The title of your story caught my attention because of the name "Nicolas O Lapoint". the more I read, the more I found out that your story is similar to the gossips when I was working in retail store. The name changes but, activity remains the same. In our store it was security that had extra activity. I liked your story and the followings are what I thought about it.
1) It is a well written story.
2) a very funny story.
3) The length was good for fast reading.
4) You have a gift for writing comedy.
I do hope to see more of your works soon. Please keep writing.
Zheila, a member of writing.com