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 Hoisting the Torch with No Phobias Open in new Window. [E]
Taking the enlightened stance that fear in sports can be considered a phobia...
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Tim *Smile*

I found this by using the Random Read and Review button.

First, I always admire your lofty tone and style; whether rhymed or free verse, you convey your themes well and with class. I would like to point out that courage is not the absence of fear, but rather the overcoming of it, the ability to take action despite being scared. I noticed you didn't use the word "courage" at all in this piece; was that perhaps a challenge of sorts? It comes across quite well except for the point of fear vs no fear.

A phobia, psychologically speaking, is a highly specific and internalized dread of something, that causes one to build one's life around avoidance of whatever it is that one is so deathly afraid of. Therefore, it is perhaps a "pop psychology" exaggeration to say that someone has a phobia of sports. That may rather be considered laziness *Laugh* What you could bring in is the concept of fear of failure, the team pressure, the anxiety of causing one's teammates to fail and being known as the loser. Shame plays a bigger role here than fear, perhaps, unless one really is afraid of injuries on the field, which is a serious consideration as well.

Overall, this was a good, thought-provoking poem with a theme that strikes to the truth within each person and challenges us to overcome whatever's holding us back.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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