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This was hilariously informative and I do believe this is the first time I have ever put those two words together in the one breath. LOL
I love the way you have a knack for saying just the right thing at the right time in all of your items. The entire editorial was like a rollercoaster- Up, up...hilarious. Down, down...moving on to some information. (Repeat.)
The entire item was up and down and I found this to be thrilling, exciting and funny.
There are no visible errors and suggestions for improvement are not required.
Thanks for the laugh!
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What a great opening stanza! It was a strong beginning to a fabulous Poem.
Excellent imagery has been captured in this Poem and you create a very strong visual for the reader to be swept up by.
The rhyme is splendid. I enjoyed the abab rhyme scheme and felt it suited this item perfectly. At no point did it feel forced during the reading.
There are no visible errors and suggestions for improvement are not required.
Thank you for allowing me to read your writing.
Well done and write on.
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Your endless ability as a writer shines through this Poem with ease. I am amazed that not only have you created a Poem with an indepth story within it but also because you used each letter of the alphabet to begin it.
One would expect certain areas of your Poem to feel forced due to the letter template you needed to use but I can tell you, it does not. At no point did your Poem feel forced nor did the story veer off track. You made this look easy, when anyone one who attempted to write one of these knows that it is infact not an easy feat at all.
There are no visible grammatical errors in your item but I do have a few suggestions for improvement. Please keep in mind all comments and suggestions are offered in the spirit of helping you. Feel free to take onboard anything you deem is helpful and discard the rest at will.
Line 1- I would make a slight adjustment to this line so it reads smoother.
'All she ever wished for, was a happy ending'. seems to read smoother just by the adjustment of 'was' and 'for'.
Line 9- Insert a comma after beginning.
In general, I would encourage you to sprinkle this item with some further punctuation strictly because of the length of the Poem.
It was heartbreaking to read such an item but you told it so well that I could not help but to be completey taken by it.
Well done and write on.
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It seems you are affiliated with some excellent groups. I am fortunate to be a member of two of them.
This folder is extremely easy to navigate, actually, your entire port is very easy to venture through, which is great because that entices more people to read your treasures.
I am so pleased I was given the opportunity to stop by here and I hope to come visit again, very soon.
All the best.
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I love the introduction for the folder. You make it very clear to any visitors that this folder contains writings which are your own opinion. I like that you do not sway any potential reviewers to agree with you. You give them the freedom to decide for themselves and even encourage them to disagree with you, if they choose to.
The folder is organized and easy for the reader to navigate. I must admit, I do not think I have read any items in this folder yet, but I will make sure I do while your name is on the order board.
Great folder!
Well done and write on.
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The folder I am reviewing is again titled directly: Adult. I am sure there would be others who would jump at the opportunity to tell you it is too simplistic and boring and suggest alteration, but not I. I feel the simplicity makes for easier navigation through your port. The reader is aware, with one simple word of what the content will be centered around. In this case, adult writings.
There is a great selection of little treasures for all readers to be entertained by. The titles are fabulous and admitedly, I have yet to read them all but I do remember dropping you a few reviews for some of the items and what I read was stunning!
I will be sure to try and make it back here to review more from this folder. I do feel you tackle the adult genre exceptionally well.
Well done and write on.
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This is a neat and compact folder which is simply titled: Dark.
I know I am being biased when I say this because I am a dark writer, but there is no other place I would prefer to be in your port. Not to say that I do not enjoy all of your writing, because I assure you that I do, but this genre is right up my alley.
It is great to see you are slowly building up a collection of awardicons to decorate your folder and it is even better to see they are being given by numerous people instead of a select few. This is a clear indication your writing is being well received by many.
I do hope you add more to this folder some time soon. I promise, I will come racing here when you do.
Well done and write on.
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Your item stands true to the description that this is a slightly morbid write. It seems this Poem is generally based on the pain experienced by a husband, and this pain seems to be inflicted upon him upon him by his brutal and sadistic wife. Although heartbreaking to read the turmoil being experience, in one respect it was refreshing to read because it gave the viewer a chance to look at this form of abuse from another persepctive other than the woman's.
The structure of the rhyme was a little shaky because rhyming only the last two lines of each triplet creates a very loose rhyme which can be easily lost if it is not concentrated upon 100%. The rhyme itself has been well done but I feel it will not receive the recognition it deserves unless the viewer is prepared to look deeper into your item. The structure of the Poem itself overshadows the rhyme because it is too distracting. I feel the words should not be seperated midway and should remain intact, true to their appearance. This is a personal observation only.
