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lost boys and miracles

*Star*Overall:I enjoyed reading this poem of a magical place to take away from your troubles.
*Star*I particularly liked:The emotions that you have put into this piece shinned through brilliantly. I also liked the rhyme and rhythm, which were never overdone.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:No mistakes of this nature found in a five star piece.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:the content was hopeful, faithful, and intense. the prompt was the writer' heart.
*Star*Suggestions:continue writing for yourself and your children. You might consider joining WDC MOMs, the premier group for mothers on WDC. We have a forum to post poems and stories like this and for reviews as well. We would love to see you there!
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*Star*Overall:This was an amazing story of parenthood, fear, strength, and life. I have had a baby 6 weeks premature and know the horrors of the NICU. This story actually produced a tear from me. Good job!
*Star*I particularly liked:Your true feelings and emotions came through brilliantly. The details to time that you give were phenomenal.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I didn't notice any, but I was very engaged in the story.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:the content was emotional, reflective, and the prompt was the writer's sons.
*Star*Suggestions:
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Review of Maybe  
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*Star*Overall:This is a heartfelt poem about being without the one your love.

*Star*I particularly liked:"Maybe, my heart won't skip a beat
when you enter a room.
Maybe, when your hand brushes mine
I won't feel a thing." there was a good tone here.

*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:No mistakes of this sort found.

*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:Yes, followed the prompt for the words in motion poetry contest. "loneliness" The content of this piece is reflective, mournful, emotional, and personal.

*Star*Suggestions:The only thing that I feel is keeping this piece from a higher rating is the repetition of "maybe". I realize that it is the title and that there should be some repetition, I just felt as though it became overbearing towards the end. Otherwise, I love the piece. Good job and good luck in the contest!

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Review of Princess' Frog  
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Pricess' Frog

*Bullet*Overall:a really cute poem with a new twist. I loved the message. Well told.
*Bullet*I particularly liked:The ending. Very surprising and creative.
*Bullet*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:No mistakes noted, however, irrelevant to the contest.
*Bullet*Content/ followed a prompt:Yes, for the Writer's cramp...write about what would happen if the princesses frog turned into something else.
*Bullet*Suggestions:Keep writing!
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Review of Poser Princes  
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Poser Princes


*Bullet*Overall:This is a whimsical and lighthearted satire based on "The Frog Prince"

*Bullet*I particularly liked:The princess's quirky attitude. You gave her a good voice.

*Bullet*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:although this contest does not judge based on these items, I still did not find any errors.

*Bullet*Content/ followed a prompt:Yes, the author followed the prompt for The Writer's cramp contest...write about what would happen if a princess kissed a frog and they turned into something other than a prince.

*Bullet*Suggestions:I realize the time restraints for this contest, so many of these suggestions may have been overlooked due to that. First, what was the point in describing the emerald water so well? It didn't propel the story at all. although it was pretty, it wasn't necessary. You started most of your sentences out by telling the reader what is happening. You tell us what the frog is doing, and how he is doing it. The story would be much more captivating if you could show us what the frog was doing instead. Considering the word count for this piece, you still had plenty words left to show us with. I enjoyed your imaginative approach to this prompt and think that you have a good narrative voice. Keep writing!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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the shrub and the oak

*Star*Overall:What a wonderful message told in such a unique form. I loved the creativity here. Good job!
*Star*I particularly liked: You enjoy the peace and tranquility of ordinary day to day living. Enjoy your life, for in your average status is rare beauty.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I did notice that the first sentence, "your" is "you".
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:followed a prompt for The Writer's Cramp contest. Write about being average or having average qualities.
*Star*Suggestions:just to keep writing and remember to show not tell.*Smile*
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Review of Prehistory  
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prehistory

*Bullet*Overall:I liked this free verse poem regarding the authors travels.
*Bullet*I particularly liked:And the last time
spent in darkness
was enough to crash
all dreams:
*Bullet*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I did not notice any mistakes of this nature.
*Bullet*Content/ followed a prompt:The content was reflective and emotional. The prompt was from the authors own life experiences.
*Bullet*Suggestions:Keep writing!
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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This is my review of Laughing and Screaming
*Star*Overall:this poem really hit the nail on the head. I know too well the pains of this disease. The emotions were real an true to life.
*Star*I particularly liked:"Too many smiles
False mask for the day
Spinning in circles
On hope that won't stay
Laughing and screaming
At the same time "
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I didn't notice any mistakes of this nature.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:The content was profound. reflective and imaginative. Vivid imagery and word usage.
*Star*Suggestions:just keep writing!
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Review of My Little Girl  
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My Little Girl

