I only found one error in this little Christmas poem. Yum Yum, all that food sounds good. I've never heard of Golden Syrup steamed pudding, but that even sounds good. There are certain foods that are better at Christmas time.
This is absolutely beautiful. Of course, I looked for typos and misspelled words, but found none. I don't know of a thing you could do to improve this, so it gets a 5 rating from me.
The last three verses are very uplifting. They offer such hope and promise.
This was interesting. However, since it's to be continued, the reader is left wanting to read more. I'd like to know if the marriage makes it.
I found quite a few errors you might want to correct to keep the next reader from being distracted.
Keep writing.
Grandma Penny
As her father released her arm, she would take her grooms,<--Oops! grooms is plural, meaning more than one. I'm sure you didn't mean that. To show possession (her groom), you need an apostrophe: groom's
that was, when he was home to eat.<--This sentence needs to be capitalized. I'm sure this was just an oversight.
she'd<--Oops! one word too many here--> would smile as old feelings of love swelled inside her chest
"We don't have one," seh said, scooping teh baby into her arms.
Wow! You've requested so much in just a few words. Yet your requests are not selfish. I think we all pretty much want the same things. Wouldn't the world be so much better off if you could get what you want for Christmas?
I found no typos or misspelled words in this.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
This poem holds some powerful words. It was a little harder to read than the other poems I've read in your port.
If there were some way you could line it up so that it will look more attractive on paper (or as it is here, on the screen), I think you might have more readers.
I have a suggestion, but to keep from putting the poem in the review for the other reviewers to see, I'd rather send you an email and see what you think of my suggestion.
This is very touching. It's always sad to lose someone we care for, but it seems harder to deal with when the person is so young and taken away suddenly.
It would be more attractive and easier to read if separated into verses. I checked this one and if you separate it into lines of 4, that will leave the last verse with only 2 lines. But, those two lines would be alright if they stand out from the rest of the poem.
What beautiful words of encouragement for your niece. I like the rhythm of this. It would be even easier to read if you would break it down into verses. I believe it would come out perfect in lines of four.
You certainly gave her some good sound advice without sounding preachy.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
Wow! What a wonderful incentive to get reviewers to review on. You've got some wonderful authors represented here. I've read visited many of their ports. We have quite a few dedicated reviewers on the site also. This just proves it.
If this could receive a rating of 10, you'd get it. But, we only rate as high as 5 (which by the way is as near perfect as you can get).
You've written it beautifully without any errors that I saw. You grabbed my attention with the title. You had my undivided attention all the way through the story.
Having had a good, Christian husband, I know the feeling when God brings something to your attention that makes you appreciate your mate.
I think the more I read, the better it gets. This is so beautifully written. I really envy anyone who can put their feelings in poetry form the way you do.
It seems we so often take for granted all the gifts God has blessed us with. Thanks for giving the reader a nudge with your inspirational writing.
I have really enjoyed my visit to your port.
Keep up the good work and don't ever quit writing and sharing.
Wow! This is beautiful. I found no typos or misspelled words. The words and verses flow together, making it easy to read and understand.
I think we all sometimes get our eyes on the tragedies of this world and tend to wonder where God is at the time. Of course, He's always right here with us, waiting to comfort us when we turn to Him.
I say this is a job well done, both in the writing part and the message. This is a message everyone should hear. I wish you could get those flag burners and murderers right in front of you and tell them what you think. (Of course, I'd like to be able to do the same, but I don't think I could top you.)
I found no typos or misspelled words in this.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
This is another beautiful poem. The title caught my eye first. You held my interest from the beginning to the ending line. I found no typos or misspelled words.
I love to look at the clouds and see what is hidden there. Imagination can conjure up animals, hearts, etc., but sometimes it takes what our faith sees when we look in the clouds; angels, comforting hand, and of course, comfort of knowing who made the clouds.
This is absolutely beautiful. I can see why it would get an award. I found no typos or misspelled words in it and the words and verses flow smoothly making it easy to read. The subject is certainly something that is easily understood. Beautiful poem with a touch of sadness.
You have a right to be proud of you. I'm proud of you too. I'm curious. Did you self-publish or did you submit it somewhere and they published it?
Have you thought about writing a story about how you came about getting your books published? Oops! That's pretty much what this poem was about. Oh well. I would like to hear lots of details. I think it might be encouraging to the rest of us.
Keep up the good work and continue writing. And, contratulations.
This was spooky. I've just moved into a new apartment, and still haven't gotten use to all the different nighttime noises. I'll bet I get up 20 times some nights to check things out because I can't stand hearing something and not knowing what it is.
Your words get the gun, dear reminded me of the time I suspected a young man in our neighborhood of prowling around our house after dark. My youngest (teenager at the time) son and I went to the corner store. We saw this guy and I thought I'd give him a scare. When I was sure he was within earshot, I mentioned to the clerk that someone had been prowling around the house and I had made up my mind the next time I heard them, I was going to shoot them. My son spoke up and said, "Mama, what you gonna shoot them with? You don't even own a gun." I could have croaked.
I enjoyed this story and found no errors.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
This piece is chocked full of humor. I'd rather read something like this than listen to my ex-husband talk about the same things you've mentioned here. He also runs for cover when a black helicopter flies over.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece.
Keep writing.
Grandma Penny
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