I would have loved to have seen you end this Poem with ' Lost that ring'. It would have been a perfect finale to a Poem which was strong in theme. Again, this is only my personal opinion and should not be taken in any other way.
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Thank you for an entertaining read. I do hope you find my suggestions helpful.
Well done and write on.
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It is so hard to imagine that this was one of your first attempts at Poetry, Gabriella. The item is just phenomenal and at a standard many people strive to reach each and every time they put pen to paper. Obviously your talents stem back to a long time ago and you have sustained them with ease.
The first three lines are stunning and impeccably written. Again, the imagery incorporated into this item is beautiful and so vivid, that I felt like I was there.
The twist in the item was sad but poetic nevertheless. It gave your item a slight epic quality and in all honestly I kept saying to myself: "I wish I were able to bring to life such magnificent imagery, as youseem to do so easily."
There are no visible errors in your item and I suggest that this item remains the way it is, a portrait of perfection.
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This was a riveting story. I was completely hypnotized by your item and once I began reading, there was no way I was going to be able to stop until it was finished. I fell victim to your words.
General interpretation- You tell the story of a family of women who are degraded, repressed and quite literally servants to the man of the house. Your story revolves around old ethnic traditions where women are not considered equals let alone human beings. To the modern world this is shameful and shallow behavior which only serves to enhance the power of the man, sadly some countries still guard this tradition very closely and your story reminds us that this is still common practice in other parts of the world.
What I liked- I enjoyed the inspirational turn this story took. Amrita found the strength to empower herself and her daughters. Although she had been forced to suffer under these conditions, she had not been completely brainswashed to the point where she believed this was an acceptable behavior. She knew it was wrong but needed to obey in order to survive.
Watching her calculate ways to save herself and her 2 daughters was the work of pure maternal insitnct. No tradition, punishment or disapproval was strong enough to erase this from her. She was a fantastic character with many mental, emotional and physical scars of her own but she never lost her courage or her hope to dare to dream for something better.
What I didn't like- I thought it was a shame that the viewer was not able to play witness to what was written in the letter to her friend. We were told that she used this letter to pour her heart out for the first time since she was 16 years of age. Considering the connection you successfully established between the viewer and Amrita I think her character my have been able to take on more dimension and definition if you were to 'show' us the pain she had experienced during these years. A simple waft of knowledge was not enough to suffice.
Errors- There are many grammatical errors in this item that will need to be fixed if you would like your story to be the best it can be. You seem to have an issue with placing question marks in the appropriate areas. A question mark does not always need to be applied at the end of every question which is asked. When you find yourself faced with a series of questions which are constant and without pause it is more effective to punctuate at the end of the last question that is asked.
I also happened to notice there were many times where you have placed a period (fullstop) and ended a line which is clearly not finished but merely just in need of a pause. A deeper look into your item is what is needed to fix these errors.
Line 27- 1 needs to be removed from Deepika's name.
Paragraph 1- There is an abundance of repetition featured in this paragraph. The word so desperately needs to be eliminated. Repetition is forgiven in Poetry but very rarely in story writing as you are given ample room to be creative and stray from this pattern.
Please look for this, next time you view this item. I have only pointed out one example but there are many others scattered through your story.
Overall comments- I enjoyed the story because it has depth, meaning and an overall moral. All of the elemets needed for a successful story are present in this item but a few of them require some extra fine tuning if you really wish for this to shine to its full potential. From an attention perspective, you snared my undivided attention from the second paragraph and sustained it right through to the final line.
I hope my review has been of some help to you. I love this story and do hope you continue to fine tune it until it is perfect.
Well done and write on.
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Wow, this was such a strange prompt but I feel you did a good job with it.
I love how the tables are turned on the psychic, he should have known better than to trust a reporter. The swindler got swindled.
The roles of the characters were a little unusual too. One would presume that Jebediah is the main character but more emphasis is placed upon the reporter. There seemed to be a struggle for superiority but this mingles well within the story due to the power struggle being shown between the two characters anyway.
In general it was a good story and you used the prompt well but I would have liked to see more development in the plot. I feel this would have really drove the finale home to the reader.
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This is a very informative article based upon Gestational Diabetes and your own personal experience with it.
Many people who have not experienced this illness do not realize the sacrifices these people must make in order to ensure the health of themselves and the child they are carrying. It is a condition which turns almost everything upisde down strictly because we need food in order to survive and most eating patterns are not healthy to begin with.
