Very funny and cute. You had me giggling as I read.
We all at one time in our lives, meet, or are bothered by a bully. How do we handle it? Our parents are always saying: don't fight, don't hit your brother, turn the other cheek. What is right? Stand up for yourself or let them beat the crap out of you. You did good. Loved it. Super Sleuth
I enjoyed reading "Dragons Treasure." I was confused as to the line where you mention "golden curls"
I thought you were talking about a baby dragon being the treasure. I didn't know dragons had curls. Maybe I just misunderstood your meaning. super sleuth
Hi Shell, What a wonderful poem. Pain is what I feel also when I am not at my computer writing. I drive my husband crazy with all my creativity. He would rather I clean the house. LOL. I have only one problem with your poem I think it needs one more stanza. I read everything out loud to myself and as I read this poem I want to read more. Ginger
A lovely story well writen. I was a little baffled in the beginning as to why Richard wanted Chloe to investigate the disapearance of his books. She seemed to be just another inhabitant of the town, with no special detective skills. But aparently Richard knew more about Chloe than I did. It's a good thing that he did. Bravo on the ending. Super Sleuth
Being an old fan of Sherlock Holms I enjoyed your story emensly. I read the story out loud and in doing so I found myself repeating the words you wrote in a voice that was not my own. I sounded more mature, more sofisticated, much smarter than I truly am. I felt I was back in the early 1900 when people spoke with more sofistication than they do now. Reading out loud I could change my voice to fit the characters which makes for a much more enjoyable read. I found myself rooting for Mr. Bell to be Sherlock Holmes. You wrote this story so well I just had to give you a 5.0 rating. I hope you write a follow-up to this wonderful story. Super Sleuth
ALTHOUGH I DON'T HAVE 'FIBROMYALGIA', SOME TIMES I FEEL LIKE I DO. I THINK IT IS CALLED 'OLD TIMERS DISEASE' LOL BECAUSE THAT IS WHAT I AM. I CAN RELATE VERY WELL WITH THE STORY (WHICH YOU WROTE VERY WELL BY THE WAY) FOR I FIND MYSELF WALKING INTO A ROOM TO GET SOMETHING AND CAN'T REMEMBER WHY I AM THERE. YOU HAVE CLARIFIED THE DISEASE FOR MANY READERS, I'M SURE, AND MAYBE SOMEONE WHO KNOWS SOMEBODY WITH 'FIRROMYALGIA' WILL HAVE A LITTLE MORE COMPASSION FOR THAT PERSON BECAUSE OF YOUR STORY. I KNOW I DO. GINGER
Wonderful story line. Having the young girl come back all grown, was a nice touch and a fitting ending to a good story. Alcoholics can be very mean to those they love. Showing the pitfalls of too much smoking and too much drinking was a great idea. Hope it makes some people see that every thing they do has an effect on not only them but their family too. Ginger
Not to original but cute. Needs a black cat, or a broken pumpkin and a crackin the stone to make it a little scarrier. My favorite season is the fall because there is Halloween in October, so I enjoy all the witches and spiders that abound this time of the year. Good color choices. Super Sleuth
Extremely well writen. The tolling of the bells echoing the past is a wonderful way to bring the story line full circle to the present. The ghost of the Padre
relating the story to the young man clarifies the eerie emotional ties of the present to the past. Nicely done.
Super Sleuth
I think you write wonderful poems. I do however think your last two lines should have been But I'm not perfect, Mum and Dad,
And guess what: neither are you! It would leave a bigger impact. Super Sleuth
What an adorable story. What woman wouldn't give her
eye teeth to have a sentimential, considerate and loving husband like Joe. She, however, seemed like an unusual sort of person. He had to be a saint to put up with her oddities.........Super Sleuth
I love fairy tales or fantasy stories. Although this story line so far has been done before, I am sure you will come up with some interesting twists. I look forward to the continuation.There are however several spelling mistakes and your past and present tenses could use a little fix-up. Ex:Enourmous= enormous,
Un-mounted=dismounted, use the word reward instead of award. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Super Sleuth
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