Two-in-One Poetry Contest

I enjoyed the sentiments expressed, the word pictures they created are right on

these are my favorite lines:
Every time he looked at me, my breath caught , I sighed.
With every smile of his, my joy I couldn't ever hide.

good use of rhymes

my one issue with he poem is the format. It feels like the lines are too long which leaves me with an awkward feel to the flow of the poem for some reason. Maybe breaking the sentences at the commas, making each stanza four lines, not two would help that ?

thanks for sharing - good job!