Two-in-One Poetry Contest

As I read the poem I felt that it lacked a rhythmic flow to it

The lines seemed too long for example and disorganized.


Instead of this That my life would forever change from then on, I did never realize.

Something like this That my life would change forever,I did not realize


With every smile of his, my joy I couldn't ever hide.

With every smile of his, my joy I could not hide

Every time he looked at me, my breath caught , I sighed.
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Every time he looked at me, I caught my breath and sighed.

. I couldn't but decide if i was caught in a whirlwind or a maze.

I could not decide if I was in a whirlwind or a maze

These are suggestions are only my opinion meant to help you to write better!






You can use them or not.

For the positive things you have great word imagery and romantic emotional projection!



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