SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the entry.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhyming pattern is good, and so is the imagery. You certainly did a magnificent job on letting readers know about Archie and Fred. Both were prejudice and extremely opinionated.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions for improvement. I think the poem is terrific.
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MY OPINION: I think this is a fantastic Christmas poem. The rhythm and imagery are right on, and the poem written well. I liked the way you relay what the true meaning of Christmas is about, yet also express how the holiday has become a merchant's dream. How right you are!
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" . Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize your work in any way.
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical or other errors were noticed, and the only suggestion I have to offer is to keep writing these wonderful poems.
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MY OPINION: The rhythm and imagery are outstanding. I agree that you are fools if you separate or trade love for anything. From beginning to end, the entry is great.
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No errors were spotted, and the only suggestion this humble reader offers is that I think the poem would read better if all of the lines rhymed.
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MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is good overall, and the emotions expressed in a way that touched me. It's heartbreaking when you love someone who doesn't return the sentiment, which is relayed in the poem perfectly. The poem is well written and from the heart.
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: No errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions for improving the item.
OVERALL IMPRESSION: The tribute is well written and inspiring. Monty will be missed. He has been my mentor and friend for many years. The line Do not despair following the end of each stanza brought tears to my eyes. The rhythm and imagery are superb, and the poem lovely.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO GROUP FOUNDER
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were noticed, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the poem.
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OVERALL OPINION: The rhyming pattern is perfect, the imagery just as good, and the emotions expressed superbly. The poem is a beautiful tribute to Jesus and a reminder of what Easter is really about.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO GROUP LEADER
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No spelling or other errors were noticed, and the only suggestions I have to offer is that I would follow a pattern, and that the sixth line reads off to me. Just a humble opinion though.
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MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is good, and the emotions expressed well. You did a great job of summing u what family means. The poem is beautiful!
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were noticed, and I cannot think of anything that would improve the letter.
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OVERALL OPINION: Having lost my mother to cancer, it was easy relating to the letter. I agree with everything written. Losing my precious mother to cancer filled my heart with bitterness, pain, and a sense of loss words cannot express, for she was not just my mother, but my best friend as well. The letter is written perfectly. My empathy goes out to everyone who has lost a loved one to cancer.
ERRORS: The rhyming pattern is off in some of the lines. For example, "Tree" and "sleep", and "rays" and "play" do not rhyme.
SUGGESTIONS: None other than those mentioned above.
MY FAVORITES: The imagery is exceptional, and the rhythm good overall. You have painted a poetic masterpiece of the tree in my opinion. I could picture it easily when reading the entry. The title is perfectly suited for the poem. I liked the entire poem, but stanzas three through five are my personal favorites. Beautiful poem!
ERRORS: No grammatical or other mistakes were spotted.
SUGGESTIONS: None I feel would improve the entry.
MY THOUGHTS: Although sad until the last stanza, the rhythm and imagery are good. Despair is written about in a way that can be pictured easily. The mystery of the song of the midnight bird is an additional plus, for it adds to the emotional impact of the item in my opinion. Very well written!
ERRORS: The rhyming pattern is off in stanzas three and five, but the poem is very good.
SUGGESTIONS: Only the one mentioned above.
MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm is good overall, and the emotions relayed from the heart. Tears literally came to my eyes when reading the entry, for even after your loss, you managed to show faith that he will be taken care of until you join him. God bless you for sharing a part of your heart with us.
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions I can think of to improve the entry. It is wonderful!
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WHAT I LIKED: The rhythm and imagery are outstanding. From Mother earth to the glass windows of the church, the poem is exceptionally well written and inspiring. You managed to say a lot in several short stanzas. Keep writing these wonderful poems!
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were noticed, and there are no suggestions for improvement except that the heading says the entry is of ghostly genre, and I did not see that as I read the item with the exception of a line about cold shadows. Still, I felt the poem was more about nature.
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MY THOUGHTS: The rhythm and imagery are dynamite. The poem is well written from the first stanza to the last. I thoroughly enjoyed reading the entry.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
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ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No spelling, grammatical, or other mistakes were spotted. The rhyming pattern differs in some of the stanzas. For example, "dream" and "be" in the first; "desires" and "fire" in the fourth; and the entire last stanza. "sir" should be capitalized. Other than that, there are no suggestions for improving the entry.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: I liked the way dreams are referred to as gold in the entry. I wholeheartedly agree. Without dreams, life would be stagnant. I also liked the last stanza about father and son. The poem is terrific.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
Hello Riss Ryker . Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" . Keep in mind that suggestions made are meant to help, not to criticize your work in any way.
