Please accept this review from me as a reader and not as a critic.
It is a poem of moving a step forward, from being single to find someone to love.
The mood is positive with traces of sadness of being alone... the line "I am tired of being lonely"... says.
What I would like to understand is that, at the end of the poem the poet wants to be friends with someone he/she desires to meet, but through the words preceeding, there is a want of THAT SOMEONE SPECIAL...
I may be wrong with this perception but the title says " its about being ready to love and being loved".
Although, i do agree that there is love in friendship as well.
Overall, the rhyme abcb is good to read. The poem is peppy and dancing
Please accept this review from me as a reader and not a critic.
The poem strongly shows the urge , the poet has to start writing again. There is a frank known-ness of the vacuum of words that the poet feels.
He has this strong want and desire to show the world that even though its has been some time off writing, he can still send a wave of creativity.
That his talent is not lost, gives the reader an underlying encouragement.
This poem serves as a great booster to any writer who has been off for a while.
I liked the confidence and the desire to want to write more...
There is a positive tone and the mood is thumping and has a kind of aggression a warior has before taking on a fight. There is a lot of energy in this poem.
Please accept this humble review from me as a reader and not as a critic.
The Form of the poem is exceptionally good. Though it is unrhyming, the meter of the poem sounds great.
You have captured the APRIL atmosphere intricately with great ease. Minute details of the surroundings add to the punch of the poem.
Yes, it feels like the reader is right there at the moment, standing in the lawn and watching the tree with the bird nest... I can still smell the early Spring frangrance in this poem.
Please accept this review from me as a reader and not as a critic.
The Poet captures a moment in life when things are not going the desired way, when he is in a fix and needs someone to share the feelings with. THIS SOMEONE can be a friend or some LOVED ONE. The dependency is shown briefly here so that during the trying times, the poet can rely on THIS SOMEONE and make his dreams come true with the help and support. A very common instance of life is explained here but it is so true... One never realises that such instances can become a great prompt for writing.. And I am glad that the poet has captured such small minute incidences of life and painted this canvas with his writings.
The last four lines rhyme well.... When read over and over again they sound musical.
Please accept this humble review from me as a reader and not as a critic.
Absolultely fantastic work of words. I loved the starting words " Oh Inspiration". This shows the real relationship between a writer and his world of words.
Inspiration , here, feels as if it is a small toddler and trying to play hide and seek with the author. And it creates this wonderful connection with the master of the words to run after it and find it so that he can create a beautiful work of writing.
The rhyme is soft and subtle.. It feels good to read. The meter and tempo have got this naughty style playful enough to enagage the reader right through the end.. and the reader wants more to read....
I also loved the Line " My words would again have a home".. How beautifully you have shown the feeling of belongingness...
Wonderful. Just amazing,,,
Keep the relation with words and inspiration forever...
Keep Writing !!!
I offer you my humble review, please accept this review from me as a reader and not as a critic.
The Title is justified by the words expressed in the poem. The flow of thoughts throughout the poem keeps the energy intact.
The poet loves someone and finds it difficult to take away his eyes from her. All the musical and magical things are experienced by the poet when his loved one is around him or within his viewing vicinity. I loved the depth.
What left me pondering are the lines " I wonder where you've been, Wonder if it was a chance"...
The rhyming is maintained for the first and the last stanza. It would be good to keep the rhyming scheme for the second stanza too.
The meter and the rhythm too can be kept for all the stanzas. However, it is the author's wish to do so.
Even with the original context and construction, the poem is a soft welcome to a reader..
Awww...This is so sweet.... After reading this I can relate to it very easily.
There is Love and only Love in this monologue... with flashes of humour and satire...
Through this writing the author has once again added a strong nod to the fact that love does not prevail in the candy bar shops and night outs with the beau, but it is a feeling, or I would call it rather a Process of evolution over a time.
Each small thing done for the loved one will cent percent dedication and utmost purity of heart, shows that LOVE...
A blend of pain and loneliness because of one sided love is coloured beautifully here.
The lyrics are totally drenched in the aching heart's blood. The writer feels extremely helpless because he has no control to change the situation of his love life.
I liked the line : Without you I am nothing, But I am always without you... See how much the words fail to express the depth of a fruitless relationship... This is a wonderful line.. and the Darkness of the pain it shows is remarkable.
A lucid poem about what sisters mean to each other whether they have blood relation or not.
The strength of a woman as a sister is shown here.
This is a good attemot but my only suggestion to you is that even though this is written in a poem format, it needs to be structured well with a rhythmic flow. To add a rhyme is all your choice.
It looks as if a prose if broken into clauses to make a poem.
Please take these suggestions from me as a reader and not a critic. It is totally upon the author to take the helpful ones and discard the rest if not agreeable.
I am really happy to read your work and it feels great to see it as perfect as you always write.
The characters that are sketched here display enormous strength, right from Mandy, Matilda and Mandy's mom. All three females display the inner strength that comes out clear in the trying times.
It is difficult to imagine how Mandy and her mother lived their lives to survive bread and butter daily but when it comes to gathering courage, these two ladies show no traits of running away from the reality. Infact I liked the way they are always ready to face a new challenge.
A great piece of work for all women to read. It will give all of them some vitamins to be stronger by body mind and soul.
There is a taste of helpless lover who is shattered by the loss of a loved one.
The pain comes out naturally through this poem.
The poet has used some great imagery here which I liked. Having read the poem twice, I could barely take off my eyes from it.
The flow makes the reader engrossed and want for more.
It is a good read for this day !
I would love a more elaborate poem ; though this is only a suggestion from me as a reader and not a critic.
How beautiful is this poem from the days gone long ago.
Yes I remember this one and it brings back sweet memories of my childhood. We used to say this poem as a prayer in school.
