Perfect message to your little one. I was captured by this piece to say the least. The content was bold, clear, and held a high sigificant value to any parent wishing their child to be strong and make it through the tough times. Thank you very much for sharing this!
Fav Part:
"Go forth, my son, and conquer
the fear and doubt you own.
Inside you dwells a spirit
more alive than blood and bone."
Astounding write about how people out of blame and shame in emotion can really knock someone to the ground and forever damage them. Very empowering message for the future generation to know that being rude and ugly only kills innocence. Innocence that is just as meaningful to one as it is to the other. I really enjoyed reading this. Something everyone should think about. Great job!!
Fav Part:
"one invitation to play, one neglected impulse to strike or belittle,
could have changed history, saved lives, saved her baby.
SWPoet
May we treat violence, at any age, seriously and not stand perplexed after the fact, wondering why we didn't see it coming."
Very creative piece about Halloween and the feelings associated with it. My friend, you are an acrostic master! You have them down to a science and I really commend you on this strong point in your writing. I enjoyed this alot. Thank you for allowing me to do my five reviews on you! I am happy I read!
Fav Part:
"Hello to all the ghouls and ghosts
And things that go bump in the night.
Leave me alone this Hallow's Eve
Lest I faint from sheer fear or fright."
Perfect musing of a rainlover such as me. I was able to really sink into this piece because I love rain and the calm that it brings in it's rhythm. You nailed the flow down and it was sychronized like a symphony of instruments. I absolutely adored this nature inspired treat. Thank you for sharing this!
Fav Part:
"Instant puddles that flow to the drains.
Noiseless little drops of sweet morning rain
Greet my waking eyes pleasantly,
Refreshing the air, the grass and the trees,
And nature smiles back gratefully.
I no longer feel getting up is a strain,
Now I have the company of The Morning Rain."
Great forum for people to get the recognition they deserve as writers on WDC. This was really a creative way of getting others noticed through your port. You are very generous and sweet to do this! This reflects what a helpful and commited writer and friend you are! Keep it up!
A great Aussie tribute for PWW. I enjoyed the descriptions of the "bloke" that just has this shack to rest and remember the past in. Powerful words, highly animated making this an easy read. I enjoyed this humble piece very much! Thank you very much for sharing!
Fav Part:
"Now and then a lonesome swaggie, shirt all torn and trousers baggie,
Will stumble 'cross this once proud old homestead.
And the home will do its best, to give shelter and some rest,
For a weary bloke to stop and lay his head"
Tearjerking write Meg.. I was amazed at the depth of emotion you put behind your words. The message was so sweet and so real, it made me feel like crying with you. You are a master poet, that is for sure. You never cease to uplift me with your warmth. Thank you for sharing this.
Fav Part:
"As you watch me now from up above,
And a tear rolls from my eye,
Forgive me, love, for you told me then,
"It's okay, my dear, to cry"."
I loved this sweet and hopeful poem. I enjoyed the simplicity of it and the mere message of faith in love it displays. I saw a few grammar errors, but I don't judge on that basis, as they are minor. You have a really nice write here! Thank you for sharing it!
Fav Part:
"Im still on my own,
but there on my bed.
Was my founded prince,
with arms widely spread."
I enjoyed your tribute to one of my favorite sports, that I can actually do. All I can do, as a matter of fact, are weird sports others cannot...lol. I will srr that as a good quirk in agility. I love how deeply you wrote about bwling...It was really intensified...yet ..try bwling and singing....a rush that can't be denied!
Fav Part:
"Bowling has its "safe crackers" -
Players who get the combination,
Of strikes and spares, while other slackers
Like to show off with curve and elation..."
What a wonderful tribute to your car. I really like this prompt it is unique and original. I enjoyed your write it was filled with your love and joy for your vehicle. I was also fond of your vivid description of all the accessories and interior. Thank you for sharing this with me and all of WDC.
Fav Part: "Last December, at first she fought against the indignity of wearing antlers and a big red nose. Once she got used to people grinning when we drove by, I swear the antlers stood up higher and higher each day. She didn’t even complain when a little boy came over in the Safeway parking lot to pat her nose. "
Good poem about love and your heart's desire..I know you wanted me to review your latest piece, so here I am! This was extremely strong and emotional, the words were like butter melting a heart away. What a lucky perosn you have written this for!
Fav Part:
"So now that the dreaded minute is past . . .
The elation soon come flooding back.
And now our journey's will take flight.
Only will we have to pause . . .
For just one minute of dwelling confusion. "
What a heart filled masterpiece. I enjoyed the emotion you were able to instill in the readers mind. This was accomplished by your choice of vocabulary and the even flow of the write. I really liked your unwillingness to give up. Thank you for sharing this with me and all of us here at WDC.
Fav Part: "We shared both castles and cabins,
we saw rain and sky,
black bears huddled in fake rock cages,
and fake leopards hugging rocky thighs.