*Bullet*Overall:This is a very emotional issue to write about. I have felt this loss the same as you.
*Bullet*I particularly liked:The way you presented the issue.
*Bullet*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:Use end punctuation to guide the reader through your rhythm.
*Bullet*Content/ followed a prompt:The content is reflective and emotional as well as remorseful.
*Bullet*Suggestions:I think that this is really closer to prose than poetry. Being as there are no rhymes, no meter, no rhythm. Prose is more everyday natural speaking rather than the eloquent language and forms of powtry. There are some very good articles on the difference between prose and poetry here on WDC. Keep writing!
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Review of I Know  
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I Know

*Bullet*Overall:I liked this poem. It has potential. Your rhythm is almost perfect and the rhymes are good. a poem about friends, lovers, and needing each other.
*Bullet*I particularly liked:your style!
*Bullet*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:commas would help this piece flow more fluidly.
*Bullet*Content/ followed a prompt:The content of this piece is reflective and foreboding.
*Bullet*Suggestions:Look at this verse:
I know what to say
To make this all go away,
But is a lie the right wrong?
Will it help you stay strong?
On the first line you count 5 syllables, line 2 is 7, line 3 is 7, and 4 is 6. These need to be patterned out to make a more fluid rhythm. May I suggest this:
I know what to say, 5
To make this all go away, 7
But is a lie, the right wrong? 7
Will it help you to stay strong?" 7
 by adding only a comma and the word "to" I was able to balance the rhythm. There are several places in the poem where this could be applied and improve the overall rhythm.
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from my heart to yours/u}

*Bullet*Overall:A dark poem with suicidal tendencies, reflecting on a lost love, betrayal. Nice.
*Bullet*I particularly liked:The moon ventured out from behind her pale gossamer,
Exposing to all the dark and the light.
*Bullet*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:No mistakes of that nature found.
*Bullet*Content/ followed a prompt:Yes, for the Color my world contest. The content was dark, reflective, and supernatural.
*Bullet*Suggestions:Keep writing!
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Review of Broard Shoulders  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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broad shoulders

*Star*Overall:This is a great poem with a message of hope. It is something that we can all relate to, the stresses of life.
*Star*I particularly liked:Problems of life may be weighing you down;
With only God knowing inside you frown.

Press forward without a complait you tell;
While pain within is yearning to yell.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:In the section above, "complaint" is misspelled, There is also an instance of "broad" being misspelled as well. I think you should use commas to break up the lines and give the reader a guide to your rhythm.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:The writer followed their heart and soul. The content was positive and reflective.
*Star*Suggestions:Other than using commas and correcting the spelling, nothing. keep writing
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Review of The Journey  
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The journey

*Star*Overall:This a good poem about choosing your path in life and getting it right. Not knowing your destiny and tackling fate.
*Star*I particularly liked:‘Cuz in this life
you call your own
You chose the path
to walk alone
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I would suggest using punctuation to help with the flow and rhythm.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:The content was reflective and real life. The writer was prompted by their soul
*Star*Suggestions:I would lose the 'cuz and jst say "because this life." keep writing!
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they don't really know

*Star*Overall:A short poem full of deep thought and emotions. Nicely written and gets the message across.
*Star*I particularly liked:How he truly feels inside his heart

is enough to end what he didn't start.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I think that commas at the end of some of the lines would help the reader with pause breaks and inflections.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:Only the author's heart.
*Star*Suggestions:Keep writing!
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they don't really know

*Star*Overall:A short poem full of deep thought and emotions. Nicely written and gets the message across.
*Star*I particularly liked:How he truly feels inside his heart

is enough to end what he didn't start.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I think that commas at the end of some of the lines would help the reader with pause breaks and inflections.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:Only the author's heart.
*Star*Suggestions:Keep writing!
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Review of Under The Sink  
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under the sink

*Star*Overall:I love children's poetry. That is what I first learned to read. This poem deals with the ever lurking 'little green man" that messes up your stuff when your not looking. A cute and whimsical take on the old myth.
*Star* particularly liked:The way your character decides to get back at him.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:No errors of this sort found.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:
*Star*Suggestions:As I am sure you are aware, a few of the lines throw off the rhythm. I prefer to see children's poetry follow a definite rhythm for sake of learning poetry. Keep writing!
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Review of FEELINGS  
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feelings

*Star*Overall:I really enjoyed this poem It is a quick and to the point poem about feelings that friends share, and shouldn't.
*Star*I particularly liked:I hurt just like others do, this I want known,
but if dishonesty and betrayal come, would rather be alone.
My heart's always open to genuine friends,
and if I'm wrong, I'll make amends.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:You know better than I, but shouldn't there be a comma between "due" and "to" in the third line. It feels like a pause in the rhythm there.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:Followed the writer's heart and the content was deep, reflective, and soulful.
*Star*Suggestions:Keep writing and doing all the wonderful things you do. Oh, and JOIN MY GROUP, WDC MOMs...we are looking for active members of WDC to help bring it to life and create a nurturing place.
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Review of FEELINGS  
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feelings

