Good job with the prompt. You told about a dog next door, described his personality, and showed how Harvey affected your character. You held my interest from the first line to the end.
You proved that a cat lady can have room in her life for a dog.
Ahh, those what ifs What if I had found some errors in this piece? Would I have given you a 5? Probably not, but since I didn't find even one boo boo, I feel this deserves the highest rating.(Bet you thought I was going to rhyme. But, I'm just no good at poetry.}
I think my favorite part of this is the last two lines.
Then the other thing I really like about it is the fact that you brought a big smile to my face.
Since I found no grammatical errors in this story, and you managed to hold my interest from the beginning line to the last line, you used good sentence structure and seem to have done all the right things, this deserves a 5 rating. I can't think of anything you could do to improve it.
This was a very interesting story. I found no typos or misspelled words in it. The one thing I noticed that I (and probably all reviewers) really appreciate is that you double spaced between paragraphs.
The story itself was good, but I especially liked the ending. And, by the way, the ending didn't surprise me at all. After all, babies tend to make a difference.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this. I know how quickly you have to get your idea from a prompt and have your story ready in a limited time. You've done a great job.
I would like to make a suggestion. When writing something with any length, it's easier on the reader's eyes when double spaced between the paragraphs.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this poem.
It's been a long time since Grandma Penny has had a credit card. It didn't take long for me to realize the contents in this poem.
Your message is loud and clear. Now, if only the fine print in these accounts was just a clear. Then again, until we've been bitten once, fine print or giant print probably wouldn't keep us from giving it a try.
While reading and paying attention to the subject matter, I also checked for typos or misspelled words. This piece is written well with no errors, that I saw.
I always boggles my mind when someone give a low rating but raved about how great the story and the writing of it was.
Yet, for a long time, even if I found absolutely nothing wrong with it, I'd still give a 4.5 since they say there's always room for improvement. Then one day one of our most popular members called me on it. She said she didn't mind a 4.5 but if she didn't get a 5, there must have been something wrong. That got me thinking.
If I read a story or poem, understand the plot, find no errors, don't get bored or sidetracked while reading it, then it deserves a 5. Yet another person may not think the plot is so great, and they will give a lower rating. From now on, if everything looks as near perfect as possible to me, I'll give a 5. If I don't give a 5, I'll definitely give a reason.
You're right about the review itself being more important than the stars.
I checked closely for typos and misspelled words in this letter. I found none. That says a lot for the writer.
You brought out some vital points about writing and reviewing. I think most of us need to get busy helping out our fellow authors by checking to see if there is something they are doing wrong that we can help them with.
It's equally important that we continue writing. I've been slack in that area more so than my reviewing.
It's easier to read what someone else has already written than to get our minds and imaginations cranked up. But, they say, if we use our minds we won't be as apt to lose our memory.
Keep up the good work and let's band together and get'er done.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. The title grabbed my attention and kept it until I read the last line.
The whole time, I thought the main character was going to be accused of causing all those mishaps. Once again, I was wrong, but not disappointed in the ending.
I've never thought of life being like a ping pong ball. It does make sense, though. We get hard licks in life, but we just have to bounce back. As your poem depicts, sometimes we lose and sometimes we win. But, we still come out stronger because of it.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this piece. However, I feel that it would make a better short story than poem. I get the feeling that there are lots of interesting stories lying hidden in this little poem.
Keep up the good work and continue writing.
Grandma Penny
I read the prologue and chapter .5 through chapter 7. I realize there are different genres that we all favor. Fantasy is not always my favorite, but I'm trying to reach out to other genres with both reviewing and writing.
Sometimes what I may get confused with while reading, others may follow right along. In this particular write, I have been confused most of the time. I think it's because you have so many different characters and I haven't been able to link them all together.
I don't remember seeing but one typo while I was reading this.
I may come back later and finish reading the whole thing, and maybe I'll catch on eventually.
This is truly a heartbreaking letter. I don't know whether to point out your grammatical errors or dwell on the content.
Being a mother, I don't think anything could hurt me more than to lose one of my children. There is no way my life could be better if one of them were to die. I think this is the same way your mother would feel.
Sometimes, all we mothers need to make us feel better and be able to deal with the hardships of life is just to know that our children love and appreciate us.
I have also read your letter to your dad and the one to wdc.
If you need someone to talk to, feel free to email me. My prayers are going up on your behalf.
I found no misspelled words in this poem. It reads smoothly. It's easily understood. There's one thing I'd like to suggest to improve it. Your first two verses are present tense and the rest of the poem is past tense. It would be better to use past tense in the first two verses as well. Ex.:I heard him mumble as I walked by
Use the same tense all the way through and I think it will be as near perfect as it can be.
Now this sounds like the kind of Christmas we all dream of. No chaos. I could picture the children running down the stairs in the sleepwear to open their presents and to see what Santa left for them.
Gosh, I'm so disappointed. You had my interest from the beginning to the end. However, I didn't expect it to end the way it did.
I have a question about something listed below.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
All Sally received were a coat
and mittens. When I first read this, I was sure the correct word would be was instead of were, but when I thought of how to explain it, I became confused. You might want to check it out just in case my first thoughts were right.
You've written this beautifully and with meaning. It's easy sometimes to get carried away with the Commercial part of Christmas.
I found no typos or misspelled words in this poem. Of course, I don't know if I've ever found errors in your writing. It shows that you take great pride in your work.
I found not typos or misspelled words in this little poem. You caught my interest with the title and held it to the very last line.
I'll bet there's a lot of the Seasonal Depression out there. But, then a lot of folks who weren't depressed during the holiday, will find themselves with the credit card blues.
Although I know this is fiction, I could see it really happening. I think you met the challenge. This was cute. That would be just my kind of luck. I think I'd try hard boiled eggs next time. (See, it still sounds like I believe it, huh?)
I found no typos or misspelled words in this. You told a great little story in just a few words.
Keep up the good work.
Grandma Penny
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, but since I didn't find even one boo boo, I feel this deserves the highest rating.(Bet you thought I was going to rhyme. But, I'm just no good at poetry.}
