Ha Ha ha What a great poll, I so admit it!!! I will also admit that I drool too!! And the funny thing is that my hubby doesn't care, he on the other hand would probably not admit it, as he denies it to me all the time!! Snoring I mean!! LOL
Keep up the great work!!
Hugs, Serenity
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P.S. this is the 1st of five reviews gifted to you by ~WhoMe???~
Absolutely perfect my dear. I love the way you are, as you do give and give, and in turn you recieve as well. Your friendship doesn't come with any strings, I should know, as you are a friend of mine!!
Keep up the great work, and when is the second book coming out??
Ha Ha Ha
Hugs, Serenity
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wow sounds cool. I want to go and stay, A small little ghost story, that the present population gets excitement from. Typical, must take place in the US ha ha ha
ANyway I didn't find any grammer or spelling mistakes so you get an A+++
Keep up the great work!!
Hugs,
Serenity
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Great poem Sherri, very emotional and confontational.
I didn't find any grammer or spelling mistake!!! You get an A++
Other than that I thought the flow was good, and the beat was something I expected, maybe to a wild drum beat, at least that is how I read it. Reminds me of a song I can't wuite remember!! Ha Ha Ha
Once again you did not disappoint!
Keep up the great work!
Hugs, Serenity
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Man oh man I love halloween!!! This is another piece that does not disappoint. Just reading it, makes me want to dress the kids up, put on my own costume and trick or treat right now!!
No spelling or grammer errors, so great job hun!!!
Kepp up the great work!!
Hugs, Serenity
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Awww, Sherri, what a great idea and thank you so much for sharing it for all of your friends!! I am thinking that you are the best of friends to all you meet, and I am so glad to have met you here on WDC!!
Also WDC is lucky to have a patron like you!!
Luv and Hugs, Serenity
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The nearesttry closer instead of nearest my ejection from their household was approached was when Linda enquired if I had said goodbye to my friends at school, and to make sure that I returned all my School text books to my teacher.
Other than that you might try using italics for the letter from roberts mother Christine, as I was about to point out the horrendous speeling until, I realized what it was, and re-read it!! Ha Ha Ha
Keep up the great work!!
Hugs, Serenity
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I pressed my lips to his and he parted my lips with his tongue. I can taste the sweet blood on his lip. Then I began to get hungry for the blood so I started sucking harder and harder. I felt a wave of pain coarse through my vainsveins. My heart beat got louder and faster. Then I started to shake. The pain was unberable and endless. paragraph breakI pulled back and screamed.
This were the only two mistakes I found. WOnderful tale and a total tease, as I wanted to read more!! Great job.
One other thing, I felt the change was too quick for my taste...but hey you are the writer, you just happened to let us peek into your world!
You have a great folder here, using colors that are easy to read. You are quite the poet and I can not wait to read more in this folder, plus I will viewing any other things you have in your port!!
Keep up the great work!!!
Hugs, Serenity
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Now we are over and I've moved ionon but have you?
Every day andshould there be an I here? think maybe I made the relationship fall apart but you never supported anything.
Other than that this is a very emotion poem about possibly a regret that you ever met and liked this boy! I like the flow and I pointed out the mistakes I found!
Wow I really liked it, seems you are talking of a lost love and remembering them through a picture!!! Don't know if it makes sense but that was the impression I got!!!
I have to wonder why you don't put any of your poetry up on the groups board, but who am I to say!!! Ha Ha Ha
I didn't spot any grammer or spelling mistakes so great job there!!!
Pretty cute, must say I am guilty of over half of these things you have listed, although eighties music is not a guilty pleasure in my books but rather a way of life if you were an eighties child like myself!!
Ha Ha ha I grew up to eighties rock, must say that it is my downfall!!!! lmaoo
Had fun doing your wordfind!!!
Hugs, Serenity
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I remember my Gran appearing distracted, agitated and snappy. I remember it had been dark outside for a long time. I remember my Gran on the phone in a panicky voice complaining that she thought my mother had “done a runner” and wouldn’t be coming back for me - again.
The nearest I came to a happy and excitement feeling in my stomach was Christmas day morning. Judith had got me out of bed early and genuinely seemed please to see me – I think she was excited. “Robert come and have a look, Father Christmas has been here and he’s left you loads of toys” she giggled.
Those were the only two mistakes I found, not my strong point!!! This story is extremely powerful, colorful, and wonderfully written!!!
You have a definate winner on your hands here, and I can't wait to read more!!!
Hugs, Serenity
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Simple yet it reminds me of my own children!!! Good work, sorry I suck at reviewing poetry, however the flow is good and there are no grammer/spelling mistakes!!!
Great job!!
Hugs, Serenity
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Hey hun, I really liked it! I noticed one spelling mistake; second verse third line I think it should be blinded!!
Other than it is full of passion and sorrow from two different characters!
The flow is good and you display the emotions really well!!!
Hugs, Serenity
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Wow this is a pretty good poem. Unfortunately I am not very good at reviewing poetry but I will give it a shot.
The flow seemed pretty good as well as cadence. There were a few spots that falter but other than that good job.
I like the images I get from this poem and you describe the feelings people could have very well.
All in all I liked it!!!
Keep up the good work!!!
Hugs, Serenity
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Pretty good story and I like the twang and drawl you gave to the piece!! It made it feel more real. I found a mistake I don't think you meant to be there so I will point it out!!
You wrote:"Sheila, honey, come here!" Oh good night, he would have to kiss her her on her
I think you have an extra 'her' in there!!
Other than that nothing else jumped out at me, as I assumed you meant it to be that way!!!
Keep up the great work!!!
Hugs, Serenity
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Wow this is a great poem. So happy and joyful of a man remembering his favorite thing!! The flow and cadence was extrordinary and because of it the length of the poem flew by!! This was a fast read and a great one at that!!!
Once again very well written!!
This story brings to mind many of my own experiences back when I fished alot!! Ha Ha!!
Anyway I found that you missed a few spaces in between pragraphs, but other than that it is a great memory!!
While reading this, I thought how sweet the inocent touches were, and how a woman/total tomboy would react, and you hit it on the head!!!
Such a sweet, innocent excerpt of something akin to first love, at least it seems that way for Wendy!!
Great job, and overall it takes me back to time when I flyfished on the Pecos everyday with boyfriend and puppy in tow!!! Thanks for bringing up a happy memory for me!!
Hugs, Serenity
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What a great poll, I so admit it!!! I will also admit that I drool too!! And the funny thing is that my hubby doesn't care, he on the other hand would probably not admit it, as he denies it to me all the time!! Snoring I mean!! LOL