*Star*Overall:I realy enjoyed this poem It is a quick and to the point poem about feelings that friends share, and shouldn't.
*Star*I particularly liked:I hurt just like others do, this I want known,
but if dishonesty and betrayal come, would rather be alone.
My heart's always open to genuine friends,
and if I'm wrong, I'll make amends.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:You know better than I, but shouldn't there be a comma between "due" and "to" in the third line. It feels like a pause in the rhythm there.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:Followed the writer's heart and the content was deep, reflective, and soulful.
*Star*Suggestions:Keep writing and doing all the wonderful things you do. Oh, and JOIN MY GROUP, WDC MOMs...we are looking for active members of WDC to help bring it to life and create a nurturing place.
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Review of Under The Sink  
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under the sink

*Star*Overall:I love children's poetry. That is what I first learned to read. This poem deals with the ever lurking 'little green man" that messes up your stuff when your not looking. A cute and whimsical take on the old myth.
*Star*I particularly liked:The way your character decides to get back at him.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:No errors of this sort found.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:
*Star*Suggestions:As I am sure you are aware, a few of the lines throw off the rhythm. I prefer to see children's poetry follow a definite rhythm for sake of learning poetry. Keep writing!
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Review of Megan's Ballroom  
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Megan's Ballroom

*Star*Overall:first off, I don't usually review "pages" and "places" , only writing, but this one is different! Giving yet another place for writers to leave work for review, and by a published author with a degree. Wow!
*Star*I particularly liked:I loved all of your fun medieval graphics.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:N/a
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:The content here is to provide a forum to post work to be reviewed by princes Megan rose.
*Star*Suggestions:JOIN MY GROUP! WDC MOMs is looking for member, and you are curently sponsoring one of our MOMs, as your rising star. Ask her what she thinks about us and come join the MOMs.
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Review of I CAN !  
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I can!

*Star*Overall:what a cute and whimsical children's poem about getting dressed. I loved it. Nice rhythm and rhyme.
*Star*I particularly liked:Tag in the back, Shirt on just right
Pants pulled up good and tight
My shoes today I will not fight!
Right foot in, Left foot too
Oh shoe horn, I need you!

*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I would go ahead and use commas to set off the rhythm. You almost do this in a few lines and then it stops. It would really make it flow faster.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:the content was real life and confidence.
*Star*Suggestions:Keep writing. and JOIN MY GROUP! I am looking for moms to submit their parenting, children pieces to our forum, MOMs Write!
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for kidd, the cat, with love

*Star*Overall:A realistic, but sweet poem about the family pet and remembering it's life in final days.
*Star*I particularly liked:Your life filled ours with joy
But with age comes that final breath
About it no one can be coy
We all know with life there’s death
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:perhaps use end punctuation to guide the reader through your rhythm.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:The content was personal and emotional.
*Star*Suggestions:Keep writing!
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Review of The Question  
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The question

*Star*Overall:This is a very well written poem. and being a mother and the leader of the MOMs group here at WDC, this fits with me very well.
*Star*I particularly liked:
The answer to that is nowhere,
for each time I look at the three
I see the values I have instilled.
as my children look up to me.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I usually prefer to see commas placed as a guide for readers, but this one worked.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:The content was real, reflective, and emotional.
*Star*Suggestions:JOIN MY GROUP! I would love to have this piece posted n the MOMs Write forum, this is just the type of writing we look for! Keep writing.
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Review of ONE MORE DAY!  
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One more day

*Star*Overall:This is a very deep piece with tons of emotion wrapped up in an important message.
*Star*I particularly liked:Your imagery. The questioning back and forth. You made a striking point.
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I felt like the poem became choppy. You begin with no punctuation in the first stanza, and then you start with lots of question marks, which are fine as long s you use end punctuation throughout. Perhaps the poem would flow more fluidly if presented with commas, rather than with end punctuation at each line. For example: my suggestions are in red.you wroteOne more day of questions,
Will they be answered soon?
Will our words reach congress,
Or will our words be doomed?
Will the people wait to see,
To hear of more blood shed?
One more day of wondering,
If our soldiers are alive or dead.
*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:The content was immense with our times and from the writer's heart.
*Star*Suggestions:Don't double space. break it down into stanzas separated by a line break.
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Review of Flawed Creation  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Flawed creation

*Star*Overall:I liked this poems perspective on childhood. Good imagery and word choices.
*Star*I particularly liked:good and bad,

pretty and ugly,

wrong or right;

choices once perfected,
*Star*Punctuation, grammar, spelling:I think that you should capitalize every line and not just the first. The third and seventh lines need commas.
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*Star*Content/ followed a prompt:Only the writer's soul.
*Star*Suggestions:i think that single spaced stanzas work better for most readers. Keep writing.
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