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Review by Ashok Banerjee
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
That was a Wednesday morning, four hours or so. The incident already occurred on the previous day. Suspense began. Who was the culprit? This was the million-dollar question. Suspects were a few. The fingers of betrayal towards Steve, Bill, Shannon or any other? It's too early to predict anything.
Suspense continues.
Write on!


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Review of Untitled (Love)  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
The poet draws several images of Mother Nature. They are correlated with each other and build a complete chain of images that mesmerise us. It looks very simple but attractive. That art of simplicity adds special attractions.
It's an excellent artwork.
Keep writing.


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Policymakers have been making policies since the beginning of civilization begins. The process is continuing today, too. It will also be continuing in the future.
If those policies are harmless and good for humanity, we must appreciate them. However, some of the policies create complications. That hamper our progress. Those are drawn here.


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "9 - Doubts
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Tamaril told the story of his past life to Jorcan and Ayala. Though, the names were changed. They didn't believe that story. Despite that, Jorcan wised to listen to the entire story. Though, it was untrue but he wanted to extract the lessons inside the story. That decision proved that he was a real wise person.


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
That chapter told us about the origin of Tamaril. Where did he come from? We saw earlier that he was writing a book of war and was in a cave where Jorcan and Ayala were there.
Tamaril was a prince. But, due to the unhealthy rivalry, we saw all over the chapter, he was in that position. Politics was there when civilisation began. If it was too dirty, a revolt took place. Characters like Tamaril suffered.


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "7 - White Woods
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Jorcan and Ayala entered into white woods. Ayala was physically weak but Jorcan took care of her thoroughly. Her intimacy with him always becomes deeper. That was truly a positive sign.
On the other hand, Tamaril tried hard to meet her but he was again unsuccessful.
What will happen next?


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "6 - The Guardian
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Tamaril was in the who tried to attack the Jorcan and Ayala from the shadow. They got nervous. But, a good sense of Tamaril prevailed. So he controlled himself to do the damage.
Ayala became senseless in that incident. Jordan was a bit anxious but remained strong. Then, he decided to take care of her properly. So Ayala got a guardian as Jorcan.
In the end, a little misunderstanding happened between them. Jordan left the but a long time ago. Would he return? This is the main question. We have to wait to know the answer for the next chapter.


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Review of This is a test.  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
It is just a test. How to connect your mind, heart and soul- this is that test, as Charles Bukowski shows us the way. Especially, a creative writer must make a proper connection between these three. Otherwise, that creation will not be able to touch the hearts of readers.
The writer enlightened this important fact. We shall remain grateful to the author.
The topic is very important. But, reader readability is average. There are a few pockets where pace hampers. Please rectify that.
Overall, the performance is satisfactory.
Keep writing.


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "5 - Dark Journey
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It was indeed a dark journey that began. Ayala and Jorcan, both suffered a lot due to insufficient food. They found some caves for living.
If toppers live together, the relationship becomes easier and simpler. We saw their relationship became easier. One day, Shakaree talked about his past life. He loved a girl named Isha. She looked like Ayala. Unfortunately, she was murdered by the Falamar.
At the end of the chapter, a living shadow came towards them. Would they survive? We don't know the answer. We have to wait for the next chapter for further happenings.
Write on!


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Review of Snake skin  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Yes, I must admit your effort. That poem tells us about the man. The eyes of a person can disclose the untold identity at first sight. It's true. My experiences also tell the same. That identity is stamped in our hearts permanently. You express those well.
Suggestions
You need to work hard with the genres. Here, experience is the key factor. Psychology is also playing an important role. You should include those two genres.
Why do we use genres?
To specify the theme of our theme of writing.
It is not your philosophy but your opinion. Why do you change it to the 'Opinion' genre?
Again, you write well.
Continue your performance.


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Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
After returning to the hotel, Sweetie arranged for Cherish to clean their feet. Not only her, but Apple Bloom, Scootaloo and other friends of her also there to enjoy the foot massage from Cherish. It was truly a different experience. The Taste was different. But he liked most the taste of Apple Bloom's feet.


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Luckily, Ayala and Jorcan are both rescued but injured sufficiently. The Shakaree appointed Ayala as his slave. Ayala observed that the Shakaree didn't try to take any undue advantage as the superior. They struggled a lot for survival. In the end, Jorcan disclosed his identity to Ayala.
What will happen next?


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Review of The Flawed Gods  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It is a thoughtful writing effort. There was a God-like superperson who tried hard to destroy dishonesty. But, every time he demolished an anti-social activity, another team took that place and those were going on uninterruptedly. He felt pity. Human conscience went to sleep. So a dessert of humanity can be seen everywhere.
Though, these are unstoppable. But, the fight between good and evil forces will be going on in future, too. This is one of the consolations.
It's an excellent piece of writing.
Write on!


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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "3 - Departure
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
War can give us a lot of brutality and uncertainties. Even ladies and children don't spare. Ayala observed those. Her teacher, Jara wouldn't spare. All the children were murdered by the Shakaree, too. Jara requested Ayala before her death to leave the place. There was no safety at all.
Ayala decided to return to the cave. On the other hand, Shakaree also did the same. After returning to the cave, several Lightnings crashed with heavy sound. On that Lightning, she discovered Shakaree in the cave. Immediately, the cave collapsed.
Would they remain alive?
The answer is unknown to us.
We have to wait for the next chapter.


