i really liked this poem. I know how this feels cause it had happened to me. This hit home because I, to, did not allow him to break me. it took some time to get away from him but in the end I am strong. I appreciate this poem. Keep on writing.
i am assuming that this piece is about the presentation of the main character. and how she died? wether its physical or mentally. i guess that is whole point?? interesting overall. keep on writing.
I like how this got me. it intrigued me and I wanted more. to know this sentinal. However, it left me hanging as to what changed. There was nothing that let me know what it was that was different. because of this I wonder what the purpose of this prologue. is. to just introduce the character? and if so, then why provide info that was left ananswered. other then that, keep on writing.
this was good. sad. but good. i can feel the sadness. how this person wishes that their dad can remember them, even though they are face to face. keep writing
i'm not really good with poems but this, to me sums it up as it saying that if death does not happen, it can be alot worse. and death comes for all. which is true. I like it
Sounds like my brain. Except I always feel as though i am wasting time. I dont even know why. i like this. short and sweet. straight to the point. hope you can find some rest in some way. keep writing.
This is an interesting short story between mother and child? it was short and sweet. I do advise to re-read the story. there are some misspelled words. keep on swimming.
well, that went rather dark... I do hope you are okay. Please have your writing be an outlet out of your stressful times. I know that it does for me. But if you ever need further help, never hesitate to reach out. best wishes.
I like how you are introducing us to the main characters with each of their own point of view. I wonder if this will be the flow of the book, as you continue. the only thing i might critique, because it is his point of view, his name is not necessary needed every time you start a new sentence. It kind of kills the mood. other than that I wish you the best in continuing to write the story. I look forward to the next chapter.
I like how you write the story and how you were able to put the details in the story. It got very interesting. I like how it was going until the end. I feel as though it went super fast. I am unsure if it was because this was in a contest and you had to hurry up. but it just went too fast. The other thing, this is just my opinion, since the main focus was on eleanor, i wanted to see how he was going to threaten her. since she gives the feeling that she is not an easy pushover. other then that, very interesting, smooth and the fact that eleanor was delving into the wife's past, was interesting. i would have wanted more.
straight to the point.they enjoyed the day until he realized the error. but maybe then he can do it all over again and spend even more time with the girls. interesting but dont understand if this is just a thought or a part of a story that will soon be exposed. nicely writen thought. i can feel the anxiety of forgetthing the most important thing. keep on swimming.
its not your fault? it's up to everyone to research what they want to believe in . if that makes sense. not sure how to feel about this poem. appreciate that you wrote it. and i get your ideas but i dont know if i truly understand how it was writen. either way, keep on swimming.
love at the wrong time. can be rather difficult to wait but will it be worth the wait. I am it is. hope the collision is soon and at the right time. for now,keep on swimming. good writing.
this brought a tear upon my eye. it reminds me that one day i will need to let my pet go. and i dont want to. they are so loyal and love you eternally. i am sorry that you are going through this but you are a might strong person. i hope to be the same one day. keep on swimming.
I believe we experiance what we allow. we do not have control over certain things but we do control how we react to them. i know its easier said than done but if we try, we may find that the results can vary. other than that, I feel as though this article was writen through an amount of experiance in which its overflowed with emotion and doubt. i liked it. it's rather bleak for real. Keep on swimming.
this is an interesting poem. it speaks of this place of heaven and hell. the only thing is, i don't see "death" in this. I did read it a few times and did not seem to read anything that consist of this entity. maybe i am wrong since i am not the best with poems. i did like it. it was just lacking that factor that you placed in the bio. keep on swimming.
I'm not into poems. but this one caught my attention. it makes me wonder about a situation that could have been something. but the silence killed it and my stubborness ended the rest. I wonder what would have happened if things were different. i guess it doesn't matter. i guess i am not the only one that does this. really good. keep on swimming.
i like how you explain the witch, as i get a nice picture of her. but then it just stops. there is no reason for the main character to see the witch. it just says that it was no accident. but why? I see that this is the first chapter. am i assuming that they way it was left, it a cliff hanger? keep on swimming.
nice poem. i really dont understand them, the writing, but i understood the emotion. which is the important part. and this brought out the one thing that we all in need in our hearts...love. (if it exist) keep on swimming.
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