I like the complete dedication and devotion the poet shows as he surrenders himself to God. He hopes that God will take care of him and will surely guide him to peace and sanctity.
The flow is good and the rhyme and rhythm are well balanced.
A nice self-learning experience for a photographer is explained here when he learns the art of living in harmony from a sparrow couple.
The male sparrow is shown sharp and strong while his female partner is shown to be more subtle and domesticated, looking after the cup shaped home (nest). I liked the imaagery used here " cup shaped"
A good read for this day..
A great read after a long time...
Absolutely mindblowing read for this day. This poem really means a lot to me as well. I have learned now NOT TO LOOK BACK, since I had a fatal accident last monday where I broke my brain bones and I was so sad how cotuld this happen? I mean I have a partial memoru loss as i dont know how I fell down and all that but Now I really thank god after reading this poem that certain memory is welcomed with a loss.
I really appreciate your writings and would love to read more from you. Your poem has chnaged my way of looking at life.
everything that happens, happens for the best....
With this article, you have really solved my one of the major reviewing problems. Let me be frank, I also sometimes come across certain items which demand thrashing reviews but my heart always says to give a better and an encouraging review. Even I am not perfect and I cannot expect my fellow writers to be perfect always. Its real. One must accept it.
The points that you have raised here and demarcations given as to how to rate each article pointwise is really helful. Now i will find it more easy to read and review.
An extremely emotional read which leaves the reader misty eyed.
The poet flashes the thoughts that run into a child's mind.. The child is only six yet shows great courage in demanding a peaceful death for her mother. The strength with which the child converses with God is remarkable.
It takes great courage even for the grown ups to accept death as the final stage of life. But here a child takes a bold step and is brave to face this part in her life.
Havent read a script before, but after reading this I can see how actually the movies are given inputs...
The plots, characters, scene transitions are all very well balanced.
Sarah and Tom are characterised appropriately, Sarah a tom boyish girl who turns into a beautiful teenager by seventeen, yet she cannot hide her tomboyish traits.
The romance progresses very well but as an emotional reader it is disturbing to see that the "just love admitted" couple are facing gunshots and blasts at their school.
A beautiful poem that decribes and compares the life we all live today with the ISLAND.
We always keep ourselves protected or try to protect ourselves from the storms of life such as pain, despair and all such things that brings us no joy.
We are always feeling empty when we look at the vast sea of material world outside our body mind and soul complex.
We shift our thinking wavelengths very often thus creating a chaos of analysis in our minds, because we cannot settle for a hundred minus one. We want full. We want the best, but in achieving this, we forget that we as ISLANDS are having our own beauty to cherish.
In the end, when its time for us to say good bye to the world, we are just like a coke bottle at the dust end of the island which is filled up with nothing less than the dirt caused due to isolations, greed and selfishness. ..
Great Poem to learn from ... The comparision is awesome here... I loved to read it and re-read it....
Just a wonderful piece of work I am glad to have found here!!!
Keep the pen going !!!
We are all made up of five elements of this universe and one fine day we are going to get disoolved into them. We live our life on daily basis, each moment, and in the present. But there is a "Dogged Hammer" - i.e. TIME that is ticking and subtracting the balance of moments.
The poet brings this out very nicely through a great imagery.
I must admit that it was not an easy read at the first time. I had to read and re-read it for atleast three times to come to a conclusion of the between the lines crux. It is not always good to read something that is not written, but topics like these always attract me to disect the article.
A good read for this day !!!
Apologies in advance if my words appear offensive.
Amidst in the world made by professionalism, business and shrewd people, the poet thinks of a world made by the Great Power. This world has its own beauty, a calm serene atmosphere and a place where every restless finds peace. Mother Nature is forgotten to be admired by people of today's world, who are happy chasing the deadlines and are governed by material desires born out of competition and racing time.
In this beautiful poem, the poet brings out the point that poeple may have become rich by acquiring wealth, but they are really poor and bankrupt when they are not able to sit peacefully for a couple of minutes and think of the richness of Nature.
I loved the metaphor = Green Gold... Very candid.
Great read for this day !!!
I always love to read more from you...
A sweet peppy romance develops throughout the scene which has a very happy ending.
The characters are described well with their traits, and it is good to read that none of them leaves a mark of re-work.
I liked the way the author uses vivid imagery in brining life to the words describing the some of the five senses.
This is definitely an Excite when you write material.
The intimate moments are described nicely, but it could be more intense ... just as a suggestion...
Sometimes speaking a blunt truth is fatal than keeping mum.
In the series of events that the poet describes, unknowingly she hurts people, inspite of having nothing ill in her heart.
This contrast is shown very nicely here. The poet is well aware of this and it is good know that she wants to find a permanent solution to this problem.
It is a funny read as well.
Good piece of read for this day !!
As for the spellings and grammar I have no suggestions. The rhyme and rhythm are gracefully maintained throughout the poem.
Hey Megan
I cam across this fantasy poem and I must say it was so good to read it. re-read it. Felt as if my mother was reciting it for me. Childhood came back running with open arms to embrace me once again..
I liked the way you have highlighted words in different colour, this makes an impact that the princess is in dungeon and dark.
The theme that love can win over any situation is direct and soothing.
The poem really marks its impression on the reader's mind and heart. In saving the Butterfly from the web the poet almost destroys the spider's web which must have been made with great effort and feelings attached. The poet succeeds in freeing the butterfly and feels proud to have rendered such a noble service, but when he sees the spider on the ground, the poet's heart fills up with guilt of spoiling his (spider's) life.
The poet has truly portrayed the present state of culture and fear in our lives. To come out of a situation freely and scar-less, we tend to destroy the harmony of life, knowingly or unknowingly.
Great read for this day !!!
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