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Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
First, I want to pray for the departed soul of the author. It's a very important article that tells us how Lighthouses began. The ships were in severe trouble, especially in the night. Everything was dark. So, accidents happen frequently. For the security purposes, Lighthouse began. It was built in 250 B.C., in Alexandria, Egypt, on the island of Pharos, named "Pharos Light".
The Lighthouse maintenance is tough. Once, one takes charge of it, his job continues until death.
Superb writing style. But, we will not be able to see her new creation anymore. We are indeed unfortunate.


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Review of Masks and Myopia  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
It's a poem about a riot and people too willing to join it. When the ruler becomes too arrogant, the public revolt to bring a new and brighter era. The experiences tell us that people unite when situations demand to unmask the stronger but brutal ruler.
The poet exposes that fact once again.
A nice style of writing.
Keep writing.

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Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: E | (5.0)
It's truly an exciting book mainly for Young Adult readers. Something was happening, that was not natural, in the land of Elsano. The King told everybody to take some precautions.
The central character of the story Riko resided there. His mother died in childhood.
One day, Riko met a boy. Riko understood that he might be an elf. But, there was no proof. But, on that Riko and that elf disappeared.
It's an exciting beginning.
What would happen next?

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Review by Ashok Banerjee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It's a perfect story poem. Though, it is a bit lengthy but very interesting.
Summary of the poetry
There was a girl named Lily. She was afraid of a big, wide world and grew up within her castle walls. Once, she went to the woods ignoring the advice of elders.
Suddenly, God made her and advised her to be his devotee. As he only can be the source of endless peace. Lily followed the advice.
The selection of genres were lovely.
Other comment
It's truly a lovely poetry.
A bright future is waiting for you.
Keep writing.

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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "2 - Dark Clouds
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
We see incident after incident in this chapter. But, as a total, unrest and dangers were reflected everywhere.
Jorcan and Narcal were discussing their policies about war.
Inexperienced Ayala is in the trap of the Shakaree. It was very difficult to survive for Ayala. Would she survive? That is the most important question. We are waiting anxiously for the next chapter.


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Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Once, the teller went to Mali, the second-poorest country in the world, to build a water-pumping station as an engineer. It was organised by the United Nations.
The teller saw the children were desperate for a piece of bread. He felt for them and tried to do something for them but others did not.
He named a child Kicky. He felt sad to see his demands, that was none other than a little food. Staffs used an abusive statements to them.
Once Kicky died. The narrator buried him but couldn't forget him.
Poverty is such a curse that can destroy your childhood and even your life. Those painful scenes are nicely drawn by the writer.
Write on!

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Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
It is a good short story. It fulfils almost all the characteristics of the short story. Except one. The number of characters is too many. That should be the minimum in numbers.
The central character of the story is none other than Ernest Campbell. He was patronizing a local bar called The Devil’s Chemistry. He was arrogant. Piece always hampered if he was present there, both at home and outside.
Another important character in the story is Stephen. Another arrogant and dark character. He murdered Ernest Campbell in jealousy and buried him in his garden.
Police rescued the body and the funeral began. Everybody admired him. He went well over all kinds of disrespect which he earned in life.
The pace is smooth and creating the interest for the next. It continues all through the story.
It's well written.
I hope that your good work will be continued in future, too.
Keep writing.

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Review of Trauma  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
It's wonderful rhyming poetry. Undoubtedly, it was an unfortunate incident, but it occurred in real life.
The teller showed enormous faith him in several times, but he broke it every time. He didn't care to honour her love and faith. Despite those dishonours, she couldn't leave him but felt pain.
Once, she didn't tolerate those and was in deep trauma.
He left her life. After a long time, she could recover from trauma, fortunately. After recovery, she wished to rebuild a strong future.
I especially like the positive end of what the poet does.
I can see a bright future for you.
Keep writing.

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Review of Eyes of Mist  
for entry "1 - Peaceful Days
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
The entire environment was silent. It was not calmness of peace. It was the calmness before the storm or in a burial ground. Everybody was waiting for an unknown danger. War could not be a solution. That situation indicated that truth once again.
Tamril was the author of that time. He came to the forest in his youth and never returned. He wrote about the fates of great lords and commanders in the war between Falamar and Shakaree so far. He stopped writing. However, after seeing Ayala, he realized that his writing was incomplete.

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Review of Erase  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
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Rated: E | (5.0)
In our daily lives, many things happen that shouldn't have happened. The betrayal of a lover is one of them that hurts us most. The teller experienced the same. His lover damaged her faith too much. She was very much upset. But, being an ideal human, she tried to begin a fresh journey and decided to move on with a positive mentality. That type of attitude is needed if you want to go forward and do not wish to stop.
I especially like the last line,
"but I'll move on and figure it out somehow."- this line tells the entire story.
Suggestion
You have written well. But, you used the 'None ' genre twice. It is considered a negative genre.
If you follow carefully, you will find several replacements. It's your experience. So why should you not replace it with the genre 'Experience'? It tells about the relationship. So, why should you not add the genre 'Relationship'?
It's a good performance.
Keep writing.

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Review of Eyes of Mist  
Review by Ashok Banerjee
In affiliation with The WDC Angel Army  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Most probably, the centre of the story will be the enmity between the Shakaree and the Falamar. We would see Ayala as the central character. She knew well that the Shakaree were evil. Despite that fact, she tried for an honourable peace settlement or tried to destroy them. We don't know what will happen ultimately. But, an exciting story is waiting for us. I assure you.


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