|Hi! I found your chapter on the Review Request page, and I thought I'd take a peak at it for you, especially considering I've got my own chapter up there at the moment. :)
Before I dive right in, a rather nitpicky point: can you put a space between your paragraphs? The way it's currently formatted makes it difficult to read, and I think you might be losing reviewers for it.
A line that catches the eye right off: "...one doesn’t turn one’s nose up at any edible miracles the Author might Write one’s way." Let's break that fourth wall! Fantastic!! And I love how you used it to make the Author the god in this universe, and not just a gimmick.
Still, I feel like I've been here before: the tough warrior girl who doesn't want to be treated like a female; the magicked companion to a prince who's never been on his own before; a quest. This doesn't feel, oh, fresh. Don't get me wrong, I like your characters, especially the backstory to Prince Robert and Tobias (and the way you introduced them--priceless!).
At the same time, I feel like you should really play up the points that make your story unique from others like it. Making the prince clumsy: terrific! Tobias as the recipient of the soothsayer's blessing: brilliant! (Though that doesn't explain how he can talk, really...)
But... Hmm... Maybe my issue lies most with Jasmine. She's clearly your MC, and yet, I can't see anything but, well, perfection in her. She has excellent hearing and sight, can take care of herself in the woods, and has a prince and his dog requesting her assistance. Oh, wait, maybe she's not perfect. I found her a little repellent, actually, with how feminist she was: the prince wasn't insulting her ("’Quality,’ is it? What do you think I am?...") and she takes it much too personally. Maybe there's a reason for this, but as we're introduced to her in this chapter, she's completely out of line--particularly because she's talking to a *prince*! And the prince just rolls over and takes this? I'm sorry, but this didn't feel believable at all. And then Robert falls for her right away? Instead of being insulted? What a weakling! (And that has nothing to do with his clumsiness.) I'd be upset with the pairing, except I'm not sure Jasmine deserves better.
I think this story has potential, but it needs some revamping. Honestly, I'd love to read more, if only to read more of Tobias's snark; by far--in my opinion--he's the strongest character. :)
I really, truly hope I helped. I think you've got a great start, it just needs some polishing. Good luck with sending this off to publishers and agents! :)