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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, kiyasama, and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by stacylynn71.

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Pleiades of the Faes  (13+)
A series of pleiades written to fae characters
#1189632 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen


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Overall Impression
Oh wow! Absolutely beautiful web page on which you put this series of poems. Each has her own image, font and decoration. It fits together well.

The poems flow nicely. I think my favourite is Eanswip.


Great page. Thanks for sharing!

Wyn - missing III
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Review of One Last Drive  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, kiyasama, and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by stacylynn71.

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One Last Drive  (13+)
Dear Bobby Clampert...went for a drive...and never came back
#1339308 by iKïyå§ama-House Targaryen


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Creepy poem. It reads like a scene out of a horror movie, and I can imagine this poem being part of a much larger story. I like how the first couplet was repeated in the end. It gave the poem a finality.

*Note*For the most part, the lines rhymed well, accept for snort/nut.

*Note*Feet glued to the floorboards, rusty with age
To me, this sounds like the feet were being described as rusty. It may sound better if the comma and the were removed.

Nice poem. Thanks for sharing!

Wyn - missing III
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hello, Revelry new writings soon !

I'm here to give your "Panic Switch Misery" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
I think this dream you had could be more aptly called a nightmare. The words conveyed a clear image of your surroundings and what took place. Perhaps this nightmare has no relavence in or life, or perhaps it was a wake-up call. Only you know which for sure.

Suggested Improvements
There are a lot of run-on sentences and missing punctuation.

Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Muse  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello, Mara ♣ McBain !

I'm here to give your "Muse" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Great story! It completely held my interest all the way through. The old plot of "artist searching for his muse" was used to create a story that was neither boring nor old. And the end was unexpected.

Character & Plot
The main characters were very descriptive and full. It was easy to care about who they were and what was happening. The setting was rich in imagery and I saw no plot holes.

Great story! Thanks for sharing!

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Review of SIR TOM THUMBE  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, Joy !

I'm here to give your "SIR TOM THUMBE"  a Simply Positive Review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Great way to bring the old story of Tom Thumb in to the modern day. The all-powerful Merlin is now a doctor, and it was science that brought about the child, rather than magic. Reading of the exploits (if it can be called that) of Sir Thomas was both amusing and captivating. The tale was so engaging that the end caused feelings of sadness.

Thanks for sharing!



--Wyn

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, RatDog !

I'm here to give your article, "You Are What You Drink" , a review on behalf of RAOK. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I thought this article was both funny and interesting! it combines both thoughtfulness and humour. You're probably correct in your assessment of wine and Jagermeister drinkers. Not sure about Bourbon drinkers though. Maybe more like moonshine.

Whatever the drink, one can never go wrong at poking fun at stereotypes and opening eyes to them. Thanks for sharing!


--Wyn

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Review of Sig Block  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, NickiD89 , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by NOVAcatmando .

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Sig Block  (E)
Write, write, wrimo!
#1442796 by NickiD89


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Awesome sig! The light blue and green compliment each other, and they both stand out on the black. Great way to identify yourself as a Nanowrimo participant.

Good luck with your endeavor and thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, NickiD89 , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by NOVAcatmando .

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The Call of a Whale  (E)
1st Place - Quotation Inspiration 6/09 Narrative shape poem written in iambic meter.
#1573307 by NickiD89


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Overall Impression
Awesome poem and form! I like how you used the words to create the image of a tail as it sinks under water.

The poem is romantic; the young man is destined to be with the sea and cannot ignore fate.

Lovely poem. Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn - missing III

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Review of Ties That Blind  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello, LdyPhoenix !

I'm here to give your "Ties That Blind" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
As someone who's experienced this, I think your poem capture the emotions very well.

I like how your poem is separated into three distinct parts.

Flow & Style
It flowed well from what should be, to the reality, to the feelings itself.

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Review of Waves  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello, Sophy !

I'm here to give your "Waves" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
The crushing wave is a nice metaphor for heartache and grief. Whereas the waves are physical, grief weighs down the spirit. Both can kill a person as well.

Flow & Style
The poem moved from one line to the next smoothly, with no breaks. The style and shape of the poem is both pleasing.

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Review of Disease Spreads.  
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Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Hello, StaiNed-House Targaryen , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by Daizy May .

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 Disease Spreads.  (ASR)
The feelings of an evil disease spreading through a body. Old Poem!
#1162229 by StaiNed-House Targaryen


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Clever! Giving a deadly disease the personification of the ultimate of evils. The imagery is dark, but then that was the point of the poem. *Wink* It's also menacing. Great!


Suggested Improvements
*Note*In the last line of the first stanza, I think into should be in to.
*Note*In the third stanza, I think in the very form takes away from the line.
*Note*You need a space before violating and "Soon".
*Note*The punctuation seems off. Periods end fragments and commas are everywhere.

Thanks for sharing!

Wyn - missing III
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Review of Scream!  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hello, StaiNed-House Targaryen , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by Daizy May .

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Scream!   (18+)
We are burned, scolded - whistling mutated melodies.
#1603470 by StaiNed-House Targaryen


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Creepy. That's the first thought that comes to mind. Anguish is next. I'm reading it a couple different ways. The interpretation that comes to the forefront is based on my understanding of Calvinistic teachings and the total depravity of mankind. We're already the walking dead, looking for the one who will save us.

Interpretation probably incorrect. *Smile*

Suggested Improvements
In the fourth stanza, should the first you be capitalised?

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello, StaiNed-House Targaryen !

I'm here to give your "I Was So Embarrassed..." , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
It's great to be able to look back at an embarassing moment and laugh. This little tale is told with your unique sense of candor and humour.