I experienced Gestational Diabetes during my pregnancy with my twins. It was such a battle to find suitable foods to eat which left me feeling satisfied. Skim milks, low GI breads, limiting sugar intake, even as far as certain fruits were scratched off the list as 'bad items' to be digested. It was a nightmare! Thankfully, the diabetes left and never returned once my twins were born.
Not only do I love the fact that this article is educational but I also love the inspirational way in which you have expressed it. Yes, at the beginning the diagnosis is all doom and gloom but you come to terms with it and in the process of the trial and error, you have trained yourself to eat healthier for the long term. This is a great source of strength for people who have just been diagnosed and are feeling at their lowest point. There is a light at the end of the tunnel and people know this because you managed to find it and tell us.
There are no visible errors in your item and suggestions for improvement are not required.
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The worst thing about this item for me was that it ended. This is a story which I feel would better be suited to a short of 300 words to better satisfy the reader with a conclusion. The content is so dramatic that it pulled me in immediately and 55 words was just not enough execution room to leave me completely fulfilled by the end.
I love the directness of the item. Naturally, as the item follows a word count of 55 words the content is sure to be direct but if many writers incoprorated this direct approach into their stories they would be more entertaining and riveting.
Please know that I think your story is fantastic, I just feel if it were written to a larger word count it would be outstanding!
There are no visible errors and suggestions for improvement have been made.
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It seems I did the second half of this search first. That sounds typical of me LOL
This is a great companion for the other search. It was very generous of the person/persons to make this for you. You must have been proud as punch when you received this, I know I would have been.
This is a fun item created in honor of a very deserving person. It was a pleasure to have the opportunity to complete it.
It has been so long since I have done a word search. I actually forgot how refreshing they are in breaking away from tireless reading whilst still keeping the mind active. I enjoyed this word search which has been based on you. Many of the words I recognized immediately as being associated with you whilst others came as a surprise. I am curious to know who made this for you. Obviously their heart is as big as yours.
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I am completely blown away by how many cNote shops you have, Sherri. Way to go! I am familiar with some of them because I have purchased from a few but there are many others that I have never come by before. When I am able to find the time, I will most definitely be looking into these a little further.
This is amazing! Such a large variety and there is no possibility that all individual needs cannot be met just from visiting this one place.
There is no doubt that your Poem is emotionally potent. An array of different emotions are weaved through your item and they are all ejected onto the reader with ease. Pain, rage, desperation, fright and a sense of abandonment are just to name a few that are featured in your item.
In general I feel your Poem is one of substance and definitely one that is worth more effort and patience fused into it. The lack of format, punctuation and meter in your item is what is hindering the quality of this item.
This is a Poem which would receive benefit if you were to break it up and section it. The item itself, is far too long to have no division and it feels as though the Poem is dragging on. Sectioning is the cure to erradicate this blemish.
Punctuation is required to help stabalize a natural rhythm and or flow. It is widely used a tool of guidance for your audience to orientate them through your Poem as you intended from the beginning. It also enhances many items merely because it takes on the appearance of an item which looks more professional and kept.
Please keep in mind all suggestions and comments anre offered in the spirit of kindness and improvement. Take onboard what you deem is helpful and discard the rest at will.
Aww it is not often we are able to read a Poem where two different worlds merge and result in a happy ending. Many items which have been written about people who have met on the internet and later had the opportunity to get to know one another in actual reality are usually stories of disaster but yours is the complete opposite and it seems you found the perfect fairytale that many people dare to hope for.
I feel the rhyme in your item fits well and does not feel forced at any point.
There are no visible errors but I do have one suggestion for improvement and this is to punctuate the item. I feel your item is in need of this, to stabalize the flow and help to guide the reader through your item at the pace you intended when it was written.
All comments and suggestions are offered in the spirit of kindness and improvement. Please feel free to take onboard anything you deem is helpful and discard the rest at will.
I love this story! I am so pleased a dark writer took it upon themself to take a fabled mediocre story and turn it into a modern tale of terror. I was almost jumping out of my seat with excitement, the further I read thinking 'No, he won't take it there' and then bang you did, each and everytime!
The use of vampires was a nice added touch to a story which has become old as we have all grown. It opened up the story for something completely different to the norm. Vampires, young girls, brothers and sisters, curse, wolves...the list goes on! I must say, I am thrilled to see this item has been awarded. It is very deserving of the recognition.
There are a few visible errors which were noticeable in the content. I will point them out to you as follows:
Line 8- 'manevered' should read as 'maneuvered' (Spelling taken from the Concise Edition of the English Dictionary) may not apply to you.
Line 12- 'frozen' should be 'froze'.