ERRORS/SUGGESTIONS: No errors were spotted, and there are no suggestions I can think of for improving the entry.
WHAT I LIKED: The poem is well written, and the rhythm and imagery terrific. Athelwine, the goblin, and other characters are defined well, and so are the settings. You sweep a reader into a world of fantasy in a poem I feel would make a great book.
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were spotted, and there are no suggestions for improving the entry.
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OVERALL OPINION: The rhythm is good, but it is the emotions I liked best. You did a great job of letting the child know the ups and downs he might face as he grows, but that he should be proud and accept these things as experiences. The poem is well written, and from the heart. It was an enjoyment to read.
ERRORS & SUGGESTIONS: The rhyming pattern is off in a couple of areas. For example, "mommy" and "believe", "them" and "children" and "tenderly" and "honestly" do not rhyme, however, I could not think of alternate words that could replace them without taking away from the entry.
CHARACTERS: The girl and her mother are defined in an uplifting and realistic way.
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OVERALL OPINION: The entry is beautiful. The conversation between mother and child is not only realistic, but inspiring as well. The mother answers the inquiries made by her child in an uplifting way. The poem is well written and beautiful. Keep writing these lovely poems!
SIMPLY POSITIVE, TRADITIONAL POETRY, & JUST BECAUSE I WANT TO GROUP LEADER
ERRORS: No grammatical or other mistakes were spotted.
SUGGESTIONS: There are none I can think of to offer for improvement.
FAVORITES: The rhythm is good, and so is the imagery used in describing the characters and settings in the dream. The tress, Peach, Plum, etc. bring the fantasy to life. The poem was a pleasure to read.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETYRY GROUP LEADER
Thank you for you entry in "Invalid Item" Please remember that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize.
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No mistakes were noticed, and there are no suggestions for improving the entry.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhythm and imagery are outstanding, and the emotions expressed in a way that lets readers know how you feel about war and its effects. The image that comes before the entry is an added plus, as is the authors note following it. So many forget about the sacrifices made serving our Country and the lives lost in war. The poem is a reminder of these things.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" Please keep in mind that suggestions made are me4ant to help, not to criticize.
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No grammatical, spelling or other errors were noticed, and the only suggestion I have to offer is to keep writing these poems.
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MY THOUGHTS: The poem is great from beginning to end. Your love for nature and Sierra is relayed in every stanza. I liked that. I had no personal favorites. The entry is terrific!
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
Hello Dave. Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to be helpful, not critical.
ERRORS: Not one mistake was spotted.
SUGGESTIONS: None I feel would improve the entry.
MY THOUGHTS: The form is used perfectly, and the poem well written. What reader would not like finding this sort of romance on the Carolina beaches? The entry touched me from beginning to end. I especially liked the sentence about me becoming we. It is simply breathtaking!
SUGGESTIONS: There are none I can think of that would improve the entry.
MY THOUGHTS: Let me begin by saying that this poem is well written and inspiring. Every stanza is uplifting, which made for an enjoyable read. Keep holding onto that Angel!
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" Please keep in mind that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize your work in any way.
ERRORS: No mistakes were spotted.
SUGGESTIONS: None I feel would improve the entry.
MY THOUGHTS: The emotions are expressed superbly, and the title suits the entry perfectly. Your views on reality are great. Sometimes people hide behind a mask of pretense, however, I have not come across many. Most of the time it is easy seeing past pretense, yet sometimes it is hard. You say it best when saying do not look to the past; find today.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" Please remember that suggestions made are meant to help, not to be critical by any means.
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: "eye" and "hide" do not rhyme. Other than that, there are no suggestions I feel would improve the entry.
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WHAT I THOUGHT: My heart went out to you when reading the poem. Addiction is both terrifying and destructive, which is relayed well in the entry. The poem is well written, yet terribly sad, for you seem to have lost faith in God and yourself. I hope you do not give up, and that your world brightens.
SIMPLY POSITIVE AND TRADITIONAL POETRY GROUP LEADER
Thank you for your entry in "Invalid Item" . Please remember that any suggestions made are intended to help, not to criticize.
ERRORS AND SUGGESTIONS: No errors were noticed, and there are no suggestions for improvement.
CHARACTERS AND PLOT: The characters in the entry are well defined.
WHAT I THOUGHT: The rhythm is terrific, and the settings defined just as well as the characters. The poem is uplifting and a well written fantasy. I think the poem is great for children and those young at heart.
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