>> with rose colored glasses we view the past as something perhaps more wonderful than it really was.... but then, we still long for what we cannot have.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Barkhakariwala,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Punnett'

Title: I'm assuming that the title of your poem is the form's name.

Description: I've never heard of a punnet, so I was curious to see what the form consisted of

Contents: Your poem describes of scene that reminds me of the cartoons Tom and Jerry. Jerry always tease poor Tom, anyway its a cute form. There are a couple of places you might change a word to help the flow, but as it is, you've met the word requirements.

I always love finding new forms of poetry. Thank you for sharing this form with me today.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Frosty,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Peace Please'

Title: A delightful thought if humanly possible

Description: Self centeredness and greed... the cause of so many wars

Contents: The awareness of the atrocities of war are expounded upon through the eyes of the narrator the reader is transported for a brief time to a place where pain and suffering are daily events. Life's joys have been replaced with hopelessness and loss. Greed, selfishness, unwillingness to bend. Such a shame life has to be this way, such a crying waste.

Thumbs up for bringing the plight of the children to the eyes of your readers.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Story Jester,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'P. Z. Pryor'

Title: As I have a friend with the initials P. Z., I was kind of intrigued.

Description: Love the cautionary tales... therefore, I must read further

Contents: How cute. So many times the image of the snowball growing and taking over is part of the 'lying tale'. It was a breath of fresh air to see a consequence that visually stimulates the imagination. That commercial on TV- Geiko- Liar, Liar, pants on fire just flashed into my head. Think about the looks on those guys faces after they've been caught in their lies- they truly look disgraced.

Thumbs up: Your poem flows very well. I'm sure kids would enjoy it.

Conventions: No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi misunderstoodwiccan,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'great love (it isn't important no more!)

Title: Your title intrigued me, it was kind of like looking at opposites, a contrasting piece perhaps

Description: In eleventh grade, I don't think I was even interesting in anyone in particular. Everyone is different, if true loves knocks, open the door.

Contents: I'm glad you shared your poem here on WDC. It came from your heart... her loss. Too many men can't reveal their emotions like you've done in your poem. Sorry about the loss of your love though, but I'm sure you know... that happens too.

Conventions:" i know that i will love forever for the rest of my life because i found you" >>> forever- then the rest of my life is redundant- I know that I will know love forever, because I found you.. would be smoother.

Editing wise- capital letters when appropriate- I. first words of sentences

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Ladygrace,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Books are Great'

Title: Your title drew me in to read. I totally agree, books are great.

Description: I'm sure every teacher around could use help in encouraging youngsters to read.

Contents: Your poem has a lovely sentiment that I totally agree with. The lines flow with ease, and I can easily see sharing this with children as an encouragement to get a good book.

Thumbs up: I love the classics you chose for your first line.

Conventions: thru = through.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Desire,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'A Charming Ring to It'

Title: An interesting title, I wasn't sure where the story was going

Description: I do love the prompts for Daily Flash and Writer's Cramp, They are such a good way to get the creative juices flowing.

Contents: I felt so sorry for Lydia. Bless her heart, if those are her future in-laws, she should run to the nearest exit. Of course, her future mother in law did seem to warm up at the end. Maybe, things will work out after all.


Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Deelyte-Chillin',

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Masks'

Title: Piqued my curiosity

Description: Inside the faces we use... deep thoughts, the person we project to others depending on our roles with those people.

Contents: A look at what my dad would call putting your brave face on. There are so many times everyone has to pull up their boot straps and move forward, no matter what. The expectations are there and we have to follow through. Everyone has those periods in their life.
Your poem flows well, it's message is concise and clear, and leads the reader to wonder, when do we really get to be 'ourselves'.

Thumbs up: The first two lines say so much to the human condition

Conventions: no errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Paradoxical,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Image'

Title: When I first looked at the title, I thought it was going to be an image- a photograph or something similar. I was surprised to find a poem.

Description: An interesting tag line.. It would definitely make someone take a look into your port to read.

Contents: Your poem reads like a stream of consciousness. Thoughts that flowed from the moment that you were living in. Interesting metaphors, and a depth of understanding of human nature is evident.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Michael,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Of Pumpkins and Labradors'

Title: Your title alone would probably draw me into read this piece. I love Labs.

Description: Love the Writer's Cramp. It is such a great way to get your creative juices flowing.

