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Review of Fergus the Frog  
Review by Adherennium
Rated: E | (4.5)
What a delightful poem. A lovely expression of friendship and learning, and I do feel that a child would enjoy reading this. One small quibble, the lines 'Gertie the giant goldfish bubbled, "what are you trying to do?"
And Gary Galah's screeched 'Boo Boo Boo" ' are a bit too long and break up the flow spomewhat. Could I suggest either 'Gertie Goldfish...' or 'Gertie the goldfish...', then lose the 'And' on the next line, so:

Gertie goldfish bubbled, "what are you trying to do?"
Gary Galah's screeched "Boo Boo Boo"

Other than that, a real pleasure to read.
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Review of Breaking News  
Review by Adherennium
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Cleverly and succinctly expressed. Strong use of repeated rhyme, but not straying from your message to achieve this. Observe discretion, to avoid censorship obsession, though I don't feel you need this lesson. A powerful opening shot, now let's see what else you got.
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