the best friend messing it up for the family. all for her introvert friend. yeah, i'd do the same. a very nice ane short story. straight to the point. pretty good.
i like how you ended this. great wrap around. the only thing im a little mixed on, is how you explain in the narration on how dad was always late. and then proceed to do it again in dialog. it was like a double wammie for me. Not sure if its being explained correctly. but other than that it was a nice short detailed story.
a love going sour. That seems to be the thing now these days. bittersweet memories and sour endings. all you can do is remember the good and understand that that was all to be taken from this scene. liked your poem. keep writing.
This story goes straight to the point. sad and truthful. Sad that it had to get to the point where, daddy, was no longer a joy. I truly hope that peace was found among this pain. overall, good.
hmm... okay, so i am assuming this is about your dark soul being lost in the darkness. hoping to be saved or find the sun within yourself? if so, not bad. good way of writing it. I am not afraid of the dark but what is in it. good writing. liked it. keep going.
good short story. I've been there before but found myself. what i can tell you this, the void may seem deep. but there is an ending if the host seeks it. remember, you have control over your life a lot more then what you think, or give credit. it's hard and scary but doable. keep writing.
Very interesting story. I like it. Nothing really to say, other than I wish it would say what happened, how it ended. but that is the beauty of horror. The imagination can go in so many ways. Keep on writing.
that was entertaining and funny. The fact that it is in the child's imagination! it was cool and it had me hooked. Especially the part about the Christmas competition. Bravo to you! Keep on writing.
This story has great potential in becoming more. Gave me this whole invasion of the body snatchers. I would be okay if I had a black dot by my name. I like it a lot. I would recommend to re-read it, as it has a few grammar issues. Keep on writing :)
Good start. If I may, maybe add a little bit more about what they might be doing the next day? worried about something? The night, while everyone sleeps, is a good time for the mind to go bonkers. This is also the time were the mind refuses to sleep because there is so much to contemplate.
what a scary thought. being so high up in the sky and the parachute wont open. I like how it goes to the point, short and sweet. Not too much but enough to peek my interest. Nothing much to say about it.
Interesting story. I like how it insinuated that it might be zombies or aliens. Then it turns out to be something different. Short and sweet. I like it. I do recommend to reread it, as it does have a few grammar issues. Other then that, its good for short story. keep on writing.
Nice way of starting a stereotypical story. Caught my attention. Now I wish to know how they cheated death. Keep writing as I would like to know how it ends.
Interesting way of starting a story. So far it caught my attention. Just wish it continued to see what happened in the end. This kind of left me hanging, like the edge of a mountain. :) Keep on writing. Sounds really promising.
Not bad of a story. Really short and straight to the point. I like that. I would recommend to re-read it as there are some grammar issues. But that is all right since that is why we are here. To help each other out. I would probably expand the other two suspects since you only explained the third. why were the other 2 considered suspects. Keep on writing. :)
So far so good. I like how it runs smooth and straight to the point. I'm not really into fantasy but this one had my attention. Rajiin is a witch and I like witch stories.
I liked it. You told a story from top to bottom. Expressed how it shattered but how she / he will come back up. not allowing this to take them down. Well said.
some of us can be monsters. But I have hope for some that are willing to change. I liked it. A little creepy with the thought that a person can be capable of such terrible things. good writing.
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