wow, someone truly admires this man. must be one of the good ones. i like how this is described. hope the feeling last for a long time. keep on swimming.
THIS IS REALLY SAD AND DEEP. SOMEONE WHO WANTS TO STAY AFTER MESSING UP AND WANTING TO FIX SOMETHING THAT IS BROKEN. HOPE THERE IS A WAY THAT THERE IS HOPE TO SAVE IT. BEST OF LUCK AND KEEP ON SWIMMING.
Pretty good start. YOu got me hooked. but then you left me hanging.. what is up with that. I want more and that is a good thing. you got my attention. keep on swimming.
This vennette, says alot about a marriage that went down and then the aftermath of what is left. very sad and yet something to remember, things will get better, just needs to take time. Time is key. I hope you find peace. keep on swimming.
i understood the dialog. The story, however, not so much. but i guess that is not your fault since you are not allowed to explain. so... what you can do, was great. I like it. short and sweet. keep on swimming.
these words rhyme, when they really should not. it is sad when this happens. when someone uses their power over those they feel, they can enchant. why try to hurt someone that truly has love for one. it makes love look like the enemy when in reality love is used as a tool to do terrible things. i hope one day you have a way to open the cage and fly away.
nice introduction. bringing up a situation that is about to get heavy. maybe a mystery about twins that fell apart. and now Leslie thinks she has encountered her sister but in reality, it is not. or if it is then something happened that has brought gracie into a state of clone. a mystery of some sort? I am not sure. i do like it. keep on swimming.
The secret must be there for a reason. I dont believe the mind holds onto it unless there is a purpose. maybe a lesson that is to be taught. could be the reason why it comes and goes like people and time. other then that i like your story. but i cannot help but feel as though it is not completed. but that is just me. keep on swimming.
hello, to answer your question. yes, apps are taking over. it's a good thing and bad thing. makes it easy and hard. both pros and cons. easy read. keep on swimming.
The pain is strong within your words of saddness and possible maddness. I am sorry that you are going through this and hope that one day you find peace. as for your poem, i like how you express your everyday struggle and hope that one day you will be fine. i feel it. keep on swimming.
I've done this before. the frustration of wanting to write and nothing pops in your head even though the day before you were full of thoughts. then you regret that you did not do anything about it even though you knew better. because this is has happened before and you never learn. and thus, are back at a blank sheet of paper and the world wanting your attention. the moral of this story, stop and write when the thought process begins. even if you gotta put the notes in a note pad in your phone. this brought back memories. good story. keep on swimming
so sad how how love can become into nothingness and all is left are the memories. and even those bring bittersweet emotions that no longer are welcomed. I am sorry you went this but i do hope one day you find peace in your heart. love is beautiful but can be tampered in the wrong hands. I hope you find true love one day. very lovely writen. keep on swimming.
This is cute. straight to the point, however, it shows how you feel about being with this person. how you cherish those sweet minutes, even if it is thirty minutes. it says that you would take those few minutes, even if that is all you got for the day. now , that is sweet. wish someone felt like that for me. keep on swimming.
Very nice story about a sign from above. How the clouds told you how the cancer was there one moment and then gone the next. from one purple to another. the metaphor was a nice touch to the story. i liked how it was writen. keep on swimming.
Hello. I have read all three chapters of your book. I see that the first chapter goes through the details of the characters you will be speaking of. then I go to the next chapter and I am introduced to the first character in chapter 2 and its like re-reading the first chapter. (at least when speaking of the first character.) To me, it felt as if i was reading this same thing that did not really offer anything knew. its all very uncanny to me. The only thing i do like is how they do interwine together, having the characters begin to interact. that, I did like. Interesting writing. Keep on swimming.
as long as they are good ghost, i don't mind. they seem to be alright, as long as they mind their own business, we will live perfectly fine. good read. happy writing.
sounds like an everyday struggle of being pensive, rather than depressed. because there is a hidden message that screams they are depressed but refuses to see it that way. they will continue to live life the fullest, even if there are days that they would rather just sleep. i understand the feeling. never give up until the end of time.
Sounds to me that she is having a bad day. but that she is trying to be positive. good analogy. nice but rather depressing. Sounds like my life everyday. lol. keep on swimming.
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