Suggested Improvements
The last sentence of the first paragraph is a bit awkward. How about rearrange the words or use commas?
First sentence of the second paragraph, the second use of window is repetitive.
Third paragraph, second sentence, you need a space after the comma.
Last sentence, nevered should be never, and remove the period after happened.

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Review of Blue  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, mARi☠StressedAtWork , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by stacylynn71 and Kristi .

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Blue  (13+)
Blue is my favorite color. Poetry is what I like to write the most. Blue = Poetry!
#1390346 by mARi☠StressedAtWork


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Very nice folder! It's colourful, organised in sections with their own descriptions. No having to look through pages of poems (or folders too) to see what's there; everything is presented upfront. And the blue angel kitty is just soooo cute too! *Bigsmile*

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, Mike~Dolphins Fan 4 Life , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by Kristi and stacylynn71.

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If Only I Were Whole  (ASR)
A piece dealing with being outside the reach of love.
#1347784 by Mike~Dolphins Fan 4 Life


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I think you were able to put in to words the feelings of many people. Lonelyness is consuming and we become numb to the pain, either becoming used to empy feeling or having it tear us apart. It's been two years since you put this into your port, and I hope it still does not reflect your state of mind.

Thanks for sharing!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, Danielle , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by An Anonymous Fan.

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Standing On The Outside  (E)
A piece inspired by the relationship between best friends.
#1610207 by Danielle


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Beautiful poem about your relationship with your friend. I like the repeating lines. It gives the poem a lyrical quality.

A couple of the couplets don't seem to rhyme.

Suggested Improvements
In the last line, your should be you're. Your is a possessive and you're is the contraction.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Danielle , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by An Anonymous Fan.

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Lead Me Into The Light  (E)
A prayer for recovery after the loss of a loved one.
#1610223 by Danielle


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Beautiful prayer and poem. The loss of a loved one can often result in the feelings expressed in the first stanza. Sometimes without the strength to get past them, one can stay in darkness.

The poem flowed smoothly with unforced sounding rhymes.

Thanks for sharing!

Wyn - missing III
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Review of Freedom Song  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, Danielle , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by An Anonymous Member.

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 Freedom Song  (E)
A short poem about a horse, written for a contest entry.
#1610768 by Danielle


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
Beautiful poem. I think the desire for freedom is something we share with all animals. To run wild, feel uncaged/unpenned.

Suggested Improvements
I don't think you need to mark your blank spaces. In the second stanza, I'm confused as to whether you're wanting to use the singular or plural possessive.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, Maryann !

I'm here to give your article, "My Trip to Australia" , a Helping Hearts review! This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Very nice article! It certainly looks like you had an enjoyable time in Australia. The added pictures enhance the article.

Suggested Improvements
It's in walking distance to many great areas. It's right across from Hyde Park , and it's just a walk from there to the Botanical Gardens .
I think these two sentences can be condensed and tightened. How about Right across from Hyde Park, it's in walking distance to many great areas and just a walk from there to the Botanical Gardens. If nothing else though, there's a space before the comma and the period in your original.
There's a couple more places throughout that have those extra spaces.
In the Darling Harbor section, because is spelled wrong.
I think the article can use a bit more tightening up and less repetitive word usage.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Just an Ordinary Boo! , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  by "Ink Blot Hall of Fame" .

Along with your nomination, you are also receiving the Emily Dickinson Fan Package. The package includes a total of 9 reviews from our FAN - ATIC gifters. I'm thrilled you were chosen for this honour!

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Waiting by the seashore  (E)
Separation occurs often. Should we wait or should we move on? Free verse
#1312138 by Just an Ordinary Boo!


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
I like how you use the sand and tide to tell the story of separation. Very nice imagery. People come and go, just like the waves. Thought provoking questions at the end.

Nice poem. Thanks for sharing!

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Review of Harmony  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, 🌕 HuntersMoon , and congratulations on your recent nomination to "Ink Blot Hall of Fame"  as part of your "Invalid Item"  win.

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Harmony  (E)
Invisibly, the rhythms of nature guide our day. (Form: Rhyme using Anaphora)
#1572655 by 🌕 HuntersMoon


This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impression
The poem had great images, made more prominent by the anaphora. It all rounds out nicely in the third stanza.

Flow & Style
Gentle, even flow. Each line was well paced and measured.

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Review of The Beast  
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hello, Write-fully Loti !

I'm here to give your "The Beast" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
Good job of setting the scene and telling a story with dialogue only. I liked the twist at the end.

Suggested Improvements
Some of the dialogue sounded a bit wooden though, like more contractions are needed.

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Review of Ariadne  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, Legerdemain !

I'm here to give your "Ariadne" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
I liked this poem a lot. It gives words to the fear of getting into a relationship. Is it the right thing to do? Will the same thing happen as before? Or will it meet a tragic end.

Flow & Style
The poem flowed well, smooth of measure.

Suggested Improvements
Some of the commas may not be necessary.

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Review of Mental Circus  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, ~WhoMe???~ !

I'm here to give your "Mental Circus" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
I thought this was an interesting poem, like watching chaos come together.

Flow & Style
The punctuation seemed inconsistant, and I think it took away from the effect of the poem.

Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello, SHERRI GIBSON !

I'm here to give your "A SPECIAL KIND OF LOVE" , a Simply Positive review. This is only my opinion, so please keep what you find useful, and disregard what you don't.

Overall Impressions
I thought this was a beautiful poem, with heartfelt and intense emotions.

Suggested Improvements
Second stanza, third line, I think you need it before whispers.
Third stanza, last line, the tense grew makes the line sound off.

Nice poem. Thanks for sharing!

--Wyn

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