Lost in the content somewhere you have written 'then' and it should read as 'than'. You will have to locate this error on your own. I lost it and have not been able to find it again but I know it is there.
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This Poem has a fantastic rhythm which is captured from the very beginning and is sustained through out the entire duration of your Poem. At no point does this aspect of your Poem skip a beat.
The content is dark and chilling and naturally I was completely mesmerised by it because this is my favorite genre.
This review will be kept short as I feel there is nothing whatsoever which requires alteration. It is a fantastic Poem and speaks for itself.
I love the mystery your item creates. 'What if's' are always the beginning of questions which lurk in the mind of many people, especially when it comes to matters of the heart. This notion can cause a person to step back from an opportunity or step forward and enthusiastically embrace an opportunity which otherwise would have been lost to them. It is a double edged sword and I always like to read items like this particular one, to see how the character reacts.
The emotions within your item are running rampant. There is love, fear of the unknown, anxiety....the list goes on. It is a tumultuous read and effortlessly swept me up by the time I reached the 2nd stanza.
The twist at the end was great and one I did not see coming. The descriptive wordplay was so intense that I did not, for a second, consider this may be anything short of a reality. I liked the surprise!
There are no visible errors in your item but I do suggest you take another brief look at this Poem to be sure your punctuation is completely in order. I did happen to notice a few sections where I feel a comma should be inserted but I will leave this up to your judgement.
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The Poetic language you have used is quite attractive and I was drawn to the soft and subtle tone of narration which was coming across to me. There are huge contrasts in this item which I found were interesting to watch unfold. It is as though you are sympathizing with 'Sarah' because of her choices rather than feeling honored by her decisions. The later part of the item is displayed to the reader as an attempt to make 'Sarah' change her mind. As I said, it was very interesting to watch it play itself out on screen.
I enjoyed everything about this, minus one factor: the repetition. The reptition in your item is extreme and your item would read smoother if you were to eliminate it. The constant references to 'My love' became a hinderance and an annoyance to me because it caused a constant pause in your items momentum.
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I was completely mesmerized by this Poem. The darkened message swept me up with ease and gracefully carried me to the finale of your Poem.
You set a dark scene and infuse it with potency by using language which is also dark and withdrawn in tone. As a dark writer myself, I loved it!
I would love to rate this a 5.0, because I enjoyed it so much but there is too much room for improvement in regards to the mehanics of the Poem. I suggest you re-format some of your lines. They stop mid-way and fall to the next line at crucial moments within the item. This creates a pause in the momentum and it is definitely something I would suggest you take another look at to rectify. There are also many punctuation errors within your item, leaning more towards periods (fullstops) which are not present and should be.
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This is a very inspirational item. It encourages one to relish the good times rather than be caught up in the bad.
I feel what is written here is very motivational in helping others beat those blues and remind us that tomorrow is another day and each breath we take, is life.
It seemed a shame for it to end so quickly. I would have loved to have had the opportunity to read even deeper into this whilst it was on such a high momentum.
In general, I feel this was an excellent form of expression and certainly something all people should take a peek at when they are feeling like the weight of the world is on their shoulders.
There are no visible errors in your item.
Well done and write on.
Your Poem is centrally focused upon regret. Age and time have a way of creeping up on people and forcing them to take notice of many lost opportunities which occured during their lives. You address this very clearly in your Poem.
It is a Poem which essentially encourages the reader to ponder what may or may not have been during the course of their own lives up-to-date.
The Poem has been written well but there is some room for improvement in regards to your rhyme. Majority of the rhyme is direct and consistent but this seems to lapse in 2 sections.
The 3rd and 4th line of the first verse and 3rd and 4th line of the second verse. I thought perhaps this may have been done deliberately and was part of a pattern but it does not occur in the final verse. I suggest you correct the indirect rhyme which occurs on these lines so it matches the direct rhyme which has been used in the rest of the Poem.
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Well done and write on.
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General interpretation- You tell the story of a family of women who are degraded, repressed and quite literally servants to the man of the house. Your story revolves around old ethnic traditions where women are not considered equals let alone human beings. To the modern world this is shameful and shallow behavior which only serves to enhance the power of the man, sadly some countries still guard this tradition very closely and your story reminds us that this is still common practice in other parts of the world.
What I liked- I enjoyed the inspirational turn this story took. Amrita found the strength to empower herself and her daughters. Although she had been forced to suffer under these conditions, she had not been completely brainswashed to the point where she believed this was an acceptable behavior. She knew it was wrong but needed to obey in order to survive. 
