I found no typos or misspelled words in this fun-filled story. Wow! What a way to pay for your good deed. I thought maybe this was going to be one of those one good deed calls for another story.
This is absolutely beautiful. I think we all go through this at some point in our lives.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. I especially like and appreciate the last three lines.
I don't know if you have been upgraded or not, but I noticed your wish was to be upgraded. I don't have enough gps to upgrade you, but I'm sending you some gps to help. If you've already been upgraded, please feel free to use the gps as you like.
Welcome to WDC. I hope you're finding your way around the site and enjoying every minute of it as I do.
There are so many activities that relate to writing and reading. Of course, the reason we come here in the first place is to share what we write, and let others help us to improve.
Once we get here, we learn that reading has a lot to do with our writing. The more we review other members' items and offer suggestions for improvement, as well as praise their good work, the more we improve on our own.
One thing that helped me in the beginning was the contests. You'll find the listing in the upper left-hand column (above your My Email). If you like puzzles, we have some great word-search and crosswords puzzles. Just click on Item Jumps and check out all that's offered there. There several ways to earn gift points (to use for purchases, to buy upgrades, etc. and to give to other members when you review something and want to reward them. Two of the most interesting ways to earn these gps are Auto-Rewards (you can click on it at the top of the page) and by making public reviews. This also gets your name out there and you will find that your port is visited more often.
I've read your poem, Thank You Dad for Letting Me Go Wrong. I've listed below some errors you might want to correct to make the poem more effective.
and some shade of red i<--Oops! This should be capitalized. Probably just an oversight spray!
You might want to go back into edit and check for the same type error throughout your poem.
I also noticed that you tend to change tenses. This causes confusion and distracts from your otherwise good poem.
Actually, I like the poem as a whole. Being a mother and a grandmother, I realize the importance of letting the small child learn to be creative.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
Welcome to writing.com. You're already doing a great job. I really enjoyed the little poem Chosen Emeralds.
This is absolutely beautiful. I found no typos or misspelled words in this little poem. The words and verses flow smoothly making it easy to read. I like the rhythm.
Hi and welcome to writing.com. You seem to have gotten off with a good start. I noticed you already have a few items in your port. Feel your way around the site and check out some of the activities we have going on. We have search puzzles, surveys, polls, contests, and many charity groups. If I can be of service to you, just email me.
As far as the content, the way your poem is worded and the rhyming, I like your poem. You did a good job with all that. However, you do seem to have too many commas. This sort of distracts the reader a bit.
The only suggestion I have as far as improving this poem, is below.
I don't think you need a comma in any of you lines except for this one: This web is tricky, it makes me sad,I'm not sure if you need a comma here or a semi-colon.You might want to go to your search engine and type in commas and semi-colons and check out the rules for these. The commas at the end of each line might be needed. However, if the next line is part of a sentence from the previous line, I don't think it needs a comma.
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Your poem is beautiful. I found no typos or misspelled words in it. It looks like you did a good job of editing it before posting it.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. This is a hoot! You've used good sentence structure.
You held my interest from the beginning to the end. I've seen cats get themselves in some might horrifying situations but this just about takes the cake.
This was another fun puzzle. I tried to find words that thought were related to moderators before looking at the list. It took me a bit longer, but I was surprised at how many I found on my own.
This was an interesting puzzle. I didn't solve it as quickly as I thought I would. Some of the words were unfamiliar to me. Of course, I'm not really a chocolate lover.
I didn't realize there were so many words that are related to chocolate.
What a neat idea. This is a rather interesting list of sound words. I think I'll put it on my favorite for future reference. Sometimes I have a hard time choosing the correct word to describe a certain sound. This would be quite helpful. Actually, I think I'll try making a list of my own. Maybe if I concentrate on nothing but sound for a few minutes, it will help.
Amen! I've often wondered what good it was to mark the spot where someone died. I use to pass a place such as this on my way to and from work. I know the story behind it, and it's very sad. However, as I come near the cross on the side of the road with it's beautiful flowers planted around it, I become nervous. I feel distracted. It's a wonder to me this doesn't cause more accidents.
I understand that maybe this gives friends and neighbors a chance for closure. It probably also gives comfort to the family. Yet, cards, flowers, food and moral support at the home would probably help much more.
Oops! This is your write, not mine. I tend to get carried away sometimes.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. You've covered a good point.
I just had to give this a 5 rating. I found no typos or misspelled words. You've used good sentence structure and certainly held my interest from the first word to the last.
Oh, those memories. Aren't they precious? This brought back many memories of my children and grandchildren.
Keep up the good work, continue writing and sharing with us.
What a cute little story. It just boggles my mind what the imagination can come up with. I could picture in my mind the little snowflake as she drifted down from the sky to land on a flower petal.
I noticed in your item genre that you listed it nature and children. I'm sure a child would be mesmerized with this; adults also.
Wow! What a scarey dream.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. You held my interest from the beginning. I was on the edge of my seat by the time I got to the end of the story.
I do have a question. In the following sentnece, are you bearing down on the break, gas pedal, or do you mean as you get closer to the deer...Sorry, I may have just confused myself. But no, as I bear down on it, it looms up over the hood and shoots...
This is a very good story. You held my interest from the title to the last word.
I like a story with a happy ending.
You've used strong sentence structure.
4-9PM<--I honestly don't know if there's a rule about using PM or pm, but for some reason this doesn't look quite right. 4-9pm looks better. That's just my opinion. If there is a rule about this, and you know the rule, please pass it on to me for future refrence. I'm forever getting hungup on this when trying to use it.
So far, I've thoroughly visiting your port.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
I find this folder housing many good examples for the rest of us to follow. You've been very business like in all of them. Those that contained complaints were firm, yet not harsh.
Those that praised a person or company/product were very uplifting.
I really do believe you have made quite a difference in several situations.
You've said a mouth full here. I agree. I've had strangers IM me, asking for gps.
For the past couple years, I've earned my gps to pay for my upgrade by reviewing, entering contests, and going to auto awards page. Not only do you get need gps on the auto awards page, but there some mighty good reading on there.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
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story. Wow! What a way to pay for your good deed. I thought maybe this was going to be one of those one good deed calls for another story.
This is a very good story. You held my interest from the title to the last word.