The Snowflake Chronicles

Suggested corrections for Poem rewrites

I need to make corrections and/or check if I made the corrections in the following poems.

"Embraced By Light"  - "Typos are the pits, but this one needs an edit: " I voice and the light changed,..."" Come Fly with Me--Kiter
"My Muse In Spring"  - "In the second line of the first verse, i think it shoud be "meadows" not "meadow"."
         "In the first line of the second verse i'm not sure if you meant to say "wonders" and if you did i suggest that you change it to "wanders"." mousiebrowniecho
"The Reason for Myths"  - This poem made me smile. I like your reflection and it does indeed inspire us to stop and think about...What? You forgot a comma in the second line between knowledge and faith. This is something I could have come up with, when in my rare philosophical moments; it speaks to my intellect, and that's rare in poetry. It's also nice to happen upon every now and then. Thanks alfred booth, wanbli ska
"Summer Solstice"  - Just one thing ~ 'Effect' is a noun and 'affect' is the verb --These lines should be: the landscape of human evolution, affecting and being affected by humanity. Summer becomes autumn which becomes Or, if you don't want to use the same word twice: the landscape of human evolution, affecting and having effect on humanity. Summer becomes autumn which becomes dmack
"The First Christmas Gifts"  - I liked the rhythm and flow of this poem. It uses the different gifts nicely, as individual elements in the poem. I did notice that the punctuation was a bit inconsistent, especially in the first stanza - the rest of the poem is punctuated nicely, and in a way that helps the flow. As I understand it, a cinquain is a single verse; more verses become a crown cinquain or something else. I could be wrong about that; I'm no expert on poetry forms. Well done. Robert Waltz
"The Cottonwood Tree"  - You have some beautiful lines and imagery is wonderful. However, the line breaks seem stiff and a little forced. If you could smooth it out so that the lines flow seamlessly instead of a stand alone lines. Don't need the "its" in the start of the second line. tirzahlaughs