This poem doesn't miss a single detail. A well-told rhyme about a well-told story. It's too bad there are so many lost souls in this world. I meet so many mostly on Face Book, but also right here on WDC as well. It's poets like yourself who keep the truth circulating.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
What a clever way to educate your readers about a world renown character such as Calamity Jane! Most people would not know the true facts surrounding this woman, and many would not bother reading her biography, but in poetry form it's different; it's entertaining; it comes alive.
All-in-all I found this poem a joy to read.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
For a minute there I had thought the plane would fly off, taking Jimmy and Sally to safety. I wasn't disappointed, though, with the ending. I thought it was highly innovative the way you incorporated the words airplane, mouse, and sneeze into the story.
Brilliant!! Absolutely brilliant! There is no way I would have ever second-guessed the ending! What a fantastic story; clever and imaginative. A real delight to read. I kept wondering where the serial killer was going to enter the picture. Of course I had thought it would be the mannequin in the top hat.
I especially liked the following line; listening to his bursting heart, until at last, it beat no longer.
I will be thinking about this story for days.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
What a story! It rings as though it were a true experience.
I didn't find any errors except for one; in the following sentence, the word 'scared' is missing a 'd': Things were totally out of my hands, I was scare, and all I wanted was to just run away
I truly enjoyed reading this piece. It held my attention from the get-go, all the while I kept asking myself if it were a true story or not. I sure hope not.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
Very clever. I would have never guessed this was a dream. I found this piece well-written and delightful. Your characters are believable and out-of-the-ordinary.
I loved the ending!
I espeicially liked the description in the following line:
Drys' hair was black then, like the raven's feathers
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
What a lovely rendition of nature! I can see the moon hung up in the bright branches of the trees; I can hear the crunch of the leaves underfoot; and the song of the owl in the distance.
As though I had been on the walk right along with you, I return to my computer once again to let you know how much I enjoyed the journey.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
This is a fantastic poem on many levels. First of all, the title is not only catchy, but fitting as well.
Each and every line makes an important, heart-felt statement, significant not only to the poem, itself, but to the topic as a whole.
Also, the design of the poem fits not only the subject matter, but also the explanation:
I went to an old graveyard today and walked around, counting stones, there was 600 (up)LOL
(Incidentally, the word 'was' in the explanation should be changed to 'were'! LOL!)
This article is informative and well-written with intelligence, insight, and what appears to be firsthand knowledge. Unfortunately, I have never watched the program, "How'd They Do That", and since I wasn't sure how credible the story truly is, I searched it out in Google, where I discovered that it's not only true, but I also found a video where I could actually watch the program as it an initially aired on TV.
Your rendition of the program is well-told and believable.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can enjoy your work!
It was heart-warming to know there was a smile at the end of this little story for the weeping birthday child. Since she had grabbed her special teddy bear, I'm guessing this was a very young child. All the more reason to be glad this story had a happy ending.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
This is a very enlightening, useful, and intelligent article. I just had to copy and paste it and send it to myself for future reference. I would not change a word, an idea, or a single thing. Every part of this piece is essential from the reason why we should concern ourselves with economy when writing, to advice on words to use, words to cut, not to cut, etc.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can benefit from your knowledge.
I love this story! I love the characters, I love the way the reader is filled in on what Erik is thinking. It draws one into the story right from the start.
Only one comment; I felt cheated in the end. We never do discover what Erik's big brother was doing in the tree house with his friends.
At any rate, please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
You sure summed it all up! From the crunchy friable leaves full of opal colors, to the snippy, snappy, chill in the air! There's no mistaking your fitting description of October as experienced in the Northeastern states of America.
I wouldn't change anything, but if I were to offer a suggestion, I would change the common, ordinary colors of orange and yellow to something not so mundane. Maybe amber and gold. It's just a suggestion.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
This poem paints a clear picture of a lovely, dreamy image. My favorite lines are: She sits among the jasmine, tempting me to speak,
While her fiery mane dances, provocatively sweet.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself can continue to enjoy your work!
I like the idea of comparing a pair of eyes to jewels in a treasure box and a neck as an ivy tower that holds a head like a stem on a flower. Very creative and poetic.
As for the literary part of this poem, the last word in the sixth line should be changed to 'amaze', and the word 'them' that begins the penultimate line, should be changed to 'these'.
It may not be true, but this poem makes you sound like a genuine 'eye guy' to me!
I like the idea of breaking a story into parts the way you were instructed to do with this assignment. It's amazing to me the way a story and its variety of characters can be unraveled from a simple narrative, which was the first part of this exercise.
Your writing is intelligent and entertaining. It'll be interesting to see your full-fledged story spring to life from this simple exercise.
Please keep writing so I, and others like myself, can continue to enjoy your work!
A delight to read, this poem depicts all the stages of love; the morning, noon, and night of it; the many seasons of it with an ending that brings everything expertly together.
You have a way of depicting your characters and the situation surrounding them with clarity and credibility that allows the reader to accept them and to believe in them.
The sense of hurt and betrayal is strong in this poem. The reader is able to identify with the gist of this poem, for who hasn't experienced a relationship that included disappointment, punishment, revenge, insults and suffering.
Each line flows smoothly and easily which makes the poem a joy to read.
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