Ah! A very serious write with a dash of humor. I like that.
I found no errors in this. I'm sure it will be helpful to anyone who reads it. Even those of us who know and try not to use sentence fragments slip up once in a while.
Well. Gotta go. Need to rest. See ya later. Oops! See what I mean?
As a reader, I should not be left with questions that should be but are not answered in the piece. Leaving me with the desire to know more is definitely acceptable. This confused me just a bit. Did you meant definitely acceptable or not acceptable?
When I read a chapter of a novel, I need to want to know more so I'll go to the next chapter. Yet, when reading articles, essays, and any documented writing, I want to learn everything about the subject from what I'm reading at the moment.
I think most of us desire the kind of review you're talking about here.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this story. You've used good, strong sentence structure; no run-on-sentences or sentence fragments.
You held my interest from the beginning to the end.
It's funny how something embarrassing can become a humorous memory with time. Actually, some of my most embarrassing moments have become my most favorite memories.
You've done it again. You've held my interest from the beginning to the end. This is a great lesson.
Living on a fixed income, I often find myself depending on my pennies I've put back. When counted into two rolls of 50, these pennies become a dollar. It takes a lot of time and is sometimes aggravating and often embarrassing, but they're worth it.
Do I have a lucky penny in my life? I'd like to say yes, because that's who I am, but I can't say that. I have to say, I have or "am" a blessed penny; a grandma penny at that.
You get another for this one. Keep up the good work.
I've placed you on my favorites list so I can come raid your port.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this. It's written well. You've done a great job.
I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this. I know absolutely nothing about the game of golf, but I assume each club has a purpose. That's the way the books of the Bible are. Each one has a purpose. When used at the right time (the Holy Spirit leads us in that direction), we benefit greatly from them.
I guess you've been Grandma's inspiration because you've got me ready to do some studying and come up with some more stories (or lessons) using what I might learn.
I decided to check out the Old Testament books that you mentioned to see what was in them that would apply to my daily life. Here's what I found.
Nahum 1:2 God is jealous, and the Lord revengeth; the Lord revengeth, and is furious; the Lord will take vengeance on his adversaries, and he reserveth wrath for his enemies. KJV
Nahum 1:3 The Lord is slow to anger, and great in power, and will not at all acquit the wicked: the Lord hath his way in the whirlwind and in the storm, and the clouds are the dust of his feet. KJV
Nahum 1:7 The Lord is good, a strong hold in the day of trouble; and he knoweth them that trust in him. KJV
Habakkuk 2:20 But the LORD is in his holy temple: let all the earth keep silence before him. KJV
Habakkuk 3:18 Yet I will rejoice in the LORD, I will joy in the God of my salvation. KJV
Habakkuk 3:19 The LORD GOD is my strength, and he will make my feet like hinds' feet, and he will make me to walk upon mine high places... KJV
At least you've got me wanting to study a little deeper. I need to study the book of Zephaniah.
Oh by the way, did you memorize the books of the Bible in order? So many folks don't see the importance of that, but it sure saved me a lot of time tonight when I wanted to find these books that I'm not that familiar with.
Let me know what you come up with concerning Philemon, will you?
Thanks for sharing this item with writing.com and me.
Keep up the good work and continue writing, learning and teaching.
Grandma Penny
sherryb told me about this group. This group of angels covers just about everything and every need and is a asset to writing.com. I would like very much to be a part of it.
What do I need to do to join up with such a great group?
Wow! I had never thought about how many words there are to describe our emotions. I think what I was expecting in the first place was to find words showing sadness. This puzzle pretty much covered it all.
This is very well written and I found absolutely no typos or misspelled words in it. You've written about a very interesting subject. I've always wanted to go back and visit one of my childhood homes (when I was a child I think we must have moved every time the rent came due ). I have been unable to go, but however, a few years back, I did run into one of my former pastors from my childhood. When I was a child, I thought he was at least 10 feet tall. Guess what? He must have gotten shorter because I'm taller than him.
This is a most beautiful poem with such a strong message.
I found no typos or misspelled words in it and you held my interest from the first line to the last line.
It remineded me of a blind man who sang at our church once. He not only played the electric guitar, but also taught guitar and owned his own recording studio. He was such an inspiration.
His testamony brought tears to our eyes and strength to our spiritual hearts. He explained that he only saw beauty in his mind's eye. Through prayer and determination, he had become successful despite his blindness.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
Grandma Penny
Oh dear! This breaks my heart. Having lost my mother at an early age, I can understand the heartache. My heart goes out to the son who feels he let his mother down. However, being a mother myself, and having a son who for several years did his own thing without coming around or calling me, I'd like to assure you that mothers love their children with an unconditional love. Although, I felt bad about my son not coming around me, I still knew in my heart that he loved me.
The first thing I'd like to suggest is that you double space between paragraphs. When reading online it's hard on the eyes when reading single space. The break between paragraphs is most helpful.
The pastor goes on talking about life and deathbut<--You need a space between the words death and but. I'm sure this was just an oversight. It's easy to make a boo boo like this when trying to finish a project.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
I enjoyed this story. I can see why Jim reacted the way he did. I can also understand why he took the game so serious. Just like many times in our lives when things are unbearable it seems someone like Joe comes along and helps us get it together.
Good lesson in this piece.
I've listed a couple errors you need to correct.
Keep writing.
Grandma Penny
You were ‘aI'm not sure what this means. Is it an error? man on fire.
Maybe I can butts heads with some guys there and get to know them.
I give you a ! This is very commendable. Although I don't have cash to give, I would like to help you out by giving gps. I will also try to do some effective reviewing for this cause.
To make this more effective (to those who read this information), I've noted some errors that were probably overlooked due to the excitement of getting this out to our members and helping others.
You might also want to edit and add periods at the end of some sentences (you left off several periods).
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
that ist has just blown me away reading stories about the triumph of the human spirit.
I just can't spread myself so think
group<--Although group is more than one person, in this case the word group is singular actually goes to the people in need through a third party and takes down particular details of the type of items that the loan will be used for.
pay back the money they lend.Did you mean pay back the money they borrow?
I think I like the third ending best, but I also like the second ending.
When I read about Harold and his beaver teeth, it reminded me of my youngest son.
We moved from the big city of Charlotte in 1979 to a little place called Beaver Dam. One Sunday in church, my son asked me if the folks sitting behind us were beaver people. Thinking he meant Beaver Dam residents, I answered "yes". He replied, "I thought so. Look at them teeth!"
I found no typos or misspelled words in this little poem. It reads smoothly, however, I found myself looking for clues of the whereabouts of Lisa Lansing, yet I feel I may have lost my detective touch. The only thing I can come up with is that she was taken out to sea.
Gee! I think I need to go back and reread everything.
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for this one. Keep up the good work. 
). I have been unable to go, but however, a few years back, I did run into one of my former pastors from my childhood. When I was a child, I thought he was at least 10 feet tall. Guess what? He must have gotten shorter because I'm taller than him.