We smiled at one
and quietly laughed at the other.
Together."
Short, creative, and highly charged with romance. I enjoyed this! The impact was laking for words but did not need to use anymore here. Flow, Grammar...all very good. Thanks for sharing!
Beautiful write about a girl you reallydidnt know cause she was not that way when you met her, but then, agically she bounces back , and is stable, happy, and secure, and now a brand new gorl to you, you hold her in your arms! Very sentimental, very good grammar and a very good flow to the poem. Great job!
Fav Part:
"I saw her tonight across the room
the metamorphosis complete
I wrapped her in my arms
I felt the deep change
I whispered in her ear
you got it?
yes, she replied
I held her more closely"
Beautiful and heart felt poem. I loved the pin turned to strength and inspiration!
You display your heart on your sleeve here with this work, and it saddens me quite a bit. I am deeply sypathetic to this piece, yet extremely proud of yopu seeing it.
Thanks so much fopr sharing your lemons made into lemonade! Great work!
Fav Part:
"But tonight . . .
This Fragile child of eternity is no longer lost,
Never again will she be obsessed . . .
For this curse of time has shown her truth."
What an insightful write into your life. I found this work to be a little depressing. The message was clear but I am not sure if it was wanted or not? The flow made for an enjoyable read I can only say this reminds me of the discovery of population control.
Fav Part: "When the past
Of the troubled soul
Will not leave him be,
One way,
There is one way,
To rid himself of pain worldwide."
This was an excellent romantic write. I enjoyed your passion and emotion you shared with the reader. I found your flow to be smooth and consistent making this an easy read. Thank you for sharing it with me and all of us here on WDC.
Fav Part: "I had a festival of metaphors
and a rainbow of similes.
Poems blossomed in my garden.
Short stories came to life
with characters you'd want to meet."
What a wonderful heart filled write. The reader can feel the emotion and passion you have for your little one who is struggling to survive. I wish you and your little one all of the best and I am sure all will soon be better for the both of you.
Fav Part: "Weeks have passed and she is still with us,
Feisty, screaming, and throwing a fuss.
Her mother's knees are now raw from prayer,
Refused solace or comfort of chair."
I enjoyed this humorous and true writing on a new subject to me. I do believe this is the first fortune cookie write I have come across and it is wonderful. I enjoyed your description of the taste and how the message might be better if the taste was.lol Thank you for sharing this with me it made me smile.
Fav Part: "I don’t put much stock in Chinese fortune cookie predictions. Perhaps if the cookies were delicious their foretellings would carry more weight."
I enjoyed this write. How strange the timing of this work must have been to you. It is remarkable the way things work out like that. I am sure your mother would be very proud of you today especially posting this wonderful piece here on WDC for all to enjoy.
Fav Part: " Penned in dark halls; drafty.
the last warmth of it's embrace.
the last breath of common man.
when final fires; danced final flames."
What a nice poem. I found the flow to be consistent and smooth making for an enjoyable read. The alternating rhythmic pattern worked will in this piece. I like all of the quartets but found the one below to have the most impact for me. Thank you for sharing this write with all of us here on WDC.
Fav Part: "My logic is mystified pondering magnitude without limit,
A finite creature struggling to grasp the eternal dance,
Certainly my thoughts run tirelessly to the phantom summit,
Only to begin below, anew, at the foundation of my ignorance."
What a wonderful tribute to a very special person in your life. The reader can feel the passion and love you have for your lost loved one. I am sorry to hear of your loss, but I am happy you have immortalized her here on WDC. Thank you for sharing this wonderful write with all of us here at WDC.
Fav Part: "I love and miss you very much, Granny."
I enjoyed this short poetic write you have created here. I found the message was sent in a strong fashion to the reader. The sad ending is heart felt and shows the reader you have truly felt this way before. Thank you for sharing this with me.
Fav Part: "As the sun sets, a small sparkling star shines a quick burst of hope
and slowly disappears among the night-lights of the city."
A fine tribute to another one of my favorite subjects Art. I enjoyed the artist you choose I do believe this is the first write on here that I have read on Monet. I found your write to express a vivid picture of the artists works which formed a portrait in the readers mind.
Fav Part: "A fine tribute to another one of my favorite subjects Art. I enjoyed the artist you choose I do believe this is the first write on here that I have read on Monet. I found your write to express a vivid picture of the artists works which formed a portrait in the readers mind."
A nice treasure with alot of emotion and heartache attached. I see that you left your wife in death, is this a letter to her when you leave the world? Anyhow, highly tender, creative and overall a tribute that is wonderful to your true love.
Fav Part:
"My Love I have never loved one like this before. From the first day we met I knew you would be special. I found out that I LOVE YOU! From the bottom of my heart, we met on short notice but have grown for a long-term thing. To turn from you now would be like pulling my heart from my chest. "
Keep it up!
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