Contents: You've written a poem about two loves of mine, harvest time, and puppies. I love labs... I said that before. What an inspired dream for your poem. Very nicely done. I hope it did well in the contest.

Thumbs up: The ending was perfect, all of the labs around and the most precious Snowy found in your bed. Delightful.

Conventions: sea for see in the first stanza

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Amay
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jus an Ordinary Jyo,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Fare-the-Well' which was recommended by my friend, Sum1.

Title: The title of your poem fits very well with it's message.

Description: Meeting, parting, the relationship in between. This is something that is very relate-able to all readers.

Contents: Thank you for sharing both versions of your poem. I enjoyed the first, but I think I like the second better. It seemed to flow better for me. I'm sure others will disagree, but you need to choose which one is your favorite.
This poem seems very appropriate for me to read today. Tomorrow, my best friend's mother will be buried. I won't be able to be there, but in your words I've found comfort. Thank you for sharing here on WDC.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Deelyt- Chillin,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'From Courageous to Cowardice; A Journey

Title and Description work together bringing the familiar character of the Cowardly Lion to the reader's mind. Definitely a draw, what did make him such a scaredy cat?

Contents: What an interesting back story for a beloved character the Cowardly Lion. It begs me to wonder if he'd been better named the henpecked lion. Back to your story. I love how you wove the characters familiar to many children through your piece. You've incorporated Aseop, Warner Brother Cartoon's Speedy Gonzales and Barney. I' don't know if you're a Star Trek fan, but the wife reminds me of Stella, Henry Mudd's wife. Very nicely done. Then you brought it all back to the story of The Wizard of Oz.

Conventions: I didn't notice any glaring errors within your story.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Desire's Paradox,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'When Trouble Walks In'

Title: The standing joke at our house is all of our middle names are Trouble- so naturally I had to read about when it walks in.

Description: Your description piqued my interest. Noir look... I'd never heard that term used in relations to movies before a few months ago. I've always loved the style, but didn't realize it was a style.

Contents: Extremely well written. The style and characterizations fit perfectly. You can almost hear Bogart striking the match and narrating the tale as it unfolds. Excellent!

Thumbs up: Daily flash fictions are such a great way to get the creative juices flowing. I do hope your story did well.

Conventions: I didn't notice anything glaring.

After promising results and wishing good night>> I think I would have said bidding a good night instead of wishing.


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Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Sunshine Loves Stormy Weather,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review ' The Silent Moo'

Title: Many things ran through my head when I read the title. So naturally I had to find out if I was any where near correct. I wasn't.
Very good.

Description: Then I read your description and did some more thinking, cows on the side of the road. OK, let's see what's going on. I thought to myself. I was wrong again. This is getting to be a habit.

Contents: Your commuting story started off, and ping my brain went to - traffic accident with cows. I think it didn't pay me to think so much. I totally get why a dinner of steaks would have been impossible. There is something about those great big cow eyes ant their long eye lashes. Maybe, they were going to the farm, instead of the meat packing plant. I can only hope.

Thumbs up: I loved your ending.

Conventions: No errors noted

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Lilyrose,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Home'

Title and Description: The title and description work well together to draw a reader into reading your poem.

Contents: You've created a list type of poem with your noun, then a few words about it's importance. I love how it starts briefly and then grows to expand returning to the brief ending. The form created is beautiful. Your words are powerful and flow with ease. It reminds us all of what we enjoy doing here on WDC, our innate joy of writing.

Conventions: No errors noted.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Mitch,

Happy WDC Anniversary!

I’m honored to read and review 'Death'

Title: To make a long story short, my best friend's mother is standing at death's door. I'm just hoping that my friend can make it home safely before she passes. I think that's why I chose to read your poem.

Description: I think we all have those days once in a while. Some of the best writing comes out of our trials and pain.

Contents: You've written a poem of contrasts... Was it worth living a long life? Is death really the end? It's a stack of legal paperwork and jerks that don't understand someone is dead. Holy cow, the stories I could tell about settling my aunt's estate.

Conventions: I think it would help the reader if you added some punctuation marks, or maybe you thought they were pointless... like death> Interesting quandary to ponder.

Please remember, I'm just a writer like you, and always take reviews with a grain of salt. You have to decide what is best for your work and follow your heart.
Thank you for sharing your work here on WdC